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QUOTE (skennington @ Oct 25 2009, 07:16 PM) *
Yes, it does! Love it smile.gif I also like the fact you can still here her accent a bit in the pronunciation. Well done guys! cool.gif


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QUOTE (vampire18 @ Oct 25 2009, 07:08 PM) *
if thats luisana(it sounds like its her) singing, her accent is flawless, and i can connecnt much more to the song when i udnerstand the lyrics, its very very good. would make a very succesfull single in my opinion, very mainstream compared to other things i heard.
is it ok if i put it on my mp3 player?


Hey! thank you! I think this is the begining of a English album!


QUOTE (Marek Rojewski @ Oct 25 2009, 07:10 PM) *
The word "ear" was sang in a way that made me think "hmmm something can be not right", and besides that some words in the :

It is said that the unconscious is so endless
Reality is everything that you set going
I want to hear you...

sounded pronounced quite strange, after that everything was sang in a way that sounded proper, of course I don't have to mention that Lucianas voice and singing skill are great, and it all in all this song really sound great in english version.


Excellent! We need this types of comments, because I always said that our english is different. See.. my mother is an English teacher but our pronunciation it's weird for me. The accent is perfect here in Argentina but in the world with the english as native language it's different of course...
Thank you for the comment



QUOTE (Fran @ Oct 25 2009, 07:14 PM) *
Awesome. I always prefer lyrics in English (and I'm Spanish), so pretty cool song. I specially like the chorus, it has an Evanescence scent to it.


Thank you! the songs always sounds better in english version.... I don't know why..but it's true



QUOTE (Marek Rojewski @ Oct 25 2009, 07:16 PM) *
Yeah has some evanescence vibe, but more enjoyable if You ask me:)


evanescence!!!! wow! thanks!!!!!!



QUOTE (Bondy @ Oct 25 2009, 07:24 PM) *
i was one of the first at GMC to buy your album and i would buy it again in English, awesome stuff i can sing along now lol, instead of trying to do so with a Spanish accent. lol


hahahah!, thank you!!! biggrin.gif



QUOTE (Andrew Cockburn @ Oct 25 2009, 07:50 PM) *
Wow, sounds great in English - Luci, your singing is as always awesome, and I would honestly not know you weren't a native English speaker, your accent is superb!


I think this is a great way to spread the reach of Cirse - I bought the original album, I would buy it again if there was a full English version!


wow Andrew!! Thanks a lot!!! we are thinking on that....mmm CIRSE in English.. could be work! cool.gif



QUOTE (Kristofer Dahl @ Oct 25 2009, 07:57 PM) *
Hehe now we are talking laugh.gif I love this album, but still I must agree that the fact that I now understand what you are saying definitely raises the song to an even higher level.

I guess there are some places where pronunciation could be improved - but I think this level of English is already enough to convince an international audience (don't forget this comes from a Swede! rolleyes.gif )


Thank you Kris!!!!!! I´m working on it! wink.gif



QUOTE (kahall @ Oct 25 2009, 08:10 PM) *
Sounds fine to me. Love it.


Thanks! wink.gif


QUOTE (Rated Htr @ Oct 25 2009, 08:40 PM) *
Great One Gabriel smile.gif Nice work Cirse wink.gif


Thanks! wink.gif


QUOTE (audiopaal @ Oct 25 2009, 08:50 PM) *
Finally biggrin.gif
You talked about this some while ago, and I've been waiting ever since!
I love the english version smile.gif
I can't say much about the language and phrases, as English is not my native language either..
But Lucianas pronunciation is superb smile.gif

Great work!!!
I'll definitely buy the english version if you release one smile.gif


Hey Thank you a lot!!!!



QUOTE (Crazy_Diamond @ Oct 25 2009, 08:54 PM) *
I love it Gab !!! I wouldn't mind with the small accents I think it adds to the song. I heard some song in english where the spanish accents was way more audible.



QUOTE (zicco @ Oct 25 2009, 08:58 PM) *
Very good! smile.gif She has a very good singing voice. laugh.gif


Thank you!!! biggrin.gif



QUOTE (Marc_Maiden @ Oct 25 2009, 09:07 PM) *
i am in love <3


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QUOTE (Marek Rojewski @ Oct 25 2009, 09:13 PM) *
Gabriel, I can't exactly say what I have in mind, just that the part "It is said that the unconscious" sounds bit unnatural to me, still don't know how to change it, to still fit the great sounding " is so endless" part that comes after it. Hope it helps a bit, Cirse is a great band:)


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WOW!!! this is really really good!! yeah certainly has an evanescence sound and feel to it. this song is every bit as good as anything on the radio today!!
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I listened to the tune before reading anyone's comments. It sounds great, and the singing is excellent. I didn't notice anything to worry about regarding pronunciation or accent. Luciana sounds just slightly exotic, which is good. It fits the phrasing. Don't mess with your style just to sound more like a news announcer. I look forward to hearing more.
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May I request "Muy Tarde" in English? Love this tune and would love it even more if I knew what you guys were saying.. laugh.gif

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I love it. Exactly my taste in music. Everything sounds good together. and she has an amazing voice!

