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Ivan Milenkovic
post Sep 2 2010, 08:44 PM
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Ok guys, I had some busy times lately, but I finished comments on the road with my laptop, here it is. Thank you very much for participating in this one! smile.gif


Marek

rhythm: very good rhythmic figures, and good use of different note durations.Except couple of misplased notes here and there nothing to add.
Phrasing: good intro with nice development, and good phrases is general. I would advise that you use bit more arpeggios in your playing next to the bends and minor/pentatonic scale.
Technique: main thing you should focus on is the precision when bending. You should definiteyl spend more time with vibrato too, since this is extremelly important effect to add to any longer note in your playing. Everything else was very nice, and besides some note bleeds here and there it was all good.
Sound: a bit piercing and mid scooped sound can be heard here. Space is a bit too much, and so is distortion. Also, in the mix with the backing there is large ammount of clipping, and the sound is sucked in, probably due to overuse of compression.

K1R

rhythm: good use of existing rhythmic figures, but the main concern for you should be rehearsing with as much as different note durations possible. This will create much needed diversity in your rhythmical phrases. Also, it is not a bad idea to let some note sustain a bit. Small pauses are just as important as eveeything else, specially on some strong note or importanat part of the song.
phrasing: good use of pentatonic minor and minor scale. When you are using these scales, try to rehearse as much as different combinations of notes/lines possible. Learning chords can help you as well, since you learn where the strong notes are, so you can combine arpeggios with your current licks and scales
technique: two most important things that you should work on are bending and vibrato. Nothing more to add, but this should be next on your list.
sound: The sound is good, but I have a feeling you need more distortion. It would sound better and create more smoother sound.

Chris:

rhythm: Very nice figures that don’t all start on the downbeat, which is cool. Great use of longer notes to accent the suspense. Also, there was some good contrast between trilled notes and longer ones. One note – the ending could have a bit more balanced use of notes. It starts fast, and it ends sharply with couple of much longer notes.
phrasing: very good use of arpeggiated lines to follow the chords, although I have a feeling that you are in a bit of a search of those strong notes here and there.
technique: Great technique with all the elements properly executed. One critique I can give is the muting control on faster bits. Everything else is great.
sound: Very good sound, with good cut and good reverb. Delay is a bit too much as the main notes are loosing definition slightly, but it’s not too bad.


Maharzan:

rhythm: I like the fact that you used several different note durations, and that longer notes are in the beginning and shorter ones in the end of the take. However, I feel that there is some kind of a faster passage missing. At least one. On the other hand, the whole solo has a nice sense to it, so that is a positive side. My advice is to start doing some faster passages, as your note use is quite good, and you will find a good use for those passages.
phrasing: I like the way you phrase, you give your lines a smooth flow, and they are all nicely connected. Important thing for you to do with this sort of talent is to start learning different scales, arpeggios and various lines that you can incorporate into your playing to create versatility.
technique: Correct use of vibrato, and nice use of bends. I also like your tone control and muting. If I would have to suggest one thing to practice it’s vibrato and bends – it needs to be more controlled.
sound: Sound is good, smooth, but it lacks a bit of presence. Try boosting the upper range a bit.


JamesT:

rhythm: great rhythmic phrases, that have a good flow with the backing. Pauses are implemented as well, in a excellent way. In the second part of the song, there should be more of them, but it is pretty effective like it is.
Phrasing: great phrasing throughout the solo, specially in the first part! Sounds excellent. I love that kind of bluesy phrasing. In the second part, you sort of let go and played a bit loose and faster, which is also great, but I have a feeling that last part is a bit undefined. If you came back to the first theme somewhere in there, it would be awesome, to round up the solo.
Technique: Great techniques, lots of stuff displayed. Cool bending and good vibrato. Tone control is also pretty good, although you should work on cutting down uncessecary noise from the guitar./strings.
sound:Sounds is great, smooth, a bit harsh, but not in a bad way. It cuts great, very cool.


kaz

Rhythm: very good rhythm figures, I like how they have a smooth natural flow with the backing, specially the ones in the second part. One thing I didn't like is the big pause in the middle. It should have something there, like big slide, pick string slide, or sustained note.
phrasing:Great phrases throughout the solo, and good arpeggio licks here and there. Main thing I can recommend. is not to use arpeggios in so obvious way, and if you are dooing up^down arp, it should be faster. One more important thing is that there were quite a few missed notes, so when doing faster sequences, always make sure you are within the pattern properly.
technique: very good execution, mostly problems with keeping the tone consitent for faster licks, and with vibrato and bends.
sound:nice sound, a bit too harsh, but good and smooth. The main problem in this case is not the sound itself, but the fingers and proper tone control.


Guitarerro:

rhythm: nicely played, but I believe you lack some faster note passages here and there. Most of phrases contain same rhythmical figures, which makes the phrases