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post Jan 5 2009, 09:19 PM
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Silver Rain
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The sky is blue with destiny still breathing
The air is pure with the rising sun
The horizon seems to cradle the clouds
And not a single soul was in pain

I stand alone wondering why I am even here
I don't belong with these people, Or even this world
Shadows and afterimages, A bad dream that I
Simply cannot awake from

My gaze is shifted to the sky

The sky is grey with bated breath
The air is exhaled to create a vaccuum
The horizon is blocked by an incoming rain
Silver drops hit my skin like falling mercury

My gaze is shifted down

Every soul has stopped in time
Everyone has halted to an unseen facade
Bodies fall all at once, A thunderous roar
Yet I remain standing

The atmosphere is reduced to a brittle shell
And eyes perceive a world of grey
Raindrops that have fallen from heaven
Have come with the wrath of hell

My gaze is shifted to the sky

This silver rain falls like knives
Stripping the bones of flesh
This silver rain falls like an acid
Dissolving the monuments of man
This silver rain falls like a fire
Leaving nothing but a charred footpring
This silver rain falls...

This silver rain falls on all but me




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To keep this one interesting, Im not gonna even hint to as what its about. But I will say that it takes place in the future, the past, and an alternate existence all at once smile.gif
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post Jan 5 2009, 09:53 PM
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Hmm.. grumble grumble... I am afraid I don't understand the lyrics to well:/ It seems "You" are not affected by the things that affect rest of the people. So most probably You have different values or don't care for certain things that other do? Anyway that is my impression. I like it, but would like it even more, if my brain could pluck up the power to fully understand it;)


PS: hmm okay now I shall use my right, to ask You for a comment on my song wink.gif


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post Jan 5 2009, 11:19 PM
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QUOTE (The Uncreator @ Jan 5 2009, 12:19 PM) *
_ _ _ _ _ _ _ _

Silver Rain
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The sky is blue with destiny still breathing
The air is pure with the rising sun
The horizon seems to cradle the clouds
And not a single soul was in pain

This could go alot of ways. I like the opening metaphor. Puts some weird ideas in mind. This immediatley makes me think of Global Warming.


I stand alone wondering why I am even here
I don't belong with these people, Or even this world
Shadows and afterimages, A bad dream that I
Simply cannot awake from

Now it leads into more personal things. Regardless of what you might say, I am almost certain this was a very personal verse and if thats correct it shines through very well.


My gaze is shifted to the sky

Oh No ! ohmy.gif

The sky is grey with bated breath
The air is exhaled to create a vaccuum
The horizon is blocked by an incoming rain
Silver drops hit my skin like falling mercury

This part stumps me a bit. This is probably the future reference you were speaking off.
Seems like Acid Rain. Also most likely a Apocolyptic reference. Cool smile.gif



My gaze is shifted down
ohmy.gif
Every soul has stopped in time
Everyone has halted to an unseen facade
Bodies fall all at once, A thunderous roar
Yet I remain standing

I might have put " A thunderous roar" before Bodies fall at once. It seems more plausible. Idk. This verse reminds me of the move The Happening. The last line gives me a couple different ideas. It makes me think of a personal battle. Like the other 3 lines were just softening us up for the last one. I still have a feeling that this is personal but I cant be sure.


The atmosphere is reduced to a brittle shell
And eyes perceive a world of grey
Raindrops that have fallen from heaven
Have come with the wrath of hell
I might have tried to use a different word for "Raindrops" here. It sounds out of place with powerful words like " Heaven and Hell". If It was me, I might might have said something like "Silver Rain falls from the heavens,
Landing quietly into hell". The verse sounds good, but I feel like you could have done a bit more with it . I do like the first line though. Eyes perceiving a World of Gray makes me think of Smog and Pollution


My gaze is shifted to the sky

This silver rain falls like knives
Stripping the bones of flesh
This silver rain falls like an acid
Dissolving the monuments of man
This silver rain falls like a fire
Leaving nothing but a charred footpring
This silver rain falls...

