Hi Phil, it's good to see you've been working on you bending. This may seem strange to say but personally I felt your previous take sounded a lot smoother than this one. You just looked and sounded more relaxed whereas here I can feel your concentration. There's little extra unwanted noises every now and then which don't flatter the overall take.
In terms of bending, you're getting the knack of hitting the right pitch. I didn't really find your bending objectionable in the first take actually but it's good that you're working on it because it is an essential skill. When it comes to bending it's hard to get real results in a matter of days so be prepared to expect it to take longer before it can transform a performance.
I notice that you lose a lot of volume during pull-offs. I think you're being really careful and diligent in that you're making sure you lift your fingers off without hitting other strings etc.. but the thing with pull-offs is that you want to get a little 'tug' when you pull-off so that the finger tip slightly yanks the string enough so the next note rings out too. It's harder with a clean tone but give it a try