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Jesse
post Apr 24 2011, 02:01 PM
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Hey guys,
I've written some lyrics, just parts, when I get inspired, and this is just more of e poem, on which I would love some feedback.
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A bright darkness and a dim light,
realisation sets all unimportant things aside.
My heart bearing the weight of the night,
a fading light, almost out of sight.
Finding the remnants of your power and might,
the soul preparing for the final fight.
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Remember, I don't really think these things trough, or really think about how it should go, often, a line or 2 just pops into my head.

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post Apr 24 2011, 02:16 PM
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I like it. Your ryhming is very strong. When i try to write lyrics i do same as you. A line pops into my head then i write the rest of it according to that smile.gif

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post Apr 24 2011, 02:19 PM
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Thank's:) Maybe we can share some lyrics some time (msn or something;P) I see your an ac/dc fan too? I saw em in Ahoy last year!:D Best time of my life! (probably)


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post Apr 24 2011, 02:27 PM
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Thank's:) Maybe we can share some lyrics some time (msn or something;P) I see your an ac/dc fan too? I saw em in Ahoy last year!:D Best time of my life! (probably)



I'd like that smile.gif And yeah i am hardcore AC/DC fan biggrin.gif Unfortunately i've never got a chance to see them live sad.gif


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