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Niko Fran
post Jan 25 2009, 09:03 PM
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I was given the assignment in school to locate five errors in the following text, but I wasen't able to locate that many, can anybody figure some out? Thanks alot!

On Sundays we like to go for a walk in the nature. lt's nice to get away from our usual surroundings and forget about all the work we ought to do. The problem is, of course, that the pollution in this city creeps in everywhere, and is felt even in the parks. The civilization has made the life easier, but there are some drawbacks as well: the parents are concerned because more and more children become allergic, and the unemployment seems to be increasing year by year.
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post Jan 25 2009, 09:08 PM
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QUOTE (Niko Fran @ Jan 25 2009, 09:03 PM) *
I was given the assignment in school to locate five errors in the following text, but I wasen't able to locate that many, can anybody figure some out? Thanks alot!

On Sundays we like to go for a walk in the nature. lt's nice to get away from our usual surroundings and forget about all the work we ought to do. The problem is, of course, that the pollution in this city creeps in everywhere, and is felt even in the parks. The civilization has made the life easier, but there are some drawbacks as well: the parents are concerned because more and more children become allergic, and the unemployment seems to be increasing year by year.


think it's supposed to be 'The civilization has made life easier,'
don't know for sure though..


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post Jan 25 2009, 09:19 PM
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With my copy editor's hat on I can see more than 5 errors.

Some hints: incorrect use of indefinite and definite articles; punctuation prior to conjunctions; incorrect use of punctuation marks; improper use of the implied dative.

As an academic I won't however tell you where all the issues are.

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post Jan 25 2009, 09:23 PM
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QUOTE (Niko Fran @ Jan 25 2009, 09:03 PM) *
I was given the assignment in school to locate five errors in the following text, but I wasen't able to locate that many, can anybody figure some out? Thanks alot!

On Sundays we like to go for a walk in the nature. lt's nice to get away from our usual surroundings and forget about all the work we ought to do. The problem is, of course, that the pollution in this city creeps in everywhere, and is felt even in the parks. The civilization has made the life easier, but there are some drawbacks as well: the parents are concerned because more and more children become allergic, and the unemployment seems to be increasing year by year.


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post Jan 25 2009, 09:36 PM
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Thanks Timono, I had spotted that one aswell though biggrin.gif I has some doubts about the start, I know it should be "On Sundays, we like..." Instead of "On Sundays we like..." But I have some doubts about if I should take On Sunday at the start of the sentence or the end.... Tonymiro, I dont quite understand what you just said, but thanks anyway tongue.gif

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Pøj pøj med det. Er virkelig ringe til den slags tongue.gif


Haha mange tak, dansk er meget dejligere ja biggrin.gif
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post Jan 25 2009, 09:54 PM
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As a help Niko

- incorrect use of definite and indefinite articles - use of 'a', 'an' and 'the'; in English one would not say 'the civilisation' in this example but 'Civilisation'. No article is required usually where we refer to the general rather than the specific in this example. This happens more than once in the piece. Also, as another help, the more common conjunctions are 'and' and 'but'. Whilst one may put a punctuation mark prior to, or following, 'and' you should not place one prior to 'but'. Any punctuation wrt 'and' needs to be used carefully. The implied dative case is 'to' - in the specific instance the implied dative is superfluous. Punctuation - use of the colon and the construction of the preceding and succeeding clauses are dubious...

There are other issues as well. To some extent it depends on how pedantic one wishes to be as to how many errors there are.


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post Jan 25 2009, 10:04 PM
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I think its "Civilization has made life easier" instead of "the civilization has made the life." and "Parents are concerened" instead of "the parents." And maybe its "more children are becoming allergic," so it is in agreement with "increasing year by year"


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post Jan 25 2009, 10:07 PM
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Great, I actully understand that biggrin.gif Thanks alot Tony :)Thanks to you to Paralysed, hadnt thought about incresing smile.gif

One last question though, is it: On Sundays, we like to go for a walk in the nature - or - We like to go for a walk in the nature on Sundays ?
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post Jan 25 2009, 10:27 PM
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You can use either Niko although the expression used commonly in the UK would be 'a nature walk' rather than 'a walk in the nature'.

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post Jan 25 2009, 11:42 PM
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Haha!
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post Jan 26 2009, 01:42 AM
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QUOTE (Muris Varajic @ Jan 25 2009, 11:42 PM) *
Damn, looks fine to me laugh.gif


lol, after first reading had the same thought wink.gif


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post Jan 26 2009, 10:37 AM
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QUOTE (Niko Fran @ Jan 25 2009, 09:03 PM) *
I was given the assignment in school to locate five errors in the following text, but I wasen't able to locate that many, can anybody figure some out? Thanks alot!

On Sundays we like to go for a walk in the nature. lt's nice to get away from our usual surroundings and forget about all the work we ought to do. The problem is, of course, that the pollution in this city creeps in everywhere, and is felt even in the parks. The civilization has made the life easier, but there are some drawbacks as well: the parents are concerned because more and more children become allergic, and the unemployment seems to be increasing year by year.


I would remove all the "the" that are in bold letters. You can't type becoming allergic because it is not correct.

I am not 100% sure but these are the changes I would do. So remove 5 *the* and you're probably done smile.gif


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post Jan 26 2009, 12:43 PM
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QUOTE (Koopid @ Jan 26 2009, 10:37 AM) *
You can't type becoming allergic because it is not correct.


Although if he write "they are becoming allergic" it'd be perfect, and that's probably the most proper way of saying that...


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QUOTE (utak3r @ Jan 26 2009, 12:43 PM) *
Although if he write "they are becoming allergic" it'd be perfect, and that's probably the most proper way of saying that...


Remove the "they" and it sounds better. But the original sentence is also correct. The extra "the"'s are not 100% incorrect either. They are just unnecessary.

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