So I wrote these lyrics in religion class after readung revelations or whatever the section is about the apocolypse. Me and my friend started a band and he told me to write some lyrics so I did. I need some posotive and negative critisim
so heres the song
The Second Beast
With horns like a dragons
come out of the ground
everyone screams in a little town
wide awake i sit at night
sitting in horrifyed fright
Chorus:
The Second Beast has risen and has come
we saw it rise from the grave but will gods hand save
The bodies are lying in the streets
we need this one who we hear can difeat
this beast that may be over there
his smell lingers in the air
Chorus:
The Second Beast has risen and has come
we saw it rise from the grave but will gods hand save
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Thanks for reading my lyrics
Makes me think of pink, fluffy bunnies
good start TreyDiscahmp i like to read but i havent a talent to write as i can to compose the music
Nice horror lyrics man. I like the gothic feel in it
great lyrics for a first time writing My first ever lyrics were really bad although I was 8 . I have ran out of ideas for lyrics lately so just keep writing instrumentals lol And they suck
Keep writing lyrics and you will find each time they will get better until you get to the point where everything you write will be good
Wasnt bad Trey
Upload more of your future lyrics !
Sometimes it seems as if you were trying to force rhymes in your lyrics, and as you can see you dont need to rhyme at all in lyrics if you dont want to ! The Uncreator is a prime example of someone that writes great lyrics but doesnt always rhyme.
Hope to see you on here more
Very good start on writing lyrics..Keep it up!
You should write a book
And join my band "The Beast", this would be a good song for it
If you join then I've got 2 members
Nice job, man!
Great start...keep at it!
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