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post Jan 11 2009, 01:04 AM
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Sight Through Eleven Dimensions
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I stand still, On the top of newborn star
My formless form staring into space
I feel the sounds around me
There presence a gentle pulse on my skin

My eyes spread out a grid across my vision
A multi-verse of worlds reveal themselves to me
Gentle depressions denote the presence of life
The strings of time flow on by, Neverending

I take a step from the star
And float into another plane of existence
I travel through a black hole and come out anew
As my atoms rearrange themselves yet again

Born once more, With sight in 11 dimensions



© Brett Windnagle, 2008

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Short writing I had to do for english class last year, Found it lying around and thought Id share it smile.gif

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post Jan 11 2009, 02:08 AM
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QUOTE (The Uncreator @ Jan 11 2009, 12:04 AM) *
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Sight Through Eleven Dimensions
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I stand still, On the top of newborn star
My formless form staring into space
I feel the sounds around me
There presence a gentle pulse on my skin

You have a passion for space don't you? =). You're metaphors are such a breeze of fresh air to my eyes. Anyways, you're use of adjectives marks a strong feeling, I'm comparing this situation to a man lying in a pool in silent, just floating...

My eyes spread out a grid across my vision
A multi-verse of worlds reveal themselves to me
Gentle depressions denote the presence of life
The strings of time flow on by, Neverending

This makes me feel like you're avaluating life as it is or as you see it...Maybe you're feeling, immortality


I take a step from the star
And float into another plane of existence
I travel through a black hole and come out anew
As my atoms rearrange themselves yet again

Born once more, With sight in 11 dimensions

I must say, this is really hard to understand, the concept is so abstract to me that I did 3 interpreations, each created by each part you've written. Now I believe you're meeting life, a new form, maybe discovering it on a new world/dimension



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post Jan 11 2009, 02:17 AM
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Yeah, I have a very deep-seeded passion for space and time. I wrote it for originally, when my teacher asked us to write anything that explained being in a different place. This is some of the things you would encounter, assuming you could see in 11 dimension. Like the actual strings of time (String Theory), or the depression Spacetime makes around objects of matter and mass, Moving between planes, To actually view the rings that life (galaxies, universes etc) is said to be a part of (String theory again).

But its a different view for all.
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post Jan 11 2009, 08:30 PM
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QUOTE (The Uncreator @ Jan 11 2009, 01:17 AM) *
Yeah, I have a very deep-seeded passion for space and time. I wrote it for originally, when my teacher asked us to write anything that explained being in a different place. This is some of the things you would encounter, assuming you could see in 11 dimension. Like the actual strings of time (String Theory), or the depression Spacetime makes around objects of matter and mass, Moving between planes, To actually view the rings that life (galaxies, universes etc) is said to be a part of (String theory again).

But its a different view for all.


Well, every interpretation comes from our own world and experiences, my interpretation is made from my judgement as in, I try to see an abstract concept related a view or difference in life while you, as you said, wrote it thinking about a difference place to live. =)


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