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Posted by: Kristofer Dahl Jan 24 2009, 10:18 PM

Germany is the land of metal - with bands like Blind Guardian, Rammstein etc, there's no doubt about it!

Here is a somewhat feeble attempt of mine to write a song in German - I hope all German speaking gmc'ers will listen to this one with their sense of humour turned ON! In gray you will find my wishful English translation

http://itunes.apple.com/album/mittwoch-single/id408916876

Montag, bin Ich so müde (Monday, I am so tired)
Montag, töte Ich ein Fliege (Monday, I killed a fly)

Dienstag, habe Ich das Haus gereinigt (Tuesday, I cleaned the house)
Dienstag...Ich gehe weiter (Tuesday...I move on)

Donnerstag, hörst du nicht das Donner? (Thursday, can't you hear the thunder?)
Donnerstag, Ich bin das Donner! (Thursday, I am the thunder!)

Freitag, ist nur einem Tag...nur einem Tag bleiben...einem Tag...
(Friday, is just a day...only one day left...one day)

Mittwoch! Habe Ich vergesst (Wednesday! I forgot about it)
Mittwoch! Mein Deutsch ist schlecht (Wednesday! My German is bad)
Mittwoch! Ist nicht die beste (Wednesday! Is not the best)
Sch****...habe Ich vergessen (S*** I forgot about it)

Samstag, heute bin Ich nicht so müde (Saturday, today I am not so tired)
Samstag, den ganzen Tag ist ein Fest! (Saturday, the whole day is a party!)

Sonntag..jetzt weise Ich! (Sunday...now I know!)
Ich habe eine Tag vergessen (I forgot about one day)

Mittwoch! Habe Ich vergesst (Wednesday! I forgot about it)
Mittwoch! Mein Deutsch ist schlecht (Wednesday! My German is bad)
Mittwoch! Ist nicht die beste (Wednesday! Is not the best)
Sch****...habe Ich vergessen (S*** I forgot about it)

SOLO

Montag, Dienstag, Donnerstag, Freitag, Samstag, Sonntag (Monday, Tuseday, Thursday, Friday, Saturday, Sunday)
Aber es ist nicht korrekt! (But that is not correct!)
Nein... Ich habe eine Tag vergessen...jaa (No...I forgot about one day...yeah)

Du weist welche Tag (You know what day)
Ich weise welche Tag ( I know what day)
Ihr...jaa! (They...yeah!)

Mittwoch! Habe Ich vergesst (Wednesday! I forgot about it)
Mittwoch! Mein Deutsch ist schlecht (Wednesday! My German is bad)
Mittwoch! Ist nicht die beste (Wednesday! Is not the best)
Ja! Noch einmal! (Yeah! One more time!)

Thanks a lot for listening!

Posted by: Canis Jan 24 2009, 10:22 PM

Awesome, Kris!! This is badassery at it's finest

Posted by: Kristofer Dahl Jan 24 2009, 10:23 PM

hehe thanks Canis - you are always very supportive, means a lot!

Posted by: Matt23 Jan 24 2009, 10:23 PM

Das song ist sehr gut, und Mittwoch ist eine schlect Tag. Great song Kris, really cool.

Posted by: utak3r Jan 24 2009, 10:25 PM

Hm, I always thought it's Scandinavian countries, who drag all the metal world

Posted by: Kristofer Dahl Jan 24 2009, 10:26 PM

Danke mein Freund!!

Posted by: Canis Jan 24 2009, 10:27 PM

Germany is honorary-Scandinavians

Posted by: utak3r Jan 24 2009, 10:28 PM

ah, I see

Posted by: JVM Jan 24 2009, 10:29 PM

I played this for my brother, he thought it was a new rammstein song

Posted by: Kristofer Dahl Jan 24 2009, 10:33 PM

wow thanks!! I must say Rammstein have really been my metal heroes the last year. I guess I should look out so I don't get too much influenced by them! Who knows I might end up learning German grammar...! (even though it's going to take a while of course)

Posted by: chast Jan 24 2009, 10:33 PM

That's a lot of fun Kris

Posted by: utak3r Jan 24 2009, 10:35 PM

Yeah, it really has this "tanz metal" touch

My thought:
While at PMed riffs it sounds really cool, those not muted riffs could have somewhat deeper sound, heavier, now it's... hm, can't find a proper english word.... too screamy?

