Appearences
Eat-Sleep-andJam
Oct 31 2008, 02:49 AM
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I'll be like this forever.
You say " Change", and I say "Never"
Rather be alone,
Then sit here begging at your throne.

I see the dissapointment,
Falling of your shoulders,
"Im sorry Mom, Your kid's growing older"

Wish you were here,
When I needed you.
Its said to say,
That music is the only one,
Who understands who Ive become.


I sleep on a bed of nails.
Your criticisms cut me in a time of rest.
When I awake in the moring,
I feel theres nothing left.

So let me bleed out,
Let me become something less.
Just keep playing your games.

Appearences mean everything,
I know I look happy,
But inside,
Im the only one who knows how I feel,
With a broken heart that still hasnt healed.



©John Minoia 2008







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The Uncreator
Nov 2 2008, 02:24 PM
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Very good man, Reads a lot like a poem, And I can relate to the song quite a bit. Good job.

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Eat-Sleep-andJam
Nov 3 2008, 02:49 AM
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QUOTE (The Uncreator @ Nov 2 2008, 05:24 AM) *
Very good man, Reads a lot like a poem, And I can relate to the song quite a bit. Good job.


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Paiva
Nov 5 2008, 09:44 PM
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Whoa!! I read some of your lyrics today I've to say I really really like them! I like this one a LOT.

I've a question. Can you sing this?

And if yes in what key? This is just crying for some chords! ( I'm thinking something simple like the album Grace by Jeff Buckley)

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Eat-Sleep-andJam
Nov 6 2008, 02:40 PM
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I appreciate the nice response Paiva. I dont really sing them , ( only a couple) and Im not good enough to know what key the song would be sung in ( Not very good at theory biggrin.gif ).

Feel free to mess around with it and maybe even upload a recording if you wish biggrin.gif

Also, the lyrics board could always do for more Uploaders. Feel free to upload some of your lyrics if you have any smile.gif

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Dejan Farkas
Nov 6 2008, 03:12 PM
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Nice poem, I like the way you developed the topic smile.gif

One small remark, the rhythm of the lyrics.. you have different rhythms in one poem, like you compose a song in diferrent time signatures, you start in 4/4 then move to 3/4, then to 5/4.. it would sound confusing.. words shall flow like a river smile.gif

Otherwise, it's really good smile.gif

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Eat-Sleep-andJam
Nov 6 2008, 11:10 PM
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QUOTE (Dejan Farkas @ Nov 6 2008, 06:12 AM) *
Nice poem, I like the way you developed the topic smile.gif

One small remark, the rhythm of the lyrics.. you have different rhythms in one poem, like you compose a song in diferrent time signatures, you start in 4/4 then move to 3/4, then to 5/4.. it would sound confusing.. words shall flow like a river smile.gif

Otherwise, it's really good smile.gif



Never thought about that. I'll try to keep that in mind when Im writing my next lyric biggrin.gif.

I really appreciate the response biggrin.gif

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Hi!

I very much liked the first stanza - ít's just perfect with the rhymes and all.

This really could be a song - either an acoustic one, or if you create a nice chorus (one which smashes the listener as much as the very first verse) then i would go woooww biggrin.gif But otherwise I really like how it builds up gradually (really important aspect of lyrics I guess...)

Btw: is it copyrighted because it has been published somewhere else earlier or just to be more cautious about it?

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Eat-Sleep-andJam
Nov 7 2008, 12:04 AM
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QUOTE (berko @ Nov 6 2008, 02:19 PM) *
Hi!

I very much liked the first stanza - ít's just perfect with the rhymes and all.

This really could be a song - either an acoustic one, or if you create a nice chorus (one which smashes the listener as much as the very first verse) then i would go woooww biggrin.gif But otherwise I really like how it builds up gradually (really important aspect of lyrics I guess...)

Btw: is it copyrighted because it has been published somewhere else earlier or just to be more cautious about it?

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Hi Berko smile.gif Thanks for the feedback.

I copyright all my lyrics. You never know with the internet these days smile.gif

So its just to be cautious about it.

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