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Jan 29 2014, 11:22 PM
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Hey community.
 I want to share my newest demo featuring my singing. It's just a demo recorded on my laptop's internal mic (pretty sweet quality for an internal mic IMHO). I have another version on my soundcloud, but some people didn't like the screaming, so I made this version. I think this new version is better anyway.I hope you like the song. The lyrics are very personal. If you have any questions about my gear, just ask below.  https://soundcloud.com/fireball100/lord-i-have-sinned-no-screams I bow my head, I'm in despair Transgressed again like I didn't care My hardened heart becomes undone I hid my eyes, ignoring you Suppressed your word like it wasn't true Convicted now, I fall apart I'VE SINNED OH PLEASE FORGIVE RESTORE THE LIFE IN ME THAT I SHOULD LIVE LORD I HAVE SINNED DON'T LET ME GO JUST PURGE THESE LIES IN ME THAT I HAVE SOWN This heart of fire has turned to stone Dried up inside straight to the bone My conscience speaks, but will I learn? To count the moments of my sin And given the chance to live again Would they be months, or maybe years? I'VE SINNED OH PLEASE FORGIVE RESTORE THE LIFE IN ME THAT I SHOULD LIVE LORD I HAVE SINNED DON'T LET ME GO JUST PURGE THESE LIES IN ME THAT I HAVE SOWN Brandon |
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Jan 30 2014, 12:24 AM
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That's awesome man!
Waiting for more |
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Jan 30 2014, 12:42 AM
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QUOTE (Amitai Kedmi @ Jan 29 2014, 05:24 PM)  That's awesome man! Waiting for more Thank you - means a lot!
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Jan 30 2014, 03:41 AM
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Love the riffage parts at the end!
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Jan 30 2014, 04:09 AM
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QUOTE (ruben_mcn @ Jan 29 2014, 08:41 PM) Love the riffage parts at the end! Thank you. It was changed from the original riff. It's fun to play.
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Jan 31 2014, 02:30 AM
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Well done!
Cosmin has a good tip on your voice sustain. It's something that will come with practice. Breathing is very important in singing. Just takes time to work out the bits. Have you thought about processing like an octaver, or harmonizer just to make the chorus bits stand out a bit more? QUOTE (thefireball @ Jan 29 2014, 05:22 PM) Hey community.
I want to share my newest demo featuring my singing. It's just a demo recorded on my laptop's internal mic (pretty sweet quality for an internal mic IMHO). I have another version on my soundcloud, but some people didn't like the screaming, so I made this version. I think this new version is better anyway.I hope you like the song. The lyrics are very personal. If you have any questions about my gear, just ask below. https://soundcloud.com/fireball100/lord-i-have-sinned-no-screams I bow my head, I'm in despair Transgressed again like I didn't care My hardened heart becomes undone I hid my eyes, ignoring you Suppressed your word like it wasn't true Convicted now, I fall apart I'VE SINNED OH PLEASE FORGIVE RESTORE THE LIFE IN ME THAT I SHOULD LIVE LORD I HAVE SINNED DON'T LET ME GO JUST PURGE THESE LIES IN ME THAT I HAVE SOWN This heart of fire has turned to stone Dried up inside straight to the bone My conscience speaks, but will I learn? To count the moments of my sin And given the chance to live again Would they be months, or maybe years? I'VE SINNED OH PLEASE FORGIVE RESTORE THE LIFE IN ME THAT I SHOULD LIVE LORD I HAVE SINNED DON'T LET ME GO JUST PURGE THESE LIES IN ME THAT I HAVE SOWN Brandon |
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Feb 1 2014, 09:14 AM
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Bran - if you could shoot a movie while recording, in which I could see your upper body I could tell you more. Please try the oranges technique, deal?
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Feb 2 2014, 09:51 AM
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By all means - it would help me tremendously in realizing how to further help out
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Feb 2 2014, 06:32 PM
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Nice.
For me lyrically I'd want to see an element of hope at the end, a remembrance of what has been promised to us. Feel free to ignore the rest of the post, as this is your song and conveying what you want to say and how you want to say it Think of Peter denying Jesus and later in Mark 16 Jesus saying Go tell my disciples and Peter. Jesus wasn't saying Peter wasn't his disciple any more but making sure Peter understood he was wanted and forgiven and was given a 2nd chance etc He called him by name. Sort of in the way Close your eyes approach the same sort of thing in Valleys I am starting to realize that I can do nothing on my own Everything that I start to build crumbles into nothing! It's safe to say that no matter what I try I fall so short This unrelenting pride continues to widen the space between you and I Is there any point in trying to change? No matter what I do it always stays the same. But I feel like this has been made for me Is there something more that I can't see? All I want is to let go I try so hard this pride still grows Just for once to breathe in deep And catch a glimpse of what you see in me So many years of sorrow and grief The bitterness I tasted in the face of defeat How can I forget the joy of the mountain tops down in the valleys? Is there any point in trying to change? No matter what I do it always stays the same. But I feel like this has been made for me Is there something more that I can't see? But your ways are different they call out to me no matter what I do you always stay the same And I will have the choice to say there is more to this life that I'm living There is more There is more And in the amidst of struggles of finding the man you called me to be Your love reminds me that though I am broken I am still standing I'm still screaming! Is there any point in trying to change? No matter what I do it always stays the same. And I will have the choice to say there is more to this life I am living there is more to this life I am living there is more to this life I am living This post has been edited by PosterBoy: Feb 2 2014, 06:33 PM -------------------- My SoundCloud
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Feb 3 2014, 04:07 AM
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Hey mate! Awesome stuff! The song sounds really cool and your voice has an interesting potential! I Following Cosmin's tips and with some more practice it will fit great with your music. Congrats!
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