Other than that I like this one

Posted by: edguy Jan 24 2009, 10:41 PM

Haha Kris ich kann gar nicht aufhören zu lachen
Was für ein geiler Song und dein Deutsch ist gar nicht so schlecht

English Version: Kris I can't stop laughing. What a great song and your german is not bad at all.

You should form a German Metal Band.

Posted by: Kristofer Dahl Jan 24 2009, 10:41 PM

ah you mean the chorus riff? Yes you are right I could try adding some muting there for a more staccato feel. Maybe something to think about for the live version! Thanks for the comment!

Posted by: berko Jan 24 2009, 10:42 PM

Haha, great Kris I like your pronunciation! I love the heavy riffing (and the super-solo)

Posted by: Kristofer Dahl Jan 24 2009, 10:43 PM

hehe thanks! I didn't verify this text with any German speaking person - so I am pretty sure it's full things German school teachers would hate, though!

Posted by: edguy Jan 24 2009, 10:52 PM

Ok if you want to know it in detail I can show you the mistakes
But not because I want to critise you it's only for your learning process

One mistake is here:

Donnerstag, hörst du nicht das Donner? You must say: "den Donner" not "das Donner"
Donnerstag, Ich bin das Donner! And here you have to say : "der Donner" I know it#s complicated.

There are a few more mistakes but I really have to say that its very good for the beginning.

Practice one more year and you become a famous German Metal guitarist who sing in german.

Posted by: Tolek Jan 24 2009, 10:52 PM

Awesome song and idea! There are a lot of grammar mistakes, but who cares? You´re not getting rated by your language knowledge but by your creativity. The last is extremely big. If you do a song in Japanese, I´m gonna eat a broom.

Posted by: Kristofer Dahl Jan 24 2009, 10:53 PM

Oh so "Donner" was a correct word at least - I am happy about that!!

Posted by: edguy Jan 24 2009, 10:55 PM

I have good idea. Maybe you can record the introduction video in all languages from our Members here.
A lot of work to do but I think it could be very funny.

Posted by: Kristofer Dahl Jan 24 2009, 10:56 PM

Ok I am already working on it!!

Posted by: utak3r Jan 24 2009, 10:57 PM

yeah... although I'd give him another BIG task... make a song in Polish how's about that? And not only write it, but SING it, hehe.....

Posted by: Kristofer Dahl Jan 24 2009, 10:59 PM

Yes - and the intro page would sense the IP addresses (location) and show intro video in right language accordingly.. cool idea!

Posted by: utak3r Jan 24 2009, 11:03 PM

haha... see you next year, Kris

Posted by: Tolek Jan 24 2009, 11:04 PM

Cool suggestion! You´ve got my vote.


Awesome.


Polish is very difficult to speak, especially that rolled "r". I´m a native polish speaker, but I´m far away from speaking it 100% correctly...

Posted by: Kristofer Dahl Jan 24 2009, 11:05 PM

hehe well we don't have to do it for all languages right away..! But yes you are right, we certainly have a whole bunch of other things to accomplish at GMC prior to this!

Posted by: jer Jan 24 2009, 11:06 PM

German metal bands rule....

Brainstorm, Primal Fear, Sinner, the ones you mentioned, it never ends!!!!!!!



And thankfully so.

Awesome tune man!!!!!

Posted by: utak3r Jan 24 2009, 11:08 PM

I know
I have many English native speakers firends an I know that for them Polish is just a bunch of letters "r" is only one of the problems... big groups of consonants are, too
"chrząszcz brzmi w trzcinie, w Szczebrzeszynie"

Posted by: Tolek Jan 24 2009, 11:17 PM

"Stól z powylamywanymi nogami" I think this is wrong, isn´t it? Or even "Szczecin" is a challenge for a lot of people.

