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post Jan 21 2008, 10:42 PM
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You're the only thing on my mind
I've got a life that I can't find
Too many hits for the team
Reality is slipping to dream
I lift my head, and look to the sky
To see everything that's passing me by
Loose change falling, hitting the ground
Shattering this unreal sound

(Chorus)
It's hard to win the battle
When the fight can't be won
I'ts just another man
Another life under the sun
Too many victims
One murderer
You have to be the one
The one to find the cure

Water drags him as he reaches for shore
Pulling him under, he cries for more
Drifting farther, farther from home
His body releases an emotional storm
Lying here lifeless, the ground starts to sink
His body gives up, but his mind starts to think
About what he once sought, fortune and fame
But he sees what he's lost, and how little he's gained

© Ryley Gartshore 2008
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This is basically an anti-drug song i started a while back and finished last night. It's not perfect, but I thought I'd share it with GMC to see what you think. Well, how'd I do? smile.gif


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post Jan 21 2008, 10:52 PM
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But he sees what he's lost, and how little he's gained


Great line, i think that really hits hard, And sums up the song perfectly.

Great lyrics too smile.gif
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post Jan 21 2008, 10:55 PM
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QUOTE (The Uncreator @ Jan 21 2008, 09:52 PM) *
Great line, i think that really hits hard, And sums up the song perfectly.

Great lyrics too smile.gif


Well Thank you smile.gif
Anyone got an idea for a song title?

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post Jan 22 2008, 12:16 AM
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nice song and i think you have the title for this song (You're the only thing on my mind) would be nice title


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post Jan 22 2008, 12:23 AM
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Nice lyrics mate smile.gif

hmmm a title .. I`m afraid I usually always go for the soft option for titles on my songs and usually just pick out a line of the song, generally out of the chorus, if I had to choose one out of this chorus it would be ...... You have to be the one


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post Jan 22 2008, 12:43 AM
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Some possible titles im considering are :
You Have To Be The One (Thanks Smells)
Another Life (Under The Sun)
Impossible Fights
The Only One
Life Without You


Which one of these do you feel is the strongest?


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post Jan 22 2008, 12:58 AM
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QUOTE (Stevie·Ray·Vaughn @ Jan 21 2008, 11:43 PM) *
Some possible titles im considering are :
You Have To Be The One (Thanks Smells)
Another Life (Under The Sun)
Impossible Fights
The Only One
Life Without You


Which one of these do you feel is the strongest?


ooh you`ve made it tough lol!
my lyrics are so bad and repeat so many times that its easy to pick a main "theme" for a title .. .hmmmm

Dont know, quite like "Another Life (Under the Sun) also, cant decide, which one do you like best? which one is leaping at you more than the others?

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post Jan 22 2008, 01:01 AM
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QUOTE (Smells @ Jan 21 2008, 11:58 PM) *
ooh you`ve made it tough lol!
my lyrics are so bad and repeat so many times that its easy to pick a main "theme" for a title .. .hmmmm

Dont know, quite like "Another Life (Under the Sun) also, cant decide, which one do you like best? which one is leaping at you more than the others?


Haha i quite like Another Life (Under The Sun) and Life Without You .. but i don't know how to decide sad.gif laugh.gif Im sort of leaning toards Another Life (Under The Sun) though.


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post Jan 22 2008, 01:02 AM
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If thats what your leaning towards then thats gotta be it smile.gif


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post Jan 22 2008, 01:07 AM
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Haha and so it is smile.gif


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post Jan 22 2008, 01:16 AM
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QUOTE (Stevie·Ray·Vaughn @ Jan 22 2008, 12:07 AM) *
Haha and so it is smile.gif


ta da, yay, congratz biggrin.gif


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