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post Jun 1 2008, 09:49 PM
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So im writing a song for this multi-genre piece i have due in my ap comp class. While starting on a draft i noticed ive never written lyrics before. The topic is death and how it has playied a role in my life. This is because my father died when i was 8, and it is an event that has radically changed who i am. I was wondering if you guys could help me write this,
Thanks!

Heres my start

I Though it would be a day like any other
I woke up as me
I coulda swore this is how it would be
Until I heard that he had left me, my brother, and my mother

That day the darkness over came me
And unleashed a beast that isnt tame
I knew life would never seem the same
Why did he leave that day

Even though they cared
Even though they were there for me
I wouldn't even dare
To show them what was eating at me

I saw the ones I loved cry
I couldn't understand why
I was left to blame myself

That day the darkness over came me
And unleashed a beast that isnt tame
I knew life would never seem the same
Why did he leave that days



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post Jun 1 2008, 10:50 PM
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Hey Sami,this is beautiful.I really haw nothing to add,as long you speak from your hart things will always haw the power to touch other souls.


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post Jun 1 2008, 11:23 PM
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QUOTE (Nemanja Filipovic @ Jun 1 2008, 10:50 PM) *
Hey Sami,this is beautiful.I really haw nothing to add,as long you speak from your hart things will always haw the power to touch other souls.


Thanks Nemanja, ive never tried this before, its great.
I was thinking that the "That day the darkness over came me.." would be the main part, im jsut wondering whats a good structure for the brigdes and chorus of a song, etc.

Thanks


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The thing about being really stupid, is that there are a zillion ways to be a moron. There are usually several ways to be intelligent, given a situation, but it is a small finite number. But there are always a zillion ways to be to blithering idiot. So finding a new way to have the intellect of an artichoke is nothing to be proud of really, it is easy to do.


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post Jun 2 2008, 12:30 AM
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Beautiful song, sad but honest and beautiful.

I recommend using this order:

Verse 1
Chorus 1
Verse 2
Bridge
Chorus 2

Maybe even add a small solo between the bridge and the last chorus or try to repeat the last chorus twice.


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post Jun 2 2008, 12:35 PM
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Beautiful stuff , really touching...

Ivan suggested nice arrangement..Just make an intro to the song and continue same progression over the verse..


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