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 Sep 9 2009, 02:00 PM
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 Learning Roadie  Group: Members Posts: 783 Joined: 6-September 07 From: Newcastle Member No.: 2.713  |
heyhey, another song by me... im just after comments about the structure of the song/lyrics/etc, i know the recording isnt perfect (timing issues, bas mix, vocals very... ug, etc) but I thought you guys could give me some insight as to wether I should keep persuing this song. im not sure if I like it 100% yet, maybe some outside comments could sway me either way?
cheers Chris http://soundclick.com/share?songid=8075598 you know the people that play this game you know the people that drive you insane cant walk cant talk or die today sit there, wont you hear what i have to say and you might crumble and just cant take no more and you might tumble ill watch you hit the floor yea, gonna hunt you down gonna watch you drown lead you astray your so far away your so far away running through that mind could you be so blind leave it for today your so far away your so far away you know the way you can share this blame you know the way itll never be the same cant hide i tried to lie today follow me, today were gonna do it my way dont know all the things that you became dont know what to say when you call your name cant chase, this place i try today just deny, keep going cause im here to stay and you might crumble and just cant take no more and you might tumble ill watch you hit the floor yea, gonna hunt you down gonna watch you drown lead you astray your so far away your so far away running through that mind could you be so blind leave it for today your so far away your so far away SOLO yea, gonna hunt you down gonna watch you drown lead you astray your so far away your so far away running through that mind could you be so blind leave it for today your so far away your so far away This post has been edited by muntahunta: Sep 9 2009, 02:22 PM -------------------- Guitars: Epiphone Les Paul Standard w/ Dual EMG 81 Pickups. Size 11 Strings. Ibanez GRG170DX w/ Scallopd frets 17-24 - w/ Dimebucker and APH-1. Tanglewood TW28 STR DLX CE INDIANA Acoustic Guitar NEW: Dean Deceiver w/ EMG 81/EMG 85 Pickups Effects: Pod XT Live AND Pod X3 Live Recording: Cubase SX3 My Bands Myspace Act Of Silence Songs: Fly From The Inside (Cover) So Far Away Down Break The Cycle Never Again (Cover) Crash Wake Me More Acoustic Songs: Chris Kerswell Soundclick Page Check out Munta's Step By Step Songwriting Lesson |
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Sep 9 2009, 02:11 PM
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 Learning Rock Star Group: Members Posts: 1.982 Joined: 15-October 07 From: Leiria, Portugal Member No.: 3.056 |
Have to admit, that at first I thought that it would be a ballad in acoustic, by the name. As you said, the recording needs work, especially the drums which are killing my ears
 Love the chorus, I think the song has good chemistry...It does resemble Nickelback with some more speed. I only feel sorry that the guitars don't show their true power to unleash the beast in the song. Come back with better recordings please  As for the structure it sounds great, the lyrics, you better post them, it's easier 
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Sep 9 2009, 02:23 PM
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Learning Roadie Group: Members Posts: 783 Joined: 6-September 07 From: Newcastle Member No.: 2.713 |
done, thanks for the comments man
yea, i need a studio lol, this bedroom recording totally doesnt work for anything heavy lol -------------------- Guitars: Epiphone Les Paul Standard w/ Dual EMG 81 Pickups. Size 11 Strings. Ibanez GRG170DX w/ Scallopd frets 17-24 - w/ Dimebucker and APH-1. Tanglewood TW28 STR DLX CE INDIANA Acoustic Guitar NEW: Dean Deceiver w/ EMG 81/EMG 85 Pickups Effects: Pod XT Live AND Pod X3 Live Recording: Cubase SX3 My Bands Myspace Act Of Silence Songs: Fly From The Inside (Cover) So Far Away Down Break The Cycle Never Again (Cover) Crash Wake Me More Acoustic Songs: Chris Kerswell Soundclick Page Check out Munta's Step By Step Songwriting Lesson |
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Sep 9 2009, 02:31 PM
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Learning Rock Star Group: Members Posts: 1.982 Joined: 15-October 07 From: Leiria, Portugal Member No.: 3.056 |
yes it does, you just gotta know how to do it, not that i'm the best one to give such advice
Lyrics also seemed Nickelback related...The old rhythm stuff...Still, it works well inside the context of the music, now bring me some new recordings 
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Sep 9 2009, 02:32 PM
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Learning Roadie Group: Members Posts: 783 Joined: 6-September 07 From: Newcastle Member No.: 2.713 |
QUOTE (Rated Htr @ Sep 9 2009, 02:31 PM)  yes it does, you just gotta know how to do it, not that i'm the best one to give such advice Lyrics also seemed Nickelback related...The old rhythm stuff...Still, it works well inside the context of the music, now bring me some new recordings haha, YES SIR!
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Sep 9 2009, 11:55 PM
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 Instructor  Group: GMC Instructor Posts: 25.396 Joined: 20-November 07 From: Belgrade, Serbia Member No.: 3.341 |
Great song man, I like it a lot!
The first groove kinda feels like Manowar a bit!
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Sep 10 2009, 07:17 AM
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 Competitions Coordinator - Up the Irons  Group: GMC Senior Posts: 5.289 Joined: 17-February 08 From: Stavanger, Norway Member No.: 4.276 |
Good recording and great song!
The drums and guitars could use a little tweaking/mixing, but the sound is pretty good! Your singing is great as always Thanks for sharing
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Sep 10 2009, 08:25 AM
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That is some kick ass singing!!!!!!!!!!!! Really like this tune...
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Sep 10 2009, 09:13 PM
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I really enjoyed this song. Maybe the solo part can be more interesting if you use some exotic scale. But this is perfect.
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Sep 11 2009, 04:35 PM
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Vocals remind me of Skid Row. Nice.
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Sep 13 2009, 01:36 PM
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Learning Roadie Group: Members Posts: 783 Joined: 6-September 07 From: Newcastle Member No.: 2.713 |
wow, skid row!!! thats a new one
Ive had Shinedown, Metallica, Nickelback and Motorhead from this song, but your the first with skid row thanks man
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Sep 13 2009, 02:07 PM
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Great voice man, reminds me of some 80's metal bands
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