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post Apr 28 2008, 01:26 AM
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A Heart Of Treachery
The rain fills the streets
As the sun goes down
Pattering so hard, and yet
I cannot hear a sound

I walk among the shadows
And I feel from the light
Tattered and torn
I grace the night

The reason I’m alone
The reason I exist
So many questions
But too many I dismiss

I lie awake at night
My purpose puzzles me
The people I once loved
I can no longer see

As these days pass by
The looks I have received
But these are the people
The ones I have deceived

Never trust your life
In those you think you love
They are the soldiers sent from Hell
Not the Angels from above

The ones you think you hate
This is who you consign
The ones without the reasoning
To take what was once mine


© Ryley Gartshore
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This is a song I wrote a few days ago during class about a man who is betrayed by a person he thought he loved. The tune was inspired by the music of "The Clouding" and "Watching Over Me" and the lyrics a little by "I Died For You" (all by Iced Earth) There is no real chorus to this song. Please give feedback as usual smile.gif
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post Apr 28 2008, 01:27 AM
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I love this one
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The reason I’m alone
The reason I exist
So many questions
But too many I dismiss


This is the kind of writing that has the strength to reach out to everyone, great job! smile.gif
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post Apr 28 2008, 01:28 AM
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QUOTE (The Uncreator @ Apr 28 2008, 12:27 AM) *
I love this one


This is the kind of writing that has the strength to reach out to everyone, great job! smile.gif


Thanks many Uncreator smile.gif It really means alot


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post Apr 28 2008, 11:37 PM
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i am sure a 100% you have a good talent for writing a songs


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post Apr 28 2008, 11:42 PM
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I lie awake at night
My purpose puzzles me
The people I once loved
I can no longer see


That part was beautiful. I can totally relate to that. smile.gif

You really know how to hit a brother where it hurts laugh.gif Keep writing songs, you have a real gift for lyrics!


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post Apr 29 2008, 01:45 AM
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QUOTE (Hisham Al-Sanea @ Apr 28 2008, 10:37 PM) *
i am sure a 100% you have a good talent for writing a songs



QUOTE (Eat-Sleep-andJam @ Apr 28 2008, 10:42 PM) *
That part was beautiful. I can totally relate to that. smile.gif

You really know how to hit a brother where it hurts laugh.gif Keep writing songs, you have a real gift for lyrics!


Thank you guys smile.gif I'm glad to be getting positive critisicm


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