First I'd like to thank all of you for participating in my first collab and to take this chanllenge that is those new sounds of the exotic scales.
The comments are divided in three parts, each for one part of the backing. I've tried to remark not only the things that I think you have to improve technically but also the compositional/improvisational skills, the note choice and some more things that came into my mind when I listened to your solos.
The order of the participants is not relevant, I added the takes in any order but in the name of the MP3 is the list and here obiously I commented in that order.
I recommend to everyone to read all the comments.
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Dexxxter Part 1The only comment about this part is that the first lick is a little un-accurate but the rest is great. I like how you prepare
the entrance of the second part and those tapped harmonics to get the octave of some notes.
You also took advantage on the "oriental" sounding of the scale and give it some phrasing like some players do to the
harmonic minor, that's something original because is what I've been looking to teach with this scales, some new sounding but aplied to these new scales.
Part 2Nice entrance melody and you've got an idea: movement in the backing = no too much movement into the lead line. I like that, is always a great strategy.
The final line where you go up to the limit of the guitar register is a really cool way to end that part.
Part 3Now you're back to the lower register, nice contrast with the previous part, also a nice idea. Also you've included in this part a typical pedal tone and considering this is the harmonic major is the perfect place to do that kind of thing, and again I'm glad you took the advice of following your old elements into this new sounding.
General commentsGreat playing, great ideas the only thing to remark is that sometimes you have little flaws like you missed some accurate rhythmic placing or some slides that are not precise, but considering the overall those are little things.
ZteviePart 1You've created a good motiv that helps you to the syntax of your solo. You start with this motiv with G, C and Db and then you answer it then come back and make a variation on it, then you go for other places and then when the part repeats you come back to the same motiv. That's a good idea, take phrase that will place your ideas in order.
Part 2In this part you use the same concept, start the part with a little melodic development. Also like Dexxxter you don't abuse of the movement of the guitar line and let the backing do the major motion. Is a nice touch the harmonics slide.
Part 3I think this is the weaker part of your solo. Here the ideas are more like floating around although there are some good out there to work on. In the 2:42 min. you have a bending that reaches to A and the scale has Ab, that's something that you could avoid, it doesn't sound nice to the part.
General commentsIt is a great take but I think you could improve some points:
-vibrato: you could practice to give a more natural feel to that technique.
-bendings: be aware of the notes that you're arriving when you improvize or make a solo.
Keep the good work!
LianPart 1First of all, nice idea of using harmonized lines and take advantage of the weird sounding of them. Like Dexxxter you went for some "oriental" sounding in this first part using the augmented 2nds of the scale, nice resource. I think the obligation of using harmonized lines gave you a really accurate enviroment where you have to really nail the rhythms.
Part 2Nice idea the triad work in that register. You've decided to move the things a little bit but the rhythm is always fitting
some pattern so it doesn't bother to have that movement in the lead.
Part 3My favourite part of your solo is this one. I like the harmonizations of the first notes are really cool give to the line other feel, maybe you could keep that idea running a little longer not all the time but a re-use of that part into the solo
is a nice option. Then the tapping licks are really wild, the ideas are not bad but I'm sure you've noticed that using this
scale is really different to fit the regular tapping licks that we are used to.
The last part of the solo is really really funny, and I love that thing of your playing. You make a melody and then you take out a lot of the gain and becomes like a whispering hahaha, really really nice idea, is like saying good-bye in a really low voice.
General CommentsWell mate I don't see any problems in your playing the solo is great. Maybe the only comment could be that the harmonizations don't have to be abused (but that's just for me, I don't like lots of harmonizations in a solo). Although you managed really well and there are a few that I just loved like the starting one in the third part.
OutlawPart 1Well mate, you start with some rhythmic idea and that is ok, you reapeat that idea through the whole part. I don't have a major problem with that but the rhythm is not precise, you have to work on that. The syncopation of the motive sometimes is ahead and sometimes behind. Work in that rhythm until is really in the right place everytime.
Part 2One part of the difficulties of this collab was the selection of the notes. In this part you start with a tapping lick that
sounds a little harsh because you picked first on a augmented triad and second on a note that isn't into the scale that is supposed to be played on that part, the A is not part of the scale if you re-arrange the tapping in order to play the Ab (the note of the scale) the sound is no more an augmented triad and it sounds more pleasent to the ear. You come back again to the same triad and then go to another augmented triad. So the triad-tapping idea is great but the note choice is not, is a really harsh sounding because the harmony is implied in the keys and the voices, if there was just the guitar on the backing could pass maybe but you have to notice the harmony in the back that is asking for something else.
Part 3This part I think is the one that is more improvised. The rhythm in many parts is very un-accurate. The tapping idea just before the end is nice but it doesn't lead to anything.
General CommentsI think that would be great if you work on some points:
-rhythm: practice always your ideas with a metronome and jam with some backing like a drum machine. Also would be great if you could write your ideas because that will give you a really precise placing of the rhythm and organice your mind.
-harmony: try to be aware of the harmony that is played on the bottom all the time so you won't have "wrong" notes.
-improvisation: work on the connection of your ideas, try to record and listen your improvisations and be aware of the
connections of them. The ideas are something that everybody has but the main problem in composition and improvisation is the connection between them.
Keep the good work!
Berko
Part 1The first idea is a little un-accurate rhythm placing. The problem that I find in this first part is that you've managed to
include lots of techniques: tapping, tapping with slide, tremolo. slides, alternate picking, legato but is like the ideas
come from the technique and not from where they have to come. I know this is a new sound and that's why you have to pay attention to the rhythm and the note choice insted of the technique. Don't missunderstand me, you have some nice ideas in that first part but I know you can make it better.
Part 2 As many participants you've chosen not to make lot of movement in this part and that's ok. No major problems here.
Part 3I think you have two cool things in this part: the open string lick and the tapping lick. Those ideas are the main thing to
develop here, but instead you took them like something that pass through. The open string idea is something that nobody came up and all the open strings (except the fifth) could fit into this scale.
General Comments
I think your playing is fine, the problem is not technical but something that it has to do with the time that you spent
playing the scale. Just give it some time to feel like it's the most normal thing in the world to play those notes and get
used to the augmented intervals.
Keep the good work!
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This post has been edited by Ramiro Delforte: Feb 28 2009, 01:19 AM
