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post Feb 10 2009, 04:40 PM
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Diamond Dog
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A mind intrigued by complexity
A mind built for the ultimate challenge
He will stop at nothing to know its secret
What lies at the top of the spire

Its intelligence a disturbing presence
Its taste for blood unsettling
A mathematical prowess matched by no being
Its puzzle reserved for only the most arcane thinker
Misjudgement punished, Ignorance admonished


I rise to this challenge
I will undermine the alien sentience
My mind and body altered to a hideous state
Fusion of man and machine

My brain undergoes its metamorphosis
My eyes see shapes where there once was none
Thinking in equations and solutions
I notice not what I have become

A voice whispers, Into my sensors

On your shoulders be this burden

SOLO

He has defied even the allure of sleep
Resorting to a state of continued awareness
Machines calculate and balance a toxic equation

His body has defied even the hand of death
Replace, replicate, regenerate, manipulate
By all means he will conquer this spire

A man unrecognizeable
Beneath a veil of machines
His humanity lost
Somewhere amongst
His desire to succeed
A purpose unclear
A will obscured
His mind not what we knew
His persona erased
Beneath a veil of machines

Diamond Dog

SOLO

A mind intrigued by complexity
A mind built for the ultimate challenge
He will stop at nothing to know its secret
What lies at the top of the spire

Its intelligence a disturbing presence
Its taste for blood an unsettling certainty
A mathmatical prowess matched by no being
Its puzzle reserved for only the most arcane thinker

His severed limbs serve only as his mental marker
Of where he left his problems unsolved
I walk away from this endeavour in a tearful stride
Leaving behind what I loved to the spire




© Brett Windnagle, 2009
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This song is based of yet another Alastair Reynold's writing, A short story called "Diamond Dogs". In the story there are several main characters, but I chose to focus on one. Well actually I blended the actions and motives of two characters into one, and had a second character as a kind of observer. Its about two people (as explained) who discover an inhospitable world, save for one feature, A Massive spire hundreds of kilometers high, Floating off the ground at that too. Its a massive sentient alien machine that challenges all who enter to a series of mathmatical puzzles that progressively get harder and harder. It requires that you use intelligence, to unlock its secret and follow a strict set of rules (If you dont follow them, it punishes you, like taking a limb or two). In this case, one man becomes so obsessed with it, that he actually turns himself into a machine, replacing his mind and body parts to become a calculating machine. The other person with him, his wife, becomes appalled at this and begs them to leave this behind, but he refuses too.

Eventually she leaves him behind to this massive spire, left him to his puzzles and apparent unceasing need to find out what is inside the spire. But one thing comforts her, She left behind something, not someone.

PS

Diamond Dog is a reference to how he appears after all these cybernetic and robotic transformations.
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post Feb 12 2009, 04:57 PM
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[quote name='The Uncreator' date='Feb 10 2009, 03:40 PM' post='336809']
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Diamond Dog
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A mind intrigued by complexity
A mind built for the ultimate challenge
He will stop at nothing to know its secret
What lies at the top of the spire

This one is very good...Kind reminds me of my "Mind Over Heart" Concept...The first verse really is enough to mark the idea of what is going to be discussed...

Its intelligence a disturbing presence
Its taste for blood an unsettling certainty
A mathmatical prowess matched by no being
Its puzzle reserved for only the most arcane thinker

Reading this makes me think...I have to read that book! This reminds me of my "Concept of H.T.R". The entrance of the state of mind, usually is connected with logic, the need to know everything, this part makes me think of the ancient philosophers of Greece.


I rise to this challenge
I will undermine the alien sentience
My mind and body altered to a hideous state
Fusion of man and machine

Ok, now it seems you want to take part in the action, passing from a narrator to a figure yourself. Typo there I think, maybe you meant "sentence"?. You grasp alot into the concept of human and machine too I see...Maybe you don't consider certain actions to be part of the human concept or consider that phase, an evolution

My brain undergoes its metamorphosis
My eyes see shapes where there once was none
Thinking in equations and solutions
I notice not what I have become

A voice whispers, Into my sensors

On your shoulders be this burden

Transformation...You're speaking of evolution, the idea I got was...you were talking about a figure that was built on logic and knowledge, and you want to achieve that state yourself so you can "duel" him but, For the last verse, I don't think you like the transformation

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He has defied even the allure of sleep
Resorting to a state of continued awareness
Machines calculate and balance a toxic equation

His body has defied even the hand of death
Replace, replicate, regenerate, manipulate
By all means he will conquer this spire

This reminds me of a phrase "Those who want power, will go blind to get it"...The power in this case, is knowledge and that state, drives you completly numb. The logic of you associating it to a machine, explains it, atleast to me, you do that association because, machine's simply don't think, they act based on the objective they are programmed to do.

A man unrecognizeable
Beneath a veil of machines
His humanity lost
Somewhere amongst
His desire to succeed
A purpose unclear
A will obscured
His mind not what we knew
His persona erased
Beneath a veil of machines

Diamond Dog

A shell...The man is underneath the machine he has become, nothing more to it...

SOLO

A mind intrigued by complexity
A mind built for the ultimate challenge
He will stop at nothing to know its secret
What lies at the top of the spire

Its intelligence a disturbing presence
Its taste for blood an unsettling certainty
A mathmatical prowess matched by no being
Its puzzle reserved for only the most arcane thinker

His severed limbs serve only as his mental marker
Of where he left his problems unsolved
I walk away from this endeavour in a tearful stride
Leaving behind what I loved to the spire


In conclusion, you became a machine yourself and forgot all about human nature...No feelings, no emotions...Just taks and objectives...


Really good piece, I identify lots of things in it to my concepts of life, really want to hear the song with vocals...

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post Feb 12 2009, 05:06 PM
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Thanks for the comments, Im glad you like it. One of my favorites that Ive done, I just like the way it lended itself to a nontypical structure musically smile.gif

As for the sentience - sentence, I meant sentience, Like the term "Alien Sentience" is referring to the spire, which is clearly alien, yet has an immense amount of intelligence.
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post Feb 15 2009, 04:34 AM
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I really like those lyrics!
That's an awesome tale.

Nicely done, man!!! biggrin.gif


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