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Kristofer Dahl
post Nov 16 2008, 07:39 PM
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Hi there - I am excited to show you a tune I am currently working on. It's a little aggressive so "soft-poppers" beware! ph34r.gif

Lyric wise I have been trying to capture the feeling of having way-too-many-things-going-on-at-the same time (I am sure there are many other who share this feeling with me). Also I added some general evilness to the text - to make it a little more metal. ( " mad.gif " ...you know unsure.gif )

Any feedback is appreciated!
>>Click here to listen! (old mix here)

Pause.Breathe.
Don't you take what is left of me
Don't tell me what I am supposed to be
Don't you spill what is left of the weak
Don't you pause and don't you breathe

Don't confuse our time with hate
Don't you dare bloody come too late
Please step out, just walk the line
Rise from birth and die with time

Don't forget to pause, don't forget to breathe
Don't forget the everlasting cause!
Don't forget to pause, don't forget to breathe
Don't you pause and don't you breathe!

Pace of death - it's killing you
Pace of death is feeding me
With control you will let me in
With control we will die in sin

Doesn't it make sense to cure yourself
Doesn't it make sense to heal the world
Nothing is free and you will sacrifice yourself
A burden on you means a burden off the world

Don't forget to pause, don't forget to breathe
Don't forget the everlasting cause!
Don't forget to pause, don't forget to breathe
Don't you pause and don't you breathe!

Pause, breathe, pause, breathe, pause, breathe
Time to pause? I don't think so!

SOLO

Don't forget to pause, don't forget to breathe
Don't forget the everlasting cause!
Don't forget to pause, don't forget to breathe
Don't you pause and don't you breathe!


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Muris Varajic
post Nov 16 2008, 07:45 PM
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Love the riffs and vocal line!! smile.gif

Perhaps you could sing this with a bit more "meat and bass" in your voice,
just an idea. smile.gif


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post Nov 16 2008, 07:47 PM
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What a great track! smile.gif Lyrics were excellent and so was the solo.
Quite a few moments reminded me of newer Metallica.


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post Nov 16 2008, 07:47 PM
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Nice Kris, very thrashy/metallica, chorus is quite stressing actually laugh.gif. Nice end with the breathing smile.gif


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post Nov 16 2008, 07:48 PM
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QUOTE (Muris Varajic @ Nov 16 2008, 09:45 PM) *
Love the riffs and vocal line!! smile.gif

Perhaps you could sing this with a bit more "meat and bass" in your voice,
just an idea. smile.gif


Awesome to get some feedback from you on this Muris! biggrin.gif

Do you mean on the chorus? - I tried a little but it was insanely hard to sing that fast with the growly voice. I agree that having a low/thick and heavy vocal dub work be really cool though!

QUOTE (Fran @ Nov 16 2008, 09:47 PM) *
Nice Kris, very thrashy/metallica, chorus is quite stressing actually laugh.gif. Nice end with the breathing smile.gif


hehe - so if you weren't stressed before, now I got you in the right mood?! laugh.gif


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post Nov 16 2008, 07:48 PM
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Awesome tune Kris !! I love the chorus , its very cool and catchy!! smile.gif


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post Nov 16 2008, 07:49 PM
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QUOTE (Trond Vold @ Nov 16 2008, 09:47 PM) *
What a great track! smile.gif Lyrics were excellent and so was the solo.
Quite a few moments reminded me of newer Metallica.


WOW - thanks Trond! biggrin.gif


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post Nov 16 2008, 07:52 PM
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QUOTE (Kristofer Dahl @ Nov 16 2008, 07:47 PM) *
Awesome to get some feedback from you on this Muris! biggrin.gif

Do you mean on the chorus? - I tried a little but it was insanely hard to sing that fast with the growly voice. I agree that having a low/thick and heavy vocal dub work be really cool though!