Well done. Nail on the head!


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QUOTE (THE BUZZARD @ Oct 26 2009, 03:49 AM) *
WOW!!! this is really really good!! yeah certainly has an evanescence sound and feel to it. this song is every bit as good as anything on the radio today!!


wow! thank you!! biggrin.gif


QUOTE (methodseeker @ Oct 26 2009, 03:54 AM) *
I listened to the tune before reading anyone's comments. It sounds great, and the singing is excellent. I didn't notice anything to worry about regarding pronunciation or accent. Luciana sounds just slightly exotic, which is good. It fits the phrasing. Don't mess with your style just to sound more like a news announcer. I look forward to hearing more.


Hey thanks for your comment...I'm happy because I sound exotic! huh.gif laugh.gif ... hahaha!...thanks for helping us ...



QUOTE (skennington @ Oct 26 2009, 04:07 AM) *
May I request "Muy Tarde" in English? Love this tune and would love it even more if I knew what you guys were saying.. laugh.gif

Awesome work! smile.gif


Maybe the next song will be "Muy Tarde"... I have to practice that... dry.gif



QUOTE (CathShadow @ Oct 26 2009, 12:48 PM) *
I love it. Exactly my taste in music. Everything sounds good together. and she has an amazing voice!

Well done. Nail on the head!


Thanks a lot! rolleyes.gif


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QUOTE (skennington @ Oct 26 2009, 04:07 AM) *
May I request "Muy Tarde" in English? Love this tune and would love it even more if I knew what you guys were saying.. laugh.gif

Awesome work! smile.gif


I totally agree!
I love that song, it's just perfect. I already told Gabe once, if that song was aired on the radio over here it could easily be a major hit. At least it's a hit for me.

Would love to hear it English, though the lyrics in Spanish are way too good and probably hard to translate keeping the feeling & message.

Did I mention how great that tune is already?? cool.gif cool.gif laugh.gif


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QUOTE (Fran @ Oct 26 2009, 12:46 PM) *
I totally agree!
I love that song, it's just perfect. I already told Gabe once, if that song was aired on the radio over here it could easily be a major hit. At least it's a hit for me.

Would love to hear it English, though the lyrics in Spanish are way too good and probably hard to translate keeping the feeling & message.

Did I mention how great that tune is already?? cool.gif cool.gif laugh.gif


laugh.gif Thank you Fran! We already have this lyric translated but as you suspect it's very difficult in this case to keep the feeling without losing the melody so it needs a little more work.


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Song lyrics, rather like poetry are often harder to translate then prose as they rely much more on metaphors and so on. I'm sure whoever did the translation has done a great job. My one suggestion is not to go for a verbatim translation, or even one that is in technically perfect grammar but one that conveys the meaning and the feeling smile.gif .


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I told you before, this version is really really great guys! congrats Cirse!!
also it´s so great to see the awesome feedback from native English people, that make things easier for singers! smile.gif


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QUOTE (tonymiro @ Oct 26 2009, 02:47 PM) *
Song lyrics, rather like poetry are often harder to translate then prose as they rely much more on metaphors and so on. I'm sure whoever did the translation has done a great job. My one suggestion is not to go for a verbatim translation, or even one that is in technically perfect grammar but one that conveys the meaning and the feeling smile.gif .



yes, tony. This really makes sense! Thank you for the suggestion! wink.gif


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very nice song, very melodic, and the voice of luciana , she 's got everything , she's beautiful, she's got a nice voice, anything is good, very SUPER,like we said in french, see you gab.
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the whole song is very Evanescence, and Evanescence rocks tongue.gif I think the singing is very nice. Ofcourse Luciana can do some prefecting of here accent, but I think she does very good! For instance eastern European people often pronounce words like "song" like "songue" but that kind of mistakes are really not anywhere found in the song!

On the song itself, I think the beginning part is a bit long. Oh, and just to share my opinion, the word unconscious indeed sounds a bit odd, like it's sang in an arabic way.

I really like the parts in this song where the guitar is playing rock as well! of course you need a build up, so it's good to start out soft, but maybe there's a bit to much of that in the song. Also it's way harder to sing those English lyrics in the soft part. The chorusses are sang extremely good, you guys can be very happy with someone as talented as Luciana!

Last but not least, I kinda miss an intro and solo tongue.gif his might sound like lots of critics, but I think you're song is already quite comparible with the "real" Evanescence songs!