This silver rain falls on all but me

After reading the last part. Is it about 911? Monuments of Man= Twin Towers. I'm pretty sure I got that spot on. Not exactly sure though.


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To keep this one interesting, Im not gonna even hint to as what its about. But I will say that it takes place in the future, the past, and an alternate existence all at once smile.gif



Nice Piece Man, Feel Free to Crit Mine, And tell me if any of my thoughts were right about what it was about biggrin.gif

I had fun thinking about what this was about laugh.gif


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post Jan 6 2009, 01:22 AM
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Well since all of you guessed, I want to tell you all what its about now. In a book called 'Century Rain', A woman finds a wormhole that leads to a second earth that has followed a different timeline and existence. And in this alternate existence she learns that the weapon that rendered the original earth inhospitable (Silver Rain), Might be used hear.
There is a part where she dreams she is there as this weapon is being used, but she is unaffected and forced to watch all around her die.

Thats it condensed to 1 million times the actual size and scope of it, And yes ESJ, Like in every song I write, I slip in something personal about me in there. You picked the right verses for that as well wink.gif

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post Jan 6 2009, 01:38 AM
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Wow, awesome lyrics man, I could really hear some melodies just by reading it. Great job, and they really have a sad vibe to them! smile.gif


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post Jan 6 2009, 01:56 AM
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Thanks Ivan, Means alot smile.gif
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post Jan 7 2009, 04:52 AM
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[quote name='The Uncreator' date='Jan 5 2009, 08:19 PM' post='314081']
_ _ _ _ _ _ _ _

Silver Rain
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The sky is blue with destiny still breathing
The air is pure with the rising sun
The horizon seems to cradle the clouds
And not a single soul was in pain

A quite, silent start but can already tell you're gonna talk about an earthly pain by using the sky as a reference

I stand alone wondering why I am even here
I don't belong with these people, Or even this world
Shadows and afterimages, A bad dream that I
Simply cannot awake from

My gaze is shifted to the sky

Guessed it...and the last verse is exactly what I thought...This part means alot to me, I feel the same way, it has alot of feeling into it

The sky is grey with bated breath
The air is exhaled to create a vaccuum
The horizon is blocked by an incoming rain
Silver drops hit my skin like falling mercury

My gaze is shifted down

Now I'm guessing that this i how you see the world through your eyes, atleast that's my interpretation, it's like saying "The world is a wonderful place when you're in love, and hell itself when you have a broken heart"

Every soul has stopped in time
Everyone has halted to an unseen facade
Bodies fall all at once, A thunderous roar
Yet I remain standing

When I read this part, the first though that came to my mind is "the pain never ends..." because the world is awful from that point of view, and everyone dies, meaning they don't see it, they don't feel the pain of see it...you're still alive, you have to experience it

The atmosphere is reduced to a brittle shell
And eyes perceive a world of grey
Raindrops that have fallen from heaven
Have come with the wrath of hell

My gaze is shifted to the sky

The continued sadness is always joined by rage of experiencing pain that others don't have

This silver rain falls like knives
Stripping the bones of flesh
This silver rain falls like an acid
Dissolving the monuments of man
This silver rain falls like a fire
Leaving nothing but a charred footpring
This silver rain falls...

This silver rain falls on all but me

Hmm...I have to be honest, I was making a one way trip to say that, pain is only for you and nobody has pain but you, the silver rain is a torture you see that destroys everything, lets everything rest in piece and makes you stay alive to see that destruction. My idea went a bit overboard since I got lost in my judgement but, that's how I like it, this piece really made me associate my own life to it, making it a great piece.

My deepest congratulations

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P.S: You have a hint but I didn't even read it, I prefer to read things and let my mind do the rest. The meaning to me might be different than it is to you, but that's the purpose of poetry for me smile.gif







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