You're welcome Kris. smile.gif

Actually I was thinking more of the beginning section.
Chorus is more or less fine cause you sing pretty higher and fast
and that's when voice goes thin anyhow.
But for beginning when you sing lower notes I think
you might try more mature sound voice,maybe mature is the wrong word.
Hmm,maybe less growling and more nature/deep voice. smile.gif


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QUOTE (Kristofer Dahl @ Nov 16 2008, 01:48 PM) *
I agree that having a low/thick and heavy vocal dub work be really cool though!


If you dubbed the vocals like you said, I think it would be complete! Great song Kris smile.gif


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post Nov 16 2008, 07:55 PM
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QUOTE (Muris Varajic @ Nov 16 2008, 09:52 PM) *
You're welcome Kris. smile.gif

Actually I was thinking more of the beginning section.
Chorus is more or less fine cause you sing pretty higher and fast
and that's when voice goes thin anyhow.
But for beginning when you sing lower notes I think
you might try more mature sound voice,maybe mature is the wrong word.
Hmm,maybe less growling and more nature/deep voice. smile.gif


Ahh I see what you mean - basically more singing and less of the growling on the verses! The problem is - singing cleanly is a lot harder for me than to do that semi-growl thing. (No excuses though, I need to practice!).

Actually my vocal practicing nowadays only focuses on clean singing - the last two years I have basically just practiced getting the "angry tone" - so I guess the time is here for me to actually learn to nail the notes! blink.gif


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post Nov 16 2008, 07:58 PM
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I think you managed to match lyrics with music, very frenetic smile.gif

I share this feeling with you definitely, and today was thinking about it and how to clear my mind biggrin.gif


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post Nov 16 2008, 08:10 PM
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QUOTE (Kristofer Dahl @ Nov 16 2008, 07:55 PM) *
Actually my vocal practicing nowadays only focuses on clean singing - the last two years I have basically just practiced getting the "angry tone" - so I guess the time is here for me to actually learn to nail the notes! blink.gif


Nooo,notes are fine!
It's just less growling and more power,that's my taste tho. smile.gif


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post Nov 16 2008, 08:15 PM
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Wow! This is kickass!
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I love your songs kris, and this reminds me also of metallica. I like it and its very catchy from the beginning on.

Some lessons from you to this kind of singing would be sooo cool. Its just the kind of singing you dont really find information about-at least i didnt find.

ps. A lesson about the guitar riffs would be also awesome. smile.gif

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Cool song. smile.gif I personally would have the guitar a bit quiter and the vocals a bit louder, but it was really good. smile.gif
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Wow, great song! biggrin.gif Though I think after listening to this song a few times you will get mad. laugh.gif


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post Nov 16 2008, 08:48 PM
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QUOTE (Sentenced @ Nov 16 2008, 10:22 PM) *
I love your songs kris, and this reminds me also of metallica. I like it and its very catchy from the beginning on.

Some lessons from you to this kind of singing would be sooo cool. Its just the kind of singing you dont really find information about-at least i didnt find.

ps. A lesson about the guitar riffs would be also awesome. smile.gif


Thanks Sentnced - I would love to put some lesson together covering this tune! biggrin.gif

QUOTE (Muris Varajic @ Nov 16 2008, 10:10 PM) *
Nooo,notes are fine!
It's just less growling and more power,that's my taste tho. smile.gif


Ah I see - I hope to get there! (I like that style as well!)

QUOTE (Nazgul @ Nov 16 2008, 10:40 PM) *
Wow, great song! biggrin.gif Though I think after listening to this song a few times you will get mad. laugh.gif


Hehe - I actually asked my mum if she didn't think this song was aggressive and cool. And she said "no you just sound completely mad!" laugh.gif

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Wow! This is kickass!
Looking forward to your album biggrin.gif


Thanks Canis - I am inspired to do an album - and I have been learning a lot about the sound engineering part lately. (there are so many good resources on the web)


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Kicks asses smile.gif! You've got a characteristic way of singing Kris, I like it.


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Love the track Kris... great energy and aggressivness biggrin.gif The chorus is especially cool cool.gif


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cool song Kristofer. Nice vocal too smile.gif


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