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Marek Rojewski
post Dec 15 2008, 02:31 PM
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Hi there my GMC friends! It was a long time since I posted my first song, but well I write stuff only when something is wrong so... I always felt to be someone who doesn't fit anywhere, just like the clown.. I recently broke with my girlfriend after almost 5 years of being together, that brought the "jester feelings" again.. Hope You enjoy the song.

Gather people, gather round
words of wisdom shall You found
By the clown curse am I bound
Do You see how strange it sound?

[Chorus: maybe there is no need to sing it at that point]
Cap 'n' bells on my head
worn on it to hide what's in
dancing bauble light shall shed
on the truth and what it mean
[/Chorus]

Once I served a fair, proud king
he hath ordered me to sing
'bout the court and courtly lives
'bout the kingdoms might and rise

alas nobles hate the words
calling them a rumbling hordes
long had I evade their swords
wandering cross the windy fjords


Cap 'n' bells on my head
worn on it to hide what's in
dancing bauble light shall shed
on the truth and what it mean


Far away I found free men
they could even count to ten
Simple, pleasant were their lives
whole days looking to the skies

Yet riddles were like thoughts to them
they could never understand
beer, and mead, and wine they drank
oh so low their minds have sunk

Cap 'n' bells on my head
worn on it to hide what's in
dancing bauble light shall shed
on the truth and what it mean

Now I know why have I failed
Noone need the jesters word
Lust for knowing has long fade
this will be my one last chord


[These can be sang in the middle or at the end, didn't decide yet...]
Runes I cast to hear the answer
As I knew that fate's a dancer
What I asked, that was I granted
Lore of gods the spirits chanted

Two masks on one face You wear
tell which one You hate the most
choose the scholar if You dare
or prepare for even worse

Comments are more than welcome!

EDIT: Cap 'n' bells is the jesters hat, and bauble is the mockery rod he uses sometimes.. Just though some can don't know it;)

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post Dec 15 2008, 02:55 PM
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Man, great lyrics. That's a pretty deep song.
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Marek Rojewski
post Dec 16 2008, 03:17 PM
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Thanks for Your kind words, I think it is bit chaotic, some stuff could be added/removed but I don't like to change things after they are done..smile.gif


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post Dec 16 2008, 09:55 PM
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I like this. I mean, Gramatically alot of it isnt in perfect English but I managed to pull through.
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Two masks on one face You wear
tell which one You hate the most
choose the scholar if You dare
or prepare for even worse


That was probably your best stanza. I liked the whole story idea and how your related it back to your own relationship, that was clever. This could use some edits but overall it was a clever piece, and a emotional one to.

Nice.


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post Dec 16 2008, 09:59 PM
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Many thanks for the feedback:) I do my best to use proper English, but it isn't easy.. Still I like writing stuff in English more than in Polish...tongue.gif

I also like the part You quoted the most:)


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post Jan 6 2009, 01:25 AM
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I like how personal it is, Its done very well. But what I like most about it is its old english feel to it. The reference to the jester and your choice of words just gives it this ancient feel with a modern meaning. I like it alot. Reads like a poem more than a song, But I can see it going both ways.
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post Jan 6 2009, 01:34 AM
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Remember Marrillion?... "but even jesters cry..."

[polish]
glowa do gory, tez 8 lat temu zerwalem po 5 latach bycia razem. Fatum jakies, cycus?.... ale od 6 lat jestem zonaty smile.gif
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post Jan 6 2009, 01:37 AM
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Awesome lyrics mate, have that mystic vibe to them. Very well done! smile.gif


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post Jan 6 2009, 10:14 AM
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Many thanks for these great comments, these means a lot:) I know that it reads bit like a poem, in fact I just can't do it the other way:/ It is easier for me to write lyrics with those rhymes, than without them.

And yes Marillion is such a emotional band, what is more it is coming to Poland in February, so maybe see You at the concert?wink.gif


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