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Jan 30 2015, 09:14 PM
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I like to come up with riffs and mess about with (attempted) songwriting. I thought it might be good to post up what Ive been working on for some feedback?
Gear wise Im using EZ drummer and for the guitars TH2, Im not expecting to get a fantastic sound but if there are any tips that might make the mix even a little better, Id appreciate it. Song wise Im going for a 70's Sabbath doomy kinda vibe and Im thinking this would be - intro > verse at 0:59 > pre chorus at 1:17 > chorus at 1:34. Im planning to go back into another verse / pre / chorus then go into something 'interesting and exotic'  any thoughts, soul crushing or otherwise would be cool  https://soundcloud.com/bleez666/sabbatha20 --------------------  You say 'minor pentatonic ' like it's a bad thing |
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Jan 30 2015, 10:20 PM
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I like it man. It it very Sabbath-like so you hit that on the nail. Nice to see people creating stuff like this these days.
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Jan 31 2015, 01:23 AM
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Great Riff! I like the 'change up' at 1:34.
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Jan 31 2015, 03:03 AM
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QUOTE (bleez @ Jan 30 2015, 04:14 PM)  I like to come up with riffs and mess about with (attempted) songwriting. I thought it might be good to post up what Ive been working on for some feedback? Gear wise Im using EZ drummer and for the guitars TH2, Im not expecting to get a fantastic sound but if there are any tips that might make the mix even a little better, Id appreciate it. Song wise Im going for a 70's Sabbath doomy kinda vibe and Im thinking this would be - intro > verse at 0:59 > pre chorus at 1:17 > chorus at 1:34. Im planning to go back into another verse / pre / chorus then go into something 'interesting and exotic' any thoughts, soul crushing or otherwise would be cool https://soundcloud.com/bleez666/sabbatha20 Hey I like it! The playing is very clean. I'd like to offer a suggestion for texture. I can imagine a sort of chuggy thing in the background sort of helping the drums along. Kind of a mix between "rocky eye of the tiger and Metallicas battery" It might be nice for the bass to follow the drums sometimes too. Maybe I couldn't hear it or there is an octave effect on the guitar. Lastly I'm not sure if this is sabbath esque but the guitars I hear in this track seem like a springboard for a good melody or solo. Good job man! This post has been edited by Jim S.: Jan 31 2015, 03:12 AM |
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Jan 31 2015, 05:31 PM
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Hi Bleez, this is just beautiful!! Just for fun, would you like to send me a mix of this one 'cause I'd like to experiment with some melodies?
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Feb 1 2015, 11:21 PM
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QUOTE (bleez @ Jan 31 2015, 05:10 PM) WOW! Of course mate, that would be totally awesome I've set the track as downloadable on soundcloud but if you prefer any specific format, just let me know and I'll get it to you. Thanks dude.Awesome! Thanks! I'll try something tomorrow. You'll have my news.
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Feb 2 2015, 09:39 AM
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Sounds awesome for me! I like the idea, tone and as Jim said your playing is very clean. I hardly wait to hear the final result because I'm sure it will be a good song
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Feb 2 2015, 05:47 PM
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Hey Bleez! As promised, I've been trying some melodies over this one! It's been funny to experiment with some vocals. This is off course a draft full of pitch issues, and without lyrics, but this is how I usually start working on melodies for a song.
Check it out! 
Bleez_Idea.mp3 ( 2.42MB )
Number of downloads: 110This post has been edited by Gabriel Leopardi: Feb 2 2015, 06:37 PM -------------------- My lessons
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Feb 2 2015, 08:22 PM
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QUOTE (Gabriel Leopardi @ Feb 2 2015, 04:47 PM) Hey Bleez! As promised, I've been trying some melodies over this one! It's been funny to experiment with some vocals. This is off course a draft full of pitch issues, and without lyrics, but this is how I usually start working on melodies for a song. Check it out!
Bleez_Idea.mp3 ( 2.42MB )
Number of downloads: 110aw man what seriously cool melodies  I can totally hear what you are going for. Even with no lyrics that chorus has a brilliant stoner groove to it, almost has a john garcia type of vibe. Its already stuck in my head, Thanks so much Gab *you really should have a stoner rock band side project at some point! This post has been edited by bleez: Feb 2 2015, 08:24 PM -------------------- You say 'minor pentatonic ' like it's a bad thing |
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Feb 2 2015, 11:28 PM
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QUOTE (bleez @ Feb 2 2015, 04:22 PM) aw man what seriously cool melodies I can totally hear what you are going for. Even with no lyrics that chorus has a brilliant stoner groove to it, almost has a john garcia type of vibe. Its already stuck in my head, Thanks so much Gab *you really should have a stoner rock band side project at some point! Great to know that you liked! Your tune is very inspiring! Feel free to continue the tune and use the melodies for it. Maybe then we can ask a singer to try the melodies with lyrics. Stoner band? I have lots of rocker tunes in my archive, I have to do something soon with it.
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Feb 3 2015, 01:24 PM
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QUOTE (bleez @ Feb 3 2015, 08:16 AM) Im totally fired up to keep working on this now I have ( what I think ) will be a good end section. I just need to come up with an interesting middle part. thanks dude gabs vocal melodies really do give it something extra cool.Cool! I'm curious to hear the end section. I'm ready to create some more vocal lines when it's needed. The cool thing about this style is that you can really experiment with uncommon structures and it works good, so feel free to give this one a more "evolution" structure instead of a classic song one. -------------------- My lessons
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Feb 6 2015, 06:31 PM
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Don't stop now, Bleez! You've got something cool going here
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Feb 14 2015, 03:29 PM
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okay, so Ive added some stuff
 really interested on you guys thoughts, Ive added a couple of new riffs to the middle and the end, hopefully they all 'work'. Ive uploaded the full track, the new part starts at about 2:45 but if you want a bit of context you can skip to about 1:55 for verse 2, pre, chorus, new stuff https://soundcloud.com/bleez666/sabbatha-full -------------------- You say 'minor pentatonic ' like it's a bad thing |
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