Hi Guys,
Thanks a lot for your feedback!
I really want to take it to the next level and your feedback proves to be very helpful.
QUOTE (Kristofer Dahl)
What do you think about this take? (when comparing to your previous)
- I think it's definitely more melodic (perhaps the most melodic piece i ve ever played so far) and it shows some signs of soul compared to previous work.
- Another huge difference is that I can distinguish the different phrases and responses. The last phrase sounds a bit vague though.
- Another thing is that each phrase has enough room to breath followed by big silence gaps, but I 'm also concerned if the large silence gaps may cause the audience to loose interest.
- Timing is improved but still need to work on it. I guess it comes with experience and playing time.
Based on your feedback I also noticed the following:
It is still lacking expression tools and dynamics. I use only 1 slide, a few bends and some badly played vibratos. I will work more on the vibrato lesson that Gabriel sent me.
From Cosmin's feedback I noticed also that the solo does not use much of the fretboard (different octaves) and pretty much it ends very close (on the fretboard) where it started from. Maybe this is what Cosmin describes as a static melody.
What I feel about it? I 'm not happy comparing it to music made by other guitar players but I see it's starting to sound like music which makes me happy.
After your comments, I feel even better since I realized that I have made use of a few musical aspects for the first time( eg. structure, calls & responses). So reflecting back on this take, I feel that I have made a crucial step in my journey towards making music. Of course, this would not have happened without your support and I feel grateful for your help and direction here at the thread and GMC. Kristofer's steps also forced me to follow a well defined path like a dummy so I was able to focus mostly on getting the structure right and forget the million other things that I have to do right.
QUOTE (Cosmin Lupu)
Also, I would approach timing and dynamics in this take - some of the phrases sound a bit unsure in terms of execution from the timing perspective
I think you refer to the times that I 'm not strumming at the right time and/or with the correct loudness. Correct?
QUOTE (Cosmin Lupu)
and some of the phrases are a bit too static - they don't move in any direction.
I listened to Kris' video and I can feel the direction of the phrases there but I'm not sure I can figure out what the player does to give the direction feeling to his phrases.
Are my assumptions below correct?
- covering some ground on the fretboard before ending up on the same or a different note
- playing a different compatible note than the key of the chord played at the time
I 'll try to analyze it more though to understand what I should be looking for.
QUOTE (Cosmin Lupu)
Another thing you could try, would be to take another look over your favorite lessons and see where Kris' concepts can be found in phrases from those lessons and use the adaptation method again, but this time oriented on the directions Kris gave you smile.gif
I wanted to try this as it was also suggested in the earlier stages of the thread but my version was too crowded of different licks and sounded robotic. I should give it another shot to see how it will end up after following the same guidelines.
QUOTE (Kristofer Dahl)
If I were you, the most enjoyable way of approaching this would be to find a lesson that you like - and study the details of one single lick and focus only on that. This way you don't need to think as much about all the theoretical aspects, just focus on making your playing sound as good as the instructor's.
For example you could choose any lick from this lesson:
http://www.guitarmasterclass.net/ls/Slow-Blues-Phrasing/(feel free to choose a different lesson though)
If you want to me to keep giving you feedback here, please choose a super short section and record it over a backing. Then let me know which passage you were attempting to duplicate.
I will surely pick a lick and send it for feedback here. There are plenty of interesting and melodic licks in the video and I really like Mark Knopfler's style.
I think I would pick the lick played at 00:51->01:10 (part 5 of the lesson). It looks like a classic one which could be used in most rock songs. Let me know if I should only focus on the first phrase of this section to be super short.