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Enucleation
post Mar 25 2008, 10:13 PM
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Well before I begin I wanna' say that I really dislike writing lyrics, yet I got stuck doing it for my band. Due to my extreme dislike of it, it's not what one could call poetry and I don't put as much thought into it as I do my guitar playing.

That said, anyone who wants to comment on this or add some better lyrics to it is more than welcome to.
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[Verse 1]
Hatred
Burn it in my eyes
Free Man
Lifeless undead claim
Broken bodies on the floor
Breathe in screams and eat the gore
Kill opposition leave no more
In their heads a hole will bore

[Verse 2]
Screaming
Something's inside me
Give in
Let it take control
Primal instincts in control
Rabid bloodshed taking toll
My body is not my own
Force the pain upon them now

[Chorus]
Welling up inside of me
It takes control and I can't breathe
Forcing me to rearrange
The thoughts that flow throughout my brain
Primal carnage break them down
Turning into a pile of gore
See their guts, they breathe no more
I'm not normal forevermore

[Verse 3]
Undead
Zombie pit of pain
Bloodlust
Need for living meat
Dumped into the living dead
Corpses still feel pain
Victims will soon rise again
Servants in my chains

[Chorus]
Welling up inside of me
It takes control and I can't breathe
Forcing me to rearrange
The thoughts that flow throughout my brain
Primal carnage break them down
Turning into a pile of gore
See their guts, they breathe no more
I'm not normal forevermore
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Well there ya go. As I said, I'm no poet, just a death metal fan that finds that mentioning eating guts scares people XD.

This post has been edited by Enucleation: Mar 25 2008, 10:14 PM


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Enucleation
post Apr 1 2008, 04:44 AM
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No one's gonna help me at all? tongue.gif

I can't write lyrics to save my life, i need tips.


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::Guitars::
ESP LTD AX-50 (Temporarily 'out of service')
ESP LTD KH-202
Jackson King V
Ibanez Xiphos (Main)
::Amp::
Line 6 Spider Valve
::Misc::
Pod Studio UX2/Pod Farm
Ibanez Weeping Demon Wah
Ernie Ball Strings (11-48 for Standard D) (9-42 for Standard)
Any pick that works for me
::Wanted::
B.C. Rich Stealth
Xiphos 7 String
Too much....
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The Uncreator
post Apr 2 2008, 12:08 AM
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Sorry man, I didnt see this here.

Anyway, the lyrics arent too bad, but you already know what can help you, You gave your self the answer.

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Well before I begin I wanna' say that I really dislike writing lyrics


Thats a MAJOR problem, If you dont enjoy doing it, Its gonna be alot harder to progress.
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Enucleation
post Apr 6 2008, 05:27 AM
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Yeah I guess so.

I don't think it's so much I don't want to write them, i just like guitar more, haha.

Thanks.


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Gear
::Guitars::
ESP LTD AX-50 (Temporarily 'out of service')
ESP LTD KH-202
Jackson King V
Ibanez Xiphos (Main)
::Amp::
Line 6 Spider Valve
::Misc::
Pod Studio UX2/Pod Farm
Ibanez Weeping Demon Wah
Ernie Ball Strings (11-48 for Standard D) (9-42 for Standard)
Any pick that works for me
::Wanted::
B.C. Rich Stealth
Xiphos 7 String
Too much....
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