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post Mar 4 2009, 04:17 AM
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Is there a place out there,
Where we all can forget about,
The killing and the war,
And live in peace.
Where casualties don't feel the need,
To stay around.
Where we can bury the dead,
And let there sins lay in the ground.

Is there a place out there,
Where love doesn't come so cheap,
Its not faked or abused, Its far more deep.
It stains the soul of you and I.
A brilliant epidemic,
A worlds desire.

Is there a place out there,
Where she can find her inner piece of mind,
Holding onto the future,
Leave the past behind.

Is there a person out there,
Who I can face the world with,
Hand in hand ,
We'll stand.
Fighting for a lifetime.
Forever by your side.


Is there hope out there,
Hope that maybe two lifes will collide,
Standing against the world.
Side by Side.

Is there a place out there,
Where people can hang onto their dreams,
Forgetting all the hate in their life.
Take me to this place!
Where doubt is drowned by certainty.
Take me,
To this place I'd like to be
.



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post Mar 4 2009, 08:04 PM
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Is there a place out there,
Where we all can forget about,
The killing and the war,
And live in peace.
Where casualties don't feel the need,
To stay around.
Where we can bury the dead,
And let there sins lay in the ground.

I see the time for love stories and depression as ended smile.gif. Let's talk of war laugh.gif. This part after I read it, stroke me down like it was one of those prologue entrances sayings from a movie, nice job smile.gif

Is there a place out there,
Where love doesn't come so cheap,
Its not faked or abused, Its far more deep.
It stains the soul of you and I.
A brilliant epidemic,
A worlds desire.

ok, I was wrong, here's love laugh.gif. I'm not very keen on the use of you and I, more adequate would be "you and me" for me atleast, I know it's an attempt to be eloquent and not use us, atleast, that's what I wanna think laugh.gif.

Is there a place out there,
Where she can find her inner piece of mind,
Holding onto the future,
Leave the past behind.

Wishing for her hapiness now are we? tongue.gif

Is there a person out there,
Who I can face the world with,
Hand in hand ,
We'll stand.
Fighting for a lifetime.
Forever by your side.

Wishing for your own now smile.gif

Is there hope out there,
Hope that maybe two lifes will collide,
Standing against the world.
Side by Side.

Is there a place out there,
Where people can hang onto their dreams,
Forgetting all the hate in their life.
Take me to this place!
Where doubt is drowned by certainty.
Take me,
To this place I'd like to be
.


Wishing for everyone's hapiness, perfect world...Uthopy tongue.gif...The relation to war at first was a bit different from what I'd think, so you consider social relationships to be a war where some people suffer and can't rest in peace


It's been a while, but never to late smile.gif

Welcome back mate biggrin.gif

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Marek Rojewski
post Mar 4 2009, 08:26 PM
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I was wondering what has happened to everyone:) I am not too good at commenting lyrics, I think You did a good job on it, it has a good structure and good "balance of thoughts". It is also good to hear You are feeling better, although I don't think there is such place You are talking about...Life always goes on, once You are in "the gaining place", other time in "the casualty zone"...


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post Mar 4 2009, 09:45 PM
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QUOTE (Rated Htr @ Mar 4 2009, 11:04 AM) *
Is there a place out there,
Where we all can forget about,
The killing and the war,
And live in peace.
Where casualties don't feel the need,
To stay around.
Where we can bury the dead,
And let there sins lay in the ground.

I see the time for love stories and depression as ended smile.gif. Let's talk of war laugh.gif. This part after I read it, stroke me down like it was one of those prologue entrances sayings from a movie, nice job smile.gif

Is there a place out there,
Where love doesn't come so cheap,
Its not faked or abused, Its far more deep.
It stains the soul of you and I.
A brilliant epidemic,
A worlds desire.

ok, I was wrong, here's love laugh.gif. I'm not very keen on the use of you and I, more adequate would be "you and me" for me atleast, I know it's an attempt to be eloquent and not use us, atleast, that's what I wanna think laugh.gif.

Is there a place out there,
Where she can find her inner piece of mind,
Holding onto the future,
Leave the past behind.

Wishing for her hapiness now are we? tongue.gif

Is there a person out there,
Who I can face the world with,
Hand in hand ,
We'll stand.
Fighting for a lifetime.
Forever by your side.

Wishing for your own now smile.gif

Is there hope out there,
Hope that maybe two lifes will collide,
Standing against the world.
Side by Side.

Is there a place out there,
Where people can hang onto their dreams,
Forgetting all the hate in their life.
Take me to this place!
Where doubt is drowned by certainty.
Take me,
To this place I'd like to be
.


Wishing for everyone's hapiness, perfect world...Uthopy tongue.gif...The relation to war at first was a bit different from what I'd think, so you consider social relationships to be a war where some people suffer and can't rest in peace


It's been a while, but never to late smile.gif

Welcome back mate biggrin.gif

I appreciate the crit. biggrin.gif I will crit your lasted a little later.


QUOTE (Marek Rojewski @ Mar 4 2009, 11:26 AM) *
I was wondering what has happened to everyone:) I am not too good at commenting lyrics, I think You did a good job on it, it has a good structure and good "balance of thoughts". It is also good to hear You are feeling better, although I don't think there is such place You are talking about...Life always goes on, once You are in "the gaining place", other time in "the casualty zone"...


I havnt gone anywhere, just kind been a little rough for awhile.
I wait for events to happen, and then I write
So if you dont see me for a little while, nothing tragic is happening laugh.gif

You nailed the metaphor pretty dead on, but some of the things I write you wouldnt knowor understand unless I told you the story.

Thanks guys biggrin.gif


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