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Posted by: enlo22 Sep 18 2013, 12:05 AM

So my friend wants to film something for a blog and told me to come up with something short for it so I came up with this, the ending is a little crappy but it's just a rough draft of the final one so hopefully i can get some tips etc from you guys! http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=W364hSnZr4g

Posted by: Cosmin Lupu Sep 18 2013, 09:38 AM

Marco, your chops get better and better each day

I think that you should just focus more on playing with better articulation (bending and vibrato) from 0:32 onward, as the ideas are good. They just need more interpretation - feeling as they say Keep rocking, my friend!

Posted by: Gabriel Leopardi Sep 18 2013, 04:59 PM

Hi mate, I really like the direction of this tune. I think that you have a good balance between fast licks and more melodic phrases. There are some parts that need more practice but nothing too serious. Also try to put your guitar louder in the mix.

I don't know how this track will evolve but my suggestion is to create something that could work as a chorus... something epic, very melodic that makes everybody remember your song.

Keep on the good job!

Posted by: verciazghra Sep 18 2013, 06:57 PM

Very nice work, I like it.

Posted by: Cosmin Lupu Sep 19 2013, 07:21 AM

Gabe is right, you should also think about building up a tune out of this one - so, as last time, a structure could be a good starting point

Posted by: Ben Higgins Sep 19 2013, 09:35 AM

I think this piece has got potential. As Cosmin says, your chops are evolving every time we see you !

I don't particular like the sound of the tapping.. that definitely shouts out 'technical exercise' !

To form better melodies look at the chords you're using to form the backing track. What are they ? Instead of just thinking in one scale (which I used to be guilty of too) think about using the chord tones of each new chord it moves to. If it starts on Dm for example.. then pick the chord tones and arpeggios around Dm, if the next chord is F, then look at the shapes around that - you'll be getting F Major shapes then. Altho you could technically stay in the Dm scale throughout, it's not as rewarding as 'changing' with the chords.

Posted by: enlo22 Sep 19 2013, 12:55 PM

Hey guys thanks for your replies! they always help me improve. Ben you're right, i'm going to deff look into the who chord tone thing!
gabe i'm going to probably add some more parts to this and the whole chorus part for suree. Cosmin i'm going to pay more attention to those things such as vibrato etc! thanks for the advice and the compliments as well.

Posted by: Darius Wave Sep 19 2013, 10:54 PM

That's a nice one! You got some nice potential like guys said. But remember - don't forget to put some work in the whole mix when You'll be finishing...this drum tone can distract from Your playing Anyway - some great stuff going on. Keep sharing Your progress on this one

Posted by: Cosmin Lupu Sep 20 2013, 07:28 AM

QUOTE (enlo22 @ Sep 19 2013, 11:55 AM)

Posted by: Ben Higgins Sep 20 2013, 09:59 AM

QUOTE (Cosmin Lupu @ Sep 20 2013, 07:28 AM)

Well, if you wanna focus on building up your bending and articulation technique in general - I would definitely recommend you to tackle these two lessons:

http://www.guitarmasterclass.net/ls/The-Voice-Of-Your-Guitar/
http://www.guitarmasterclass.net/ls/The-Voice-Of-Your-Guitar-2/

Shameless plug, I know but try them and let me know what ya think

Posted by: Gabriel Leopardi Sep 20 2013, 03:31 PM

QUOTE (enlo22 @ Sep 19 2013, 08:55 AM)

Posted by: Cosmin Lupu Sep 21 2013, 05:58 PM

Thanks Ben And Marco - keep working hard mate! Let us know if we can provide more help, k?