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post Apr 10 2009, 11:35 PM
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I misjudge the moonlight waters
Wrote again on my gravestone's past
The words I swore to bury
Last Winter's Night

You looked away from the pure of heart
Mocking inside your dreadful mind
The courage I had to please you
Turned me to stone

You made my head seam empty from pain
Washed on the shores of my fantasy
I claimed my prize, the reward I fought for
You denied it, sent me back to the sea
Now I feel like always, I've fallen again

Love is darkness blend, The stain on my soul
And there he goes again, hope is there
Open your eyes, see it's useless to fight

Cold storms are brought for the fallen beings of the world
Yell from your heart the justice you'll never be given
For all the sake of mankind you tried to change
Just lie awake on the floor, and await for the devil's call

Love is darkness blend, The stain on my soul
And there he goes again, hope is there
Open your eyes, see it's useless to fight

Phantom I can see you, playing gently those soft chords
The feeling of your eyes, while seeing your prize for another soul
Soul which doesn't deserve the same greatness as you
We are strong, we've surpassed, but unlike you
I just wished I could drown at sea

After such poetry as a sonet, written only for your beauty
I appreciate the kindness of this needle in my heart
Again I'm bound to hear the people I like
Confort me in the unique way I despise

Love is darkness blend, The stain on my soul
And there he goes again, hope is there
Open your eyes, see it's useless to fight

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Random Writing about my feelings atm

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Filipe Rocha 2009

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post Apr 11 2009, 09:56 AM
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nice, reminds me of nightwish kinda
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Marek Rojewski
post Apr 11 2009, 10:27 AM
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Yeah, as Startear said it has the Gothic/Goth-poetry vibe in it. I couldn't find anything that I could point out, expect the line " Again I'm bound to hear the people I like " - nothing wrong in it, but this single line sounds more "everyday"/normal/average than the whole rest. My first impression after reading the line was "hmm, it doesn't fit a bit".

But the whole creation is more than good than me, You are really good at writing lyrics:)


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post Apr 11 2009, 05:49 PM
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Nightwish is a great inspiration for me in everyway, I feel many of the things tuomas feels, but I have different "idols" to attend other than a so called Child and the Poet.


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