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superize
post Feb 10 2012, 09:39 PM
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I have been spending the night working on some lyrics for a song for my band.

I just want some feedback on the writing if you guys think that these lyrics can work in a song

Verse

Now is the time to wake up and see
that the world is not what it used to be
we got fight to make things right
to make a stand and defend our land
now grab you axe and turn your volume to max
and you play until your fingers bleed
rock is the music that will make us smile
now let us party till the end of time.

Refrain

Raise your fist in the air
we will be rock all night and day X2



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post Feb 10 2012, 10:21 PM
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Verse

Now is the time to wake up and see
that the world is not what it used to be
we gotta' fight to make things right
to make a stand and defend our land
now grab your axe and turn your volume to the max
play until your fingers bleed
rock is the music that will make us smile
now let us party 'till the end of time.

Refrain

Raise your fist in the air
we will be rocking all night and day X2

Just cleaned-up the wording a bit smile.gif Nice ideas!

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post Feb 10 2012, 10:43 PM
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QUOTE (dark dude @ Feb 10 2012, 10:21 PM) *
Verse

Now is the time to wake up and see
that the world is not what it used to be
we gotta' fight to make things right
to make a stand and defend our land
now grab your axe and turn your volume to the max
play until your fingers bleed
rock is the music that will make us smile
now let us party 'till the end of time.

Refrain

Raise your fist in the air
we will be rocking all night and day X2

Just cleaned-up the wording a bit smile.gif Nice ideas!


Thanks man i am not that god writing in english


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El Fortinero
post Feb 11 2012, 02:26 AM
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in what kind of music will you apply it? it sounds to me like hair or power metal lyric


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post Feb 11 2012, 08:39 AM
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QUOTE (El Fortinero @ Feb 11 2012, 02:26 AM) *
in what kind of music will you apply it? it sounds to me like hair or power metal lyric


It will be more like hair metal music


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