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Owen
post Jan 25 2008, 11:29 PM
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Not the most complex of my lyrical pieces, designed to partner a 3 minute thrash song in the vein of Slayer or more simple Cannibal Corpse. 1st, 3rd, and 5th stanza's are shouted whilst the 2nd and 4th are spoken through a muffled microphone-esque filter with distortion. This doesnt really represent my normal style of writing so I'd appreciate some feedback from people who are more acustomed to this sort of rubbish tongue.gif

3 Minute War
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I could die 50 times or more
People are just figures
3 minute war.

A race of arms, or of arms to race
Across the world
We seed our own poison
As both creators and destroyers

Deaths all around
Fill the skys with blood and gore
Come meet the wretched
3 minute war.

Forecasting worldwide chernobyl
We shall cultivate our own corpses
Basking in the rotting meat
Knee deep in the dead.

We radiate hatred
Yet we still crave more
Come bury the cadavers
3 Minute War.

© Owen Waldron 2008

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Hisham Al-Sanea
post Jan 25 2008, 11:45 PM
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i see you have a talent for that but i think if every war end for a 3 min so we are so saved in the world
have nice day owen keep going smile.gif


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The Uncreator
post Jan 26 2008, 04:22 AM
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Nice tune, covered in thrash riffs (if that makes any sense)

Seems like there should be more to it though?

Or that might just be me.
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post Jan 26 2008, 01:54 PM
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QUOTE (The Uncreator @ Jan 25 2008, 07:22 PM) *
Nice tune, covered in thrash riffs (if that makes any sense)

Seems like there should be more to it though?

Or that might just be me.


Yeah I agre, I always liked the concept for this one but the execution of it wasnt my best, I need more filler tongue.gif


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