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Chris Evans
post Mar 21 2008, 12:38 AM
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I cant believe I missed this thread!! wow Muris what an awesome thing you have done for Stevie, fantastic

Great lyrics inspire great things, keep em comin Stevie you guys Rock!!! biggrin.gif


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Muris Varajic
post Mar 21 2008, 02:43 AM
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Many thanks guys!! smile.gif

I'll work more on this tune hopefully during weekend and record vocals next week.
Thinking of adding few extra instruments(sounds into arrangement,nothing too attacking,
just to give it more ambient and feel,will see. smile.gif


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post Mar 21 2008, 03:16 PM
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I missed this thread too! SRV those are some great lyrics!

Muris- you've made a fantastic tune out of this- i cant wait to see the lesson wink.gif
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post Mar 21 2008, 07:52 PM
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Man you guys really nailed this smile.gif Not only is it an outstanding piece of music but it is all out inspiring. However I think the "We are the strong" makes the verse highly awkward and should be removed smile.gif Just a suggestion biggrin.gif Later~

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post Mar 22 2008, 02:15 PM
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Thanks guys!! smile.gif

Now I'm more confused about the I added,sounds better with it,rhythmic wise,
but some of you said it's not well correct,gramm wise.
Dunno what to do. unsure.gif


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post Mar 22 2008, 05:46 PM
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Well I don't think it sounds bad.. I kinda like it but its not grammatically correct.. But look at rappers.. they make tons of money off stuff that makes a lot less sense wink.gif


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post Mar 22 2008, 05:56 PM
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QUOTE (Tjchep @ Mar 22 2008, 05:46 PM) *
Well I don't think it sounds bad.. I kinda like it but its not grammatically correct.. But look at rappers.. they make tons of money off stuff that makes a lot less sense wink.gif


So you want me to rap here?? huh.gif wink.gif


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post Mar 22 2008, 06:07 PM
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maybe:

.you are so strong

..you are real strong

...you're truly strong

....(I'm out tongue.gif)

i'm no lyricist so pardon me if that isn't the desired effect.. just suggestions ofcourse..
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post Mar 22 2008, 06:09 PM
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QUOTE (Muris @ Mar 22 2008, 05:56 PM) *
So you want me to rap here?? huh.gif wink.gif


Well..







Yes? wink.gif laugh.gif


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post Mar 22 2008, 06:31 PM
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"you are the strong" i think that sentence is correct if you think about it this way, "you always thought you where the weak, but then you realize "You are the strong" or am i totally wrong here?


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post Mar 22 2008, 06:37 PM
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QUOTE (Siggum @ Mar 22 2008, 05:31 PM) *
"you are the strong" i think that sentence is correct if you think about it this way, "you always thought you where the weak, but then you realize "You are the strong" or am i totally wrong here?


i think for it to sound good like that i think it'd have to be "you are the strong one"

To me, the weak and the strong refers to groups of people.
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post Mar 22 2008, 06:44 PM
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You are probably right, it just doesnt sound wrong in my head, maybe because im using Danish logic in the English langauge tongue.gif


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post Mar 22 2008, 08:57 PM
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All Ik is that I love this song to death and everytime I hear " the strong" I feel like punching a baby. It just shouldnt be there, use one of Deep Roots suggestions- now that I think about it "you are strong" sounds a little awkward to. dry.gif


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post Mar 23 2008, 01:43 AM
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I'm in pain here,THE fits perfect into metric and rhythmic phrase. sad.gif


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post Mar 23 2008, 01:46 AM
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QUOTE (Muris @ Mar 23 2008, 01:43 AM) *
I'm in pain here,THE fits perfect into metric and rhythmic phrase. sad.gif


Dude.. like a guitar tone.. when it sounds good don't do anything to it..



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post Mar 23 2008, 01:47 AM
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Muris, you truly are an amazing musician! Everything works perfectly together, the lyrics, the melody, the guitar. It almost gives me the winter blues, when it makes me realize how far away from that I am.
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post Mar 24 2008, 11:19 AM
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Well, about the "the" thing (laugh.gif) I think it would fit well too if you sing like DeepRoots said "You're truly strong".

I'll try to add the rhythmic pattern: You're truuu-ly strong.

How 'bout that? smile.gif
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post Mar 24 2008, 06:43 PM
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SRV, not to copy Muris or anything, but may i use your lyrics to create and record some song?
i'm not going to publish it or play it as my own or anything, just for recording and songwriting experience:)
many thanx regaldless of yes or no smile.gif

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post Mar 24 2008, 06:49 PM
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QUOTE (AudunESP @ Mar 24 2008, 05:43 PM) *
SRV, not to coy Muris or anything, but may i use your lyrics to create and record some song.
i'm not going to publish it or play it as my own or anything, just for recording and songwriting experience:)
many thanx regaldless of yes or no smile.gif



Yeah go ahead, but I do plan on actually using these lyrics in a song with my band though smile.gif


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post Mar 24 2008, 06:52 PM
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QUOTE (Muris @ Mar 23 2008, 12:43 AM) *
I'm in pain here,THE fits perfect into metric and rhythmic phrase. sad.gif

true, but my sugesstions have the same amount of syllables as your phrase- and loosely mean the same thing...but they're no good?
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