Dedicated to anyone who has ever faked a smile:
I'll be like this forever.
You say " Change", and I say "Never"
Rather be alone,
Then sit here begging at your throne.
I see the dissapointment,
Falling of your shoulders,
"Im sorry Mom, Your kid's growing older"
Wish you were here,
When I needed you.
Its said to say,
That music is the only one,
Who understands who Ive become.
I sleep on a bed of nails.
Your criticisms cut me in a time of rest.
When I awake in the moring,
I feel theres nothing left.
So let me bleed out,
Let me become something less.
Just keep playing your games.
Appearences mean everything,
I know I look happy,
But inside,
Im the only one who knows how I feel,
With a broken heart that still hasnt healed.
©John Minoia 2008
Very good man, Reads a lot like a poem, And I can relate to the song quite a bit. Good job.
Whoa!! I read some of your lyrics today I've to say I really really like them! I like this one a LOT.
I've a question. Can you sing this?
And if yes in what key? This is just crying for some chords! ( I'm thinking something simple like the album Grace by Jeff Buckley)
Keep working men!
I appreciate the nice response Paiva. I dont really sing them , ( only a couple) and Im not good enough to know what key the song would be sung in ( Not very good at theory ).
Feel free to mess around with it and maybe even upload a recording if you wish
Also, the lyrics board could always do for more Uploaders. Feel free to upload some of your lyrics if you have any
Take Care-John
Nice poem, I like the way you developed the topic
One small remark, the rhythm of the lyrics.. you have different rhythms in one poem, like you compose a song in diferrent time signatures, you start in 4/4 then move to 3/4, then to 5/4.. it would sound confusing.. words shall flow like a river
Otherwise, it's really good
Hi!
I very much liked the first stanza - ít's just perfect with the rhymes and all.
This really could be a song - either an acoustic one, or if you create a nice chorus (one which smashes the listener as much as the very first verse) then i would go woooww But otherwise I really like how it builds up gradually (really important aspect of lyrics I guess...)
Btw: is it copyrighted because it has been published somewhere else earlier or just to be more cautious about it?
cheers
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