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meltedgraphics
post Mar 11 2009, 02:02 AM
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This is the first time I've recorded my self, had three tracks and rhythem from my Boss Micro BR

This is a cool lesson if you like metal. Thank you Jose Mena for a great lesson, you rock man.
Here is the link to the lesson
https://www.guitarmasterclass.net/ls/songwriting-metal/

Well, here is my recording, please all opinions welcome

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post Mar 11 2009, 02:04 AM
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that was good mate, my only suggestion is to lighten up on the palm mutes, other than that it was good


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post Mar 11 2009, 02:03 PM
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Great, maybe that palm mute at the beginning....Sounds fine, but I would suggest you to try less-muted version as well, then compare, and decide!


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post Mar 11 2009, 03:47 PM
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Thanks both of you,

I appriciate the help. I'll try and upload a new version of it in the next couple of day's.

Thanks Again,
Jeff
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post Mar 11 2009, 04:01 PM
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It sounds really cool. Just a bir more precise timing. You need to stick to the drums like a machine. This sounds like you're playing these riffs on your neck pickup position. More treble would be better. Anyway, very cool idea for the song I like it.


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post Mar 15 2009, 11:21 PM
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well first to all, the idea´s very cool! I like the harmonies in thirds. the riffs and the melody.
the sound is not good enough, try more treble or presence, and a little bit of drive.
about sounding, it´s ok, but it´s a little unprecise. work on your rhythm parts, remember, this´s metal, you have to be killer, agresive, you know what I mean... wink.gif
the idea is so cool, I hope to see how it grows up.

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post Mar 15 2009, 11:23 PM
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I love this lesson! One of my favorites. Nice take by the way!


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post Mar 17 2009, 01:19 AM
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Your take is quite good but I think the main problem is that you have a backing that confuses you. You put like a shuffle rhythm over a metal rhythm guitar. The drums are more straight in the backing that jose did.
I've made a MIDI where I wrote some drums so you can hear the difference.

Also pay attention to Jose's playing where he's really tight when he plays the notes and that's because of the palm mute and his picking hand is very accurate, really precise.

The drum track I wrote is not complete is only for you to notice the difference and is a total different feel that contribute to keep a good rhythm, otherway you're like in metal and the drummer has a groove like he's playing some song from Dave Mathews Band, you know what I mean.

Keep the good work mate!
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