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post Feb 10 2010, 08:19 PM
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Here is one of the first songs I ever wrote, Re-done drastically (Especially the drums). The end result I am quite happy with, and would like to hear your opinions on it. The song is pretty straightforward with the exception of a few solos here and there. Let me know what you think! smile.gif



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Nostalgia For Infinity
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Here I stand on the edge of a machine
A spherical mass, Dwarfing the Sun
Faced with the ultimate end of existence
My eye's stare into infinity

I walk along the surface of light
Contemplating how it will end for me
I know there is no other choice
I must make my sacrifice

SOLO

Heart and mind
Are conflicted
As I force, My hand into the sphere
I am soon consumed in it's light
Falling inside this machine
My arms desperately try to grasp
Something, but nothing in eternity

Here I stand inside of this machine
Vertigo obscuring, All my vision
The figures before me barely shadows
Try to explain this feeling to me

Mind is relaxing, The pain is fading
My feelings of fear have subsided
Is this the life, That awaits me after death
Is this to be my continuance

"Welcome to a simulated world
This is to be your existence
Body has died, But life pushes on
Mind integrated in this machine
A massive, galactic, Universal brain
Infinite in it's calculations"

SOLO

"We have remained here for 900 years
Studying life that never has been seen"

"Isolated from the outside worlds
Contained in our digital spheres"

"Our bodies perished so long ago
But we live on in the form of information
We know you do not belong here
Your destiny awaits in the coldness of space
Take we impart to you
Our infinite knowledge"

Here I stand on the edge of a machine
Arms open and ready to leave
A short breath I take before...

...Light Speed!






© Brett Windnagle, 2010

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post Feb 10 2010, 08:25 PM
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Sounds great. I think it needs just a touch of louder bass and louder vocal. Also you don't need that much reverb on the solo. It's really all about tiny touches, overall mix is pretty good


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post Feb 10 2010, 08:28 PM
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Thanks Emir, Will try that right now.
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post Feb 22 2010, 03:48 PM
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I'm enjoying the lyrics!

I agree with Emir's suggestions in the mix...

I like the snare drum

the kickdrum is too thin to my taste




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