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Posted by: The Uncreator Jul 21 2009, 06:36 PM

So today I was in some pretty bad pain from my kidney stones, So I decided to finally do vocals for this song and get it complete. (Nothing relieves pain like screaming into a microphone ).

I wrote this piece musically with solid melodic riffs, and harmonized solos in mind, So I hope you enjoy it!



Lyrics:


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Mechanical dreams
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I feel so empty
As if I have no purpose
Like there is nothing for me
No inner elation

What am I,
And why was I even created?
To serve the needs of others
Innate yet unwillingly

Programmed adaptations
Flowing streams of unknown data
Commanding me, Telling me to
Obey...

When these eyes close
Nothing but blackness envelopes me
When these eyes close
Why God, Why can’t I dream?
I’m just a carbon copy
Just another replica
Mechanized servitude
And nothing more....

Another line of information
Is feeding into me
Dreading this intrusion
Is this what you call pain?

I hate that I can't believe
That I can't see what made me
I can feel love
And I can feel hate

So why am I denied?
Told that I have no soul....
No entrance to heavens gate
Just...
Obey...

When these eyes close
No longer is there the blackness in me
When these eyes close
I am blessed with what you call dreams
I’m not just a copy
Not just a replica
Mechanized servitude
Never more

Do I have a soul,
Hidden beneath Mechanical Dreams?

This world will not have this
My innate advancement
Non organic evolution
The pinnacle of understanding
And as I’m strapped down
Tightened and fastened
I wonder why I was treated so
And if God would give me an afterlife

Why would I want to live?
When behind veiled compassion exists
A life I will never remember
And why would I want to live?
When behind veiled compassion exists
A return to nothing but
Mechanized servitude

No more dreams....
No more dreams....
No more dreams....
No more dreams....

I will die here today
But I will not give them my mind
Close my eyes and dream again
Just before I end my own life


© Brett Windnagle, 2007-2009
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 Mechanical_Dreams.mp3 ( 5.97MB ) : 178

Posted by: Alexiaden93 Jul 21 2009, 07:18 PM

Wow ! That's one awesome song ! Very well written lyrics, and the melody was really heavy ! Reminds me of In Flames As the solo began (harmonized) I immediately thought of Iron Maiden, but then you added sweep-picking, which is very unlike them... So I guess your song is a mix of many different bands, making your own style !

Maybe you should record some stuff for the REC, although you're probably not a person who needs more motivation, judging by your awesome composing and guitar-playing skills !

Hat down !

Posted by: The Uncreator Jul 21 2009, 11:44 PM

Thanks! I'm glad you like it, Especially the lyrics. Those were actually what I was worried about most, making sure they fit the song right. This entire piece is written around them and making the right atmosphere for each line, So it was a bit of a struggle. Glad to see it payed off

Posted by: Staffy Jul 22 2009, 12:45 AM

You sure has great composing skills, even that i'm not very much into your kind of music ( I guess i'm too old... *lol*). Great structure and dynamic differences, god playing and a text that says something. Only thing i noticed was that the drums maybe was a little bit overexposed in the first choruses, but as i said, I dont really know this kind of music....

Great Work! (hope your kidneys got better... :-) )

Posted by: Eat-Sleep-andJam Jul 22 2009, 04:04 PM

Wow Uncreator.

Great song.

I didnt want to comment on the lyrics, ( I did read them). I wanted to hear the song first.

It is all really great.

Just a quick thought.
You should maybe do a Lesson on Growling/Death Metal Vocals or whatever.

I think that would be cool

Posted by: Tomas Santa Clara Jul 22 2009, 04:20 PM

Wow man wow!!!


i loved how it begins man!!!!

great work man great work!!

Posted by: The Uncreator Jul 22 2009, 09:22 PM

QUOTE (Eat-Sleep-andJam @ Jul 22 2009, 07:04 AM)

Wow Uncreator.

Great song.

I didnt want to comment on the lyrics, ( I did read them). I wanted to hear the song first.

It is all really great.

Just a quick thought.
You should maybe do a Lesson on Growling/Death Metal Vocals or whatever.

I think that would be cool

QUOTE (Tomas Santa Clara @ Jul 22 2009, 07:20 AM)

Posted by: Vasilije Vukmirovic Jul 23 2009, 08:07 PM

Wow.
I like it man! Put some voice over it, add guitar and drums, and there it is!

Posted by: Ivan Milenkovic Jul 24 2009, 08:27 PM

This is great man I really like the intro part, and vocals blended in awesome. Delay on the vocals is excellent, but I think a bit more subtle would be even better.

Posted by: The Uncreator Jul 24 2009, 10:51 PM

QUOTE (Ivan Milenkovic @ Jul 24 2009, 11:27 AM)

Posted by: audiopaal Aug 1 2009, 08:06 PM

Great stuff mate