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Posted by: iainsteward May 11 2008, 11:53 AM

Another one, any constructive comments welcomed.....

I woke up this morning,
to an empty space where you once lay,
I didnt know where you were,
Or why you went away,

Was it something I did to hurt you,
Did I say something to make you cry,
I thought it was love that I saw,
When I looked into your eyes,

Chorus
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There's nothing I can do,
I don't know where you are,
I don't know how near or even how far.....Your Gone!
I wish you would come back and talk to me,
Tell me what it is that made you leave,
Your Gone, Your Gone!

What can I say to make you come back,
Is there anything I can do,
To get our love back on track,
I miss you, I do..

All I want is for you to be back,
where you belong
Just give me a chance to show you,
That my love for you is strong,

Without your love, I feel like I have died,
Won't you come back,
Take away the emptiness I feel inside,
Give me warmth & Love in the place I want to be,
Wrapped in your arms for all eternity.

Posted by: The Uncreator May 11 2008, 01:36 PM

Yet again, I like these. They have great structure, each line supports itself very well, and the flow is smooth, without any unneeded breaks or pauses.

Posted by: Eat-Sleep-andJam May 11 2008, 03:26 PM

It was nice Iian

Seems like its unfinished, would make a nice song though

Posted by: Hisham Al-Sanea May 11 2008, 09:53 PM

nice lyrics mate