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post Feb 27 2008, 12:46 AM
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Overdose Reality
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Feel the rush of the wind against your face
That mind accelerating clarity,
That sweet solemn calming embrace
A fraction of time where questions
And thought,
Are lost like when the playful sun
Kills the last deathly kiss of pale winter frost

Yet all it feels like fiction,
When heads are hung in solitude,
Depressed under artificial light,
Feelings are supressed,
Objectives are dictated
Developed,
A rampant breeding ground for spite

Craved moments drift in swirls of intoxication
Blessed seconds,
When we dont realise who we are.
Removing ourselves further from reality
By releasing our minds to the irregular.

Aspiration seems the only savior from iteration
Only purpose of the mind saves us from such repitition
Invisible targets for which we shoot and speculate
We can either overcome our fears and grasp at the setting sun
Or grovel at the skies when its all too late.

For lack of determination and the ills of society
Are truely the cancer of all but every mind and scenario
Cackling adversities till we feel deaths friendly embrace.

And so its with such a sigh and anticipation
That I succumb to that moment of removal
That sudden lack of conformity
Soaring with the plunging will of gravity
I take seven steps forward
And Overdose Reality.

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© Owen Waldron. 2008

Crits and feedback appreciated guys, if you do mine I'll happily crit yours!

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post Feb 27 2008, 12:53 AM
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I like these lyrics a lot. They remind me of an old song I wrote called Depressive Minds which was about a similar thing although I wrote that when I was 11 or 12 and yours is a bit more adult version lol smile.gif I reallt like how the lyrics flow. You have some lines that are shorter like the "And thought" part because it makes you interested in what is coming up more than singing lyrics quickly in a song like this/

I love the line "Depressed under artificial light". Makes me think of somebody sat in their room with the curtains closed and not wanting to leave the room and see the real light outside and also people who sleep in the day and are awake at night who never see the world outside in the sun.

Keep up the great work. I love yours and Brett's lyrics very much smile.gif


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post Feb 27 2008, 01:07 AM
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Thanks smile.gif

I really liked your last one as well actually - Contained Aggression, Brett found it a bit unusual I think but I enjoyed it - dont think I mentioned that in the topic at the time though though, but it's one of my favourite pieces I've seen on here. Similarly this is a bit of a departure from form for me, not how I usually write but it was a very spur of the moment thing, which is why I've now spotted a few flow errors I'll have to fix later tongue.gif


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post Feb 27 2008, 01:37 AM
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Yeah. I think Brett thought it was very different from my usual stuff. But it's fun to right songs in other styles at times. Keep up with the lyric writing anyway as you're very good. Some good lyric writers on this resource as well as guitarists smile.gif


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post Feb 27 2008, 02:51 AM
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Yes, i thought it was different, doesnt mean it was bad though wink.gif

I think these are so far best lyrics Owen, Very thoughtful i can tell, And i love the flow, makes me think of a fast death or thrash metal song.

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