Posted by: Trond Vold Jan 24 2009, 11:47 PM

What a kickass song!
The sound and production is improving for each song

Posted by: Ivan Milenkovic Jan 24 2009, 11:56 PM

Sounds like Rammstein! Awesome! \m/

Posted by: Pedja Simovic Jan 25 2009, 12:01 AM

Sounds great Kris !

Wonder whats next language you will use for your song ?

Posted by: Kristofer Dahl Jan 25 2009, 12:04 AM

Thanks a lot guys - it's great to get your feedback on this!

@ Trond - thanks, yes I try to learn a little more about the production part with every song! I am very happy you notice

@ Pedja - there is a risk I might switch back to English... but you never know!!

Posted by: skennington Jan 25 2009, 12:42 AM

Awesome tune Kris, was that standard tuning? I would love to hear it dropped!


Edit: Now that I listen again..Sounds like it is dropped..

Posted by: Disturbed21 Jan 25 2009, 02:02 AM

Awesome Song Kris. Sounds like you've put a lot of rammstein style in this one.

Posted by: sigma7 Jan 25 2009, 02:15 AM

that is actually pretty impressive really rammstein

Posted by: ZakkWylde Jan 25 2009, 02:30 AM

--I gave it a quick grammar check-- Awesome work Kris!


Montag, bin Ich so müde (Monday, I am so tired)
Montag, töte Ich eine Fliege (Monday, I killed a fly)

Dienstag, habe Ich das Haus gereinigt (Tuesday, I cleaned the house)
Dienstag...Ich gehe weiter (Tuesday...I move on)

Donnerstag, hörst du nicht den Donner? (Thursday, can't you hear the thunder?)
Donnerstag, Ich bin der Donner! (Thursday, I am the thunder!)

Freitag, ist nur einem Tag...nur ein Tag bleibt...ein Tag...
(Friday, is just a day...only one day left...one day)

Mittwoch! Habe Ich vergessen (Wednesday! I forgot about it)
Mittwoch! Mein Deutsch ist schlecht (Wednesday! My German is bad)
Mittwoch! Ist nicht das Beste (Wednesday! Is not the best)
Sch****...habe Ich vergessen (S*** I forgot about it)

Samstag, heute bin Ich nicht so müde (Saturday, today I am not so tired)
Samstag, der ganze Tag ist ein Fest! (Saturday, the whole day is a party!)

Sonntag..jetzt weiß Ich! (Sunday...now I know!)
Ich habe einen Tag vergessen (I forgot about one day)

Mittwoch! Habe Ich vergessen (Wednesday! I forgot about it)
Mittwoch! Mein Deutsch ist schlecht (Wednesday! My German is bad)
Mittwoch! Ist nicht das Beste (Wednesday! Is not the best)
Sch****...habe Ich vergessen (S*** I forgot about it)

SOLO

Montag, Dienstag, Donnerstag, Freitag, Samstag, Sonntag (Monday, Tuseday, Thursday, Friday, Saturday, Sunday)
Aber es ist nicht korrekt! (But that is not correct!)
Nein... Ich habe einen Tag vergessen...jaa (No...I forgot about one day...yeah)

Du weißt welcher Tag (You know what day)
Ich weiß welcher Tag ( I know what day)
Ihr...jaa! (They...yeah!)

Mittwoch! Habe Ich vergessen (Wednesday! I forgot about it)
Mittwoch! Mein Deutsch ist schlecht (Wednesday! My German is bad)
Mittwoch! Ist nicht das Beste (Wednesday! Is not the best)
Sch****...habe Ich vergessen (S*** I forgot about it)

Posted by: Gabriel Leopardi Jan 25 2009, 02:34 AM

Man.. this is awesome! Your voice here is amazing and the riffing is killer. The sound is also very good. I'll download the wav file to try if I can do a better mastering.. however the final mix that you uploaded sounds very loud and powerfull.