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QUOTE (skennington @ Oct 26 2009, 04:07 AM) *
May I request "Muy Tarde" in English? Love this tune and would love it even more if I knew what you guys were saying.. laugh.gif

Awesome work! smile.gif

Yeah!! Muy Tarde is really awesome and could indeed be a cool hit!! It is awesome! I'm going to listen it now tongue.gif


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I hope this is a beginning of an international career! smile.gif

Awesome Gab, song sounds great, and chorus is excellent! Production is really kicking nicely, very smooth track, and pleasant for listening, which is very important. It has a great flow to it. smile.gif

There are some places where I think pronunciation is a bit strange, but since I'm not native English speaker, take this with a pinch of salt. Here are my observations if it is OK:

Come close to me, astonish me, be slow and quiet
Come close to me, and always whisper in my ear.
And tell me it is true.


It is said that the unconscious is so endless
[Reality] is everything that you set going
I want to hear you...


No one could get in, killing all my [distress]
Leaving behind all my strong will, something will remain.


Well now tell me what I should do, oh my free spirit
Show me that place, that holy place, where we shall be together.


No one could get in, killing all my distress
Leaving behind all my strong will, something will remain.


Why are you [unfair] to me, and leave me to be lost and lonely?
Please talk to me, please give me your warm love.


No one could get in, killing all my distress
Leaving behind all my strong will, something will remain.

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QUOTE (Ivan Milenkovic @ Nov 1 2009, 08:58 AM) *
I hope this is a beginning of an international career! smile.gif

Awesome Gab, song sounds great, and chorus is excellent! Production is really kicking nicely, very smooth track, and pleasant for listening, which is very important. It has a great flow to it. smile.gif

There are some places where I think pronunciation is a bit strange, but since I'm not native English speaker, take this with a pinch of salt. Here are my observations if it is OK:

Come close to me, astonish me, be slow and quiet
Come close to me, and always whisper in my ear.
And tell me it is true.


It is said that the unconscious is so endless
[Reality] is everything that you set going
I want to hear you...


No one could get in, killing all my [distress]
Leaving behind all my strong will, something will remain.


Well now tell me what I should do, oh my free spirit
Show me that place, that holy place, where we shall be together.


No one could get in, killing all my distress
Leaving behind all my strong will, something will remain.


Why are you [unfair] to me, and leave me to be lost and lonely?
Please talk to me, please give me your warm love.


No one could get in, killing all my distress
Leaving behind all my strong will, something will remain.



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QUOTE (tonymiro @ Oct 26 2009, 02:47 PM) *
Song lyrics, rather like poetry are often harder to translate then prose as they rely much more on metaphors and so on. I'm sure whoever did the translation has done a great job. My one suggestion is not to go for a verbatim translation, or even one that is in technically perfect grammar but one that conveys the meaning and the feeling smile.gif .


I think this is important suggestion, as like you said Gabriel, it is hard to translate but still keep the melody and feel of the original song.

But even with that being said, I think you guys rocked this one!!!! I loved the original, and I must apologize for my complete butchering of your beautiful language in my car as I drive to work. I might not have a clue of what you are singing about, or how to properly pronounce it, but I still tried to sing along smile.gif Now I really can sing along... much to the chagrin of my passengers I'm sure laugh.gif laugh.gif You guys know I'm a huge fan so now that I can also understand what you are writing it is very exciting.

Luci's voice is amazing, but singing in english I think she has that extra little something. Very exotic and refreshing. I can't wait to hear more.

No matter how you translate it.... CIRSE ROCKS!!!!!!

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QUOTE (rokchik @ Nov 1 2009, 07:23 PM) *
I think this is important suggestion, as like you said Gabriel, it is hard to translate but still keep the melody and feel of the original song.

But even with that being said, I think you guys rocked this one!!!! I loved the original, and I must apologize for my complete butchering of your beautiful language in my car as I drive to work. I might not have a clue of what you are singing about, or how to properly pronounce it, but I still tried to sing along smile.gif Now I really can sing along... much to the chagrin of my passengers I'm sure laugh.gif laugh.gif You guys know I'm a huge fan so now that I can also understand what you are writing it is very exciting.

Luci's voice is amazing, but singing in english I think she has that extra little something. Very exotic and refreshing. I can't wait to hear more.

No matter how you translate it.... CIRSE ROCKS!!!!!!


Hey Rok!! Thanks a lot for your nice feedback! smile.gif I hope we have enough time to record all the new material in both languages to let people from everywhere understand our lyrics! smile.gif
I would love to be in your head to notice the "exotic" feeling in Luciana's singing.... laugh.gif
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QUOTE (Gabriel Leopardi @ Nov 11 2009, 09:53 AM) *
Hey Rok!! Thanks a lot for your nice feedback! smile.gif I hope we have enough time to record all the new material in both languages to let people from everywhere understand our lyrics! smile.gif
I would love to be in your head to notice the "exotic" feeling in Luciana's singing.... laugh.gif
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