Link to the lesson:
http://www.guitarmasterclass.net/ls/in-the...-black-sabbath/

My gear:
Schecter Devil Custom + Line 6 Toneport GX




I must say I am quite unhappy with this take, but after quite a few recording takes, each of which sounded worse than the one before, I gave up I am learning to stand and play, still it is quite different than while seating.

Any criticism is welcome

PS: Part of my head was unfortunately cut in the recording process as You can see

I commented on this in another one of your entries here already, but PLEASE turn down your distortion! You are using so much gain that in the end your sound has zero attack, less is definitely more here!
Playing wise the take is ok, but still needs some work, timing is not optimal, bending is not in tune and also your dumping of "unwanted" strings can still improve. But don't worry, I am sure you can improve all this with just a bit of practice.

Definitely less gain. Vibrato should be from the wrist, not from the finger. You did a pretty good job overall but there is a room for improvement. You somehow don't look relaxed 100% and we need to see confidence in playing. Good work anyway

Well played, but less overdrive will make it more defined.

A little more practice man with this one as well bro, almost there. 5.6