Posted by: Velvet Roger Jan 25 2009, 06:02 AM

Nice tune Kris, keep 'm comming

Posted by: Kristofer Dahl Jan 25 2009, 11:35 AM

Perfect Zakk - this will be very useful - as I am thinking about maybe doing some kind of video with subtitles. Thanks! (Oh and of course I am always happy to improve my German grammar )



Wow Gabriel awesome to hear this from you!! Thanks! It would be absolute killer to hear your take on the master! ( I don't have any top-of-the-line maximiser + I couldn't really make use of a multiband compressor on this master... Still I feel that in the right hands, these two things might make the master better)

Posted by: SonofDestiny Jan 25 2009, 11:46 AM

Hahahah this is awesome Kris The high pitched screams... how do you do that?!

Posted by: kaznie_NL Jan 25 2009, 11:49 AM

lol, it's fun

Posted by: Kristofer Dahl Jan 25 2009, 11:53 AM

Thanks!

I think that I have learned to do these screams by singing in falsetto (normal soft falsetto) - I always used to do that when there was a song on the radio with a female singer, as that was the only way to nail the high notes.

Much later when I realised that I wanted to try to develop a vocal technique for rock/metal - I used the same falsetto "technique" with lots of guts/stomach/diaphragm (basically scream like you are dying but without hurting your throat).

Posted by: Toni Suominen Jan 25 2009, 11:54 AM

This is priceless Kris, great and funny song!

Posted by: Kristofer Dahl Jan 25 2009, 11:58 AM

Thanks - it's awesome to hear this from our Metal-Toni!

Posted by: Marek Rojewski Jan 25 2009, 12:00 PM

Kris \m/\m/ we need to form Your fanclub!:P Really great vocals and riffs.

Posted by: Kristofer Dahl Jan 25 2009, 12:33 PM

Sounds like a very cool idea - not sure what happens in a "fan club" though, but I will look it up! Thanks!

Posted by: audiopaal Jan 25 2009, 12:54 PM

Hehe, great song mate
Gave me some eerie flashbacks though, when I had german grammar in school

Posted by: Rated Htr Jan 25 2009, 02:11 PM

Great take Kris ^^ Love it

Posted by: audiopaal Jan 25 2009, 02:26 PM

Mind if I experiment with mastering your song as well?

Posted by: David Wallimann Jan 25 2009, 02:47 PM

This is killer Kris!
I always enjoy hearing your stuff man, it's always high production and very professional sounding.
Awesome!
By the way, what did you use for drums here?

Posted by: Iluha Jan 25 2009, 02:56 PM

That was epic!

German sounds aggresive even if the words are rediculous lol

Posted by: Siggum Jan 25 2009, 03:06 PM

Great touch of humor you add in your songs, and offcourse, killer riffs and vocals, i can imagine u've put alot of hard work in improving your singing, and it's definately turning out awsome

Posted by: Kristofer Dahl Jan 25 2009, 04:57 PM

No on the contrary - that would be an honour!


Thanks David!

I used EZ drummer with the standard drums that come with it, I used its' multichannel function to fatten things up with eq, compression and a little reverb.

That wasn't enough though - so I triggered/dubbed the snare and kick drum with some really fat samples. I then moved these samples so that they come sliiightly after the EZ drummer hit - that way I got a fatter sound + I preserved humanize function of ez drummer.

Exactly! That is the reason I decided to try and do it in German, there is no way you could get that from English - without inventing a pronunciation system of your own (hey what a cool idea by the way! )

Posted by: enforcer Jan 25 2009, 06:31 PM

Lyrics are just like Friday I am in love from Cure

oh just kidding

Man, Kris, seriously this is great!

Posted by: Fran Jan 25 2009, 06:38 PM

Cool song, sounds a LOT like Rammstein Kris, both the riffing, the voice, the GERMAN of course , I don't understand a word, but it sounds good

Posted by: Kristofer Dahl Jan 25 2009, 06:47 PM

hehe!


hehe yes I am a die-hard Rammstein fan!!

Posted by: Lian Gerbino Jan 25 2009, 07:03 PM

wow man!!! this song is awesome!!! so rammstein!!! I dont understand a word in german! but I readed the traslation so funny kris!
freakin' wednesday!!! I hate that day too!!

