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post Apr 26 2009, 01:57 AM
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Lustitia

Where are you lady Justice
Why have you gone away
The crooked laws have twisted
And we're the ones who pay.

Where are you lady Justice
In you we held our faith
All innocents are criminal
Sent to contemplate their deaths.

Where were you Lady Justice
When we raped the world for gain
Fortuna, Tyche and Nemesis
The triple symbol of pain

Lustitia
Abandon all hope
Lustitia
Abandon all hope

Where are you lady Justice
Your scales a judas cradle
You shoved your morals down our throats
With your treacherous betrayal

Where are you Lady Justice
No duty or obligation
guiltless and oblivious
in your selfless escalation

Where were you Lady Justice
When we raped the world for gain
Fortuna, Tyche and Nemesis
The triple symbol of pain
luck, fate and vengeance
Skulking in the shadows of shame.

Lustitia
Abandon all hope
Lustitia
Abandon all hope!



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post Apr 26 2009, 04:56 AM
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This is really good.
I loved all the verse alot.
Great rhymes.

I see where your going with the Chorus, maybe yelling in almost a metal anthem way, but it seems to simple.

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Lustitia
Abandon all hope
Lustitia
Abandon all hope


thats what you wrote, and I see why you did that it works nice.

I may have done something like

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Lustitia
Abandon all hope
Lustitia
Hold our hands in the fire.
Lustitia
Save us from the world!




Something like that, I dont know.

Just repeating Abandon all hope seems to redundent to me.


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post Apr 26 2009, 08:28 AM
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Cheers! I think that's a good idea

I want to keep the last part as

Lustitia
abandon all hope
Lustitia
abandon all hope

But I think you're right about changing the first one.


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