 A Heart Of Treachery |
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 Apr 28 2008, 01:26 AM
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A Heart Of Treachery The rain fills the streets As the sun goes down Pattering so hard, and yet I cannot hear a sound I walk among the shadows And I feel from the light Tattered and torn I grace the night The reason I’m alone The reason I exist So many questions But too many I dismiss I lie awake at night My purpose puzzles me The people I once loved I can no longer see As these days pass by The looks I have received But these are the people The ones I have deceived Never trust your life In those you think you love They are the soldiers sent from Hell Not the Angels from above The ones you think you hate This is who you consign The ones without the reasoning To take what was once mine © Ryley Gartshore --------------------------------------- This is a song I wrote a few days ago during class about a man who is betrayed by a person he thought he loved. The tune was inspired by the music of "The Clouding" and "Watching Over Me" and the lyrics a little by "I Died For You" (all by Iced Earth) There is no real chorus to this song. Please give feedback as usual  Thanks --------------------  But still I want answers, what's the point, what does all this mean? |
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Apr 28 2008, 01:27 AM
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 Fire Up The Blades, Moderator  Group: GMC Senior Posts: 8.932 Joined: 6-March 07 From: St. Petersburg, Florida Member No.: 1.304 |
I love this one
QUOTE The reason I’m alone The reason I exist So many questions But too many I dismiss This is the kind of writing that has the strength to reach out to everyone, great job!
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Apr 28 2008, 01:28 AM
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QUOTE (The Uncreator @ Apr 28 2008, 12:27 AM)  I love this one This is the kind of writing that has the strength to reach out to everyone, great job! Thanks many Uncreator It really means alot
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Apr 28 2008, 11:37 PM
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 Instructor Group: Passive Posts: 4.085 Joined: 19-October 07 From: middle east / lebanon Member No.: 3.084 |
i am sure a 100% you have a good talent for writing a songs
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Apr 28 2008, 11:42 PM
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QUOTE I lie awake at night My purpose puzzles me The people I once loved I can no longer see That part was beautiful. I can totally relate to that. You really know how to hit a brother where it hurts  Keep writing songs, you have a real gift for lyrics!
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 "Find something worth dying for... ...And live for it"-The Uncreator |
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Apr 29 2008, 01:45 AM
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GMC:er Group: Members Posts: 1.118 Joined: 23-December 06 From: Canada! Member No.: 1.005 |
QUOTE (Hisham Al-Sanea @ Apr 28 2008, 10:37 PM) i am sure a 100% you have a good talent for writing a songs QUOTE (Eat-Sleep-andJam @ Apr 28 2008, 10:42 PM) That part was beautiful. I can totally relate to that. You really know how to hit a brother where it hurts Keep writing songs, you have a real gift for lyrics!Thank you guys I'm glad to be getting positive critisicm
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