I gree 100 %!!! wanna play in the band ok? hahaha



yes! it would be great. I think the mix is already really powerful. but I wanna see what you can do on this

Posted by: Kristofer Dahl Jan 25 2009, 08:09 PM

Sure thing Lian - I know that you are a die hard Rammstein rocker!! (to anybody who doesn't know, http://www.guitarmasterclass.net/search_results.php?formSearch=Rammstein)

Posted by: Gabriel Leopardi Jan 26 2009, 12:50 AM

Hi! This is my first try on the mastering of this song.. please tell me what you hear...

 Mittwoch_Master_1.zip ( 43.14MB ) : 259

Posted by: skennington Jan 26 2009, 01:16 AM

43mb's, this has got to sound good! Downloading....

Sounds great Gabriel, if you don't mind me asking, what all did you add to the master? I can hear some eq and maybe a bit of re verb... Kris' vocals sound more up in the mix as well.

Posted by: besip Jan 26 2009, 01:43 AM

Niceeeee i'm like your tone..you allready sound like ramstain
looks like you start have really fun with singing

Posted by: Gabriel Leopardi Jan 26 2009, 03:19 AM

I used Izotope Ozone 3 for this one. It has many great tools. Bassically I used the Eq (I incressed the bass frequencies to make it sound fatter), I compressed the whole mix and also the bass frequencies range with the multiband compressor (just a bit), then I excited the higher frequencies in the harmonic exciter section. And maybe some other little things that I don't remember know.

Posted by: Kristofer Dahl Jan 26 2009, 09:53 AM

Yes!! This is better - when comparing to the mp3 it seems this one has more bottom, thanks Gabriel!

The only thing which might have stood out stronger on the mp3 is the stereo image (I used a free tool called http://www.fluxhome.com/products/Freewares/stereotool.html). Not completely sure though - I am learning a lot from this!

What does everyone else think?

Posted by: MickeM Jan 26 2009, 10:04 AM

Excellent ! Vey Rammsteinich ...and with some synths too

Posted by: Wabba Jan 26 2009, 10:15 AM

Awesome Kris! Sounds very much like rammstein.

How about making a lesson about this?

Posted by: Mandos Jan 26 2009, 10:31 AM

This is awesome Kris! You really captured the essence of Rammstein.

Posted by: PanicProne Jan 26 2009, 10:37 PM

I've gotta say for once I really enjoyed your lunacy! And you really managed a german metal/rammstein-ish feel there. And I'm kinda suprised your growling was this good! Anyway, a great song to cheer someone up with. Brings out some smiles.

Posted by: superize Jan 27 2009, 01:06 PM

Sounds alot like Rammstein

Posted by: Mrblomme Jan 28 2009, 09:49 AM

This is so in to Rammstein!
Really great man, my motherlanguage is Dutch and it is a bit like German so I understand a lot of things.

Posted by: Emir Hot Jan 28 2009, 10:17 AM

I've just heard this. hahaha killer song. This could go on charts

Posted by: utak3r Jan 28 2009, 10:45 AM

hm? I didn't hear any growling here?...

Posted by: Sensible Jones Jan 28 2009, 12:39 PM

Das ist sehr Gut, nein????

Posted by: audiopaal Jan 29 2009, 12:04 AM

Here's my go at mastering this track

 Mittwoch_Master_1.wav ( 76.04MB ) : 216


Whaddayathink?

Posted by: Kristofer Dahl Jan 29 2009, 08:29 PM

Wow at a first listen this sounds very good, well balanced and heavy - what did you do with it?



hehe thanks Emir... I just need to figure out how to get it there!!

Posted by: helo92 Feb 5 2009, 08:40 PM

really cool tune man
i like the rammstein sound

Posted by: Kristofer Dahl Feb 5 2009, 08:49 PM

Thanks Helo!

Posted by: Red Apr 21 2009, 04:02 PM

How come i never seen this?

This is a really great song, one of your best