Gmc Songwriting Collaboration (!), Let's write a song together! |
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Oct 18 2014, 06:15 PM
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Wou! I'm amazed of how great this one is evolving! The last sample is sounding killer!! It has a very interesting and heavy vibe but at the same time it has a very unique style. Keep the great ideas coming guys and girls!
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Oct 18 2014, 11:18 PM
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I will try...I'll stretch my head to see what may be more fitting for the chorus. Do you have any suggestion regarding the key for the chorus?
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Oct 19 2014, 11:38 AM
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Sounds great already! I love when the distorted riffs kick in.
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Oct 20 2014, 03:24 PM
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Thanks Amir - I like the new bridge riff. It's fun to play as well.
I am a little stuck right now. If only we can find a chorus section which excels what we have so far - then we should en up with something really cool. Here are the options I see: 1 Come up with a completely new chorus section. I have tested some different stuff - but whatever I come up with it just sounds like we're adding too many sections. At this point in the song I feel something must repeat - unless we want to go into some experimental progressive genre. 2 Use Bleez' riff as chorus. It is a cool riff and this could work, however ideally we would keep it where it is now and come up with a cool chorus (more is more!?) 3 Completely skip Bleez' riff and come up with a new chorus section. This is probably the easiest option - if we remove Bleez' riff we can get away with introducing a new element/section. However I like Bleez' riff and if we can keep it and come up with a strong chorus - I think the solution will be cool with a lot of character. 4 Keep the sections we have so far (mix), and use a variation of the intro idea as chorus, this is what I am experimenting with now. The listener is already familiar with the intro - so if we can make it more rhythmic and bombastic with some cool harmonies we should be home. I hope that made sense. |
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Oct 20 2014, 08:04 PM
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QUOTE (Kristofer Dahl @ Oct 20 2014, 02:24 PM)  Thanks Amir - I like the new bridge riff. It's fun to play as well. I am a little stuck right now. If only we can find a chorus section which excels what we have so far - then we should en up with something really cool. Here are the options I see: 1 Come up with a completely new chorus section. I have tested some different stuff - but whatever I come up with it just sounds like we're adding too many sections. At this point in the song I feel something must repeat - unless we want to go into some experimental progressive genre. 2 Use Bleez' riff as chorus. It is a cool riff and this could work, however ideally we would keep it where it is now and come up with a cool chorus (more is more!?) 3 Completely skip Bleez' riff and come up with a new chorus section. This is probably the easiest option - if we remove Bleez' riff we can get away with introducing a new element/section. However I like Bleez' riff and if we can keep it and come up with a strong chorus - I think the solution will be cool with a lot of character. 4 Keep the sections we have so far (mix), and use a variation of the intro idea as chorus, this is what I am experimenting with now. The listener is already familiar with the intro - so if we can make it more rhythmic and bombastic with some cool harmonies we should be home. I hope that made sense. Good points here Kris. I am experimenting with ideas as well. Using a variation of the intro idea as chorus makes sense. That is a beautiful intro I must say I am sure we will overcome the challenges of writing this song by doing the one thing which we have been doing from the beginning which is allow time for things to develop 
This post has been edited by Amir Razmara: Oct 20 2014, 08:06 PM |
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Oct 22 2014, 11:41 AM
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Here is my idea for the chorus section (starting around 2 minutes - and wow as I write this it strikes me that it's a long wait for the chorus!) It uses the same chords as the intro but with two different "turnarounds" and almost has a punky vibe. But it will hopefully be heavier as the mix gets better/tighter and when vocals are added.
I have also added a (sloppy!) draft bass and added a short break before Bleez' section (01:18) as suggested by Amir. At that specific place in the song I am bit worried about adding new sections though - and I felt silence was kinda effective there. What does everyone think? 
intro_to_chorus.mp3 ( 4.11MB )
Number of downloads: 140 |
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Oct 22 2014, 06:52 PM
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QUOTE (Kristofer Dahl @ Oct 22 2014, 10:41 AM) Here is my idea for the chorus section (starting around 2 minutes - and wow as I write this it strikes me that it's a long wait for the chorus!) It uses the same chords as the intro but with two different "turnarounds" and almost has a punky vibe. But it will hopefully be heavier as the mix gets better/tighter and when vocals are added. I have also added a (sloppy!) draft bass and added a short break before Bleez' section (01:18) as suggested by Amir. At that specific place in the song I am bit worried about adding new sections though - and I felt silence was kinda effective there. What does everyone think?
intro_to_chorus.mp3 ( 4.11MB )
Number of downloads: 140Awesome sounding good guys...I'm pleased with what we got so far. The song maintains a good feel and solid groove throughout. It can only get better from this point
This post has been edited by Amir Razmara: Oct 22 2014, 06:53 PM |
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Oct 26 2014, 03:46 PM
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Here is an update, I have re-recorded most of the guitars and bass, started adding some layers and dubs, and started editing drums a bit - and some mixing.
song_collab_oct26.mp3 ( 4MB )
Number of downloads: 258edit - see this thread for lead takes. |
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Nov 1 2014, 04:19 PM
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Ok I have recorded a short vocal line (starting at 00:50) to try to get a feel for what... feel we should go for!
song_collab_vocal_test_nov1.mp3 ( 2.04MB )
Number of downloads: 186Lyrics: Yesterday I heard you say Be my man and make love to me But the problem is this, it wasn't to me! But to an old and long time friend of ours What do you do, and what do you say When your life is about to sway away Thanks to Amir for pointing out starting with “yesterday” makes more sense than “today”. Any input is welcome! |
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Nov 1 2014, 05:47 PM
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Wou! It's awesome how this song is evolving! I love the powerful vocals added to the first verse, and the lyrics are hard as well. I?m also checking the longer instrumental demo and there are killer sections there.
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