Hi Krakou, it's been a good decision to share your take here. We are already working on this one at the mentoring program but the other instructors input is very valuable here.
As I said previously, this is a good take, and it's ready to have that extra that can take your playing to a new level. How? Working on details. And the best way to do it at this point is getting the most from the instructor's playing and trying to emulate his way of managing groove/timing and dynamics. These two elements should be your next goals.
Keep on the good and hard work.