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post Feb 27 2009, 02:48 AM
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Her Presence In Flames
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I have been encased, In seering smoke and fire
I have had there tools wrought upon me
My mind has been reshaped and reformed
Attuned to her presence, A darkness inexplicable

Her mind awakens to my motions
With each breath, Her hands grasp tighter
Tortured and imbued with hatred and blessing
Each child she bore, ripped from her womb

A tree stands at her side
As a seraph to its god
A mushroom cloud exhalation
Leaves her creators burning

My mind is slowly falling from my hands
I can't hold in the fear anymore
She presses herself upon me in a inferno
Her breath against my neck, seering

Telesthetic instability
Melts away your flesh, Renders you to ash
Her pain is the seed, for the apocalypse
And I am the father, Of her newest spawn

Her presence in flames
Engulfs me
In a distant blue
We are united
Caught between dementia
And insanity
A sickening union entwines itself
I cannot resist her

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A tree stands at her side
As a seraph to its god
A mushroom cloud exhalation
Leaves her creators burning

Alma's wrath
Has not yet been delivered



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Wrote these at work today, Its based on the game F.E.A.R and F.E.A.R 2: Project Origin, The story has absolutely enthralled me, And has inspired this particular piece very strongly smile.gif
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post Feb 28 2009, 01:21 PM
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[quote name='The Uncreator' date='Feb 27 2009, 01:48 AM' post='345619']
_ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _

Her Presence In Flames
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I have been encased, In seering smoke and fire
I have had there tools wrought upon me
My mind has been reshaped and reformed
Attuned to her presence, A darkness inexplicable

I must confess that I never studied the game "F.E.A.R" although I heard about it and saw some clips, but isntead of going to read the story, going to annalise this in my way...What it means to me. Again, in another piece of yours, I find the relation of a machine and man, in this case, a man turning into a machine or turning into a super human, perfected by machine. The "Her presence" mention, is unkown to me, because darkness can take many shapes.

Her mind awakens to my motions
With each breath, Her hands grasp tighter
Tortured and imbued with hatred and blessing
Each child she bore, ripped from her womb

Ok, this is what I wanted... biggrin.gif The darkness to be in the shape of a female. This part clearly shows how she influences you.

A tree stands at her side
As a seraph to its god
A mushroom cloud exhalation
Leaves her creators burning

Description of the land/background...Nice addition

My mind is slowly falling from my hands
I can't hold in the fear anymore
She presses herself upon me in a inferno
Her breath against my neck, seering

Ok, maybe the transmition of the emotion that gives the game it's name...FEAR!

Telesthetic instability
Melts away your flesh, Renders you to ash
Her pain is the seed, for the apocalypse
And I am the father, Of her newest spawn

Ok, you were pushed against your will and you created something you didn't want, since you consider it to be bad.

Her presence in flames
Engulfs me
In a distant blue
We are united
Caught between dementia
And insanity
A sickening union entwines itself
I cannot resist her

This touches me...You know it's bad, you know it's the birth of evil, yet you embrace it, cause you can't resist it...Makes me think about my life smile.gif

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A tree stands at her side
As a seraph to its god
A mushroom cloud exhalation
Leaves her creators burning

Alma's wrath
Has not yet been delivered

Must confess, after reading this, I'll search more information about the game biggrin.gif


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post Mar 22 2009, 03:42 PM
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How do you write so well? You have a real talent man!


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