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iainsteward
post May 1 2008, 01:03 AM
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I enjoy writing lyrics, although nothing ever comes from the stuff I write, it just sits in a book in a drawer......so I thought I would post something I had written and let all my friends here at GMC give me some "hopefully" decent feedback, and advice or comments like always would be greatly appreciated!!

Flooding Back!
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Verse 1
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I didnt know that you would be there,
I didnt think that I would care,
After everything you put me through,
I can only stand and stare,
To see you again makes this a wondrous day,
The feeling of misery has all went away,

Chorus
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All the feelings, I once had,
All the good, and all of the bad,
Have just come flooding back,
After all the pain, and all the strife,
I still want you in my life,
If you spoke to me now my heart would crack,
All the love for you has come flooding back,

Verse2
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I thought I would never see you again,
Now Im staring and I can't refrain,
Your still so beautiful, my heart beats true,
But now I know....I'm still in love with you,

Verse3
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Did I catch you looking back?
Do you still love me too?
Although the situations changed,
There isnt a thing that I wont do,
Do you still love me? I wish I knew,
Because baby, Im still in love with you!

Verse4
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My heart still beats with hope, of rekindling what we had,
I think of the way you left me and suddenly I feel sad,
But then you turn and give me a smile,
And I know its you that I have loved, all this while,
Can we get back the love we shared yesterday,
Forget all the anguish and make the pain go away



I hope you guys dont think its too bad, I normally write something and keep adding to it over time, but this one has remained untouched with no music to it, I remember trying to write something in E minor but kept drawing a blank!! Anyway, any advice or comments would be great!!
Thanks Guys,
Iain!
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post May 1 2008, 01:22 AM
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You said you couldnt write lyrics well!!!

Why did you lie!!! laugh.gif


Honestly, these arent bad, I dont see why this cant be a song, these are pretty good smile.gif
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post May 1 2008, 01:24 AM
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Thanks man, I throw stuff together all the time, but none of it ever seems very good to me......so I hide it away like some mutant, retarded child!! Maybe I will try and work some music out for it, and record it then post it for all to hear!! Will have to get someone else to sing it......otherwise people will think I actually do have a mutant child and was taking a power tool to his kneecaps and recording it :S
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post May 1 2008, 01:35 AM
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Please post more stuff, I think these are decent lyrics, and you must have more smile.gif
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post May 1 2008, 02:08 AM
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Good stuff, Last two lines of the chorus are very nice biggrin.gif


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post May 1 2008, 10:17 PM
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cool man i see you are a good writer


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