Hi Mad! Great to see you working hard!
I think that you are getting close to master this technique and lesson but there is still room to improvements. I think that there are basically two things to mark to mark on this take:
1. Be careful with the pitch of your vibrato in the first section. Sometimes you reach the next chromatic note and sounds like out of tune.
2. The rhythm of your vibrato isn't tight as it happens with the original lesson. This makes that your technique doesn't sound consistent and related with the backing's groove.
For both things, the best would be to keep on practicing this lesson over the original take, trying to compare pitches and the rhythm used. Then get back again to practice just with the backing and we'll see if there are improvements. Please keep me updated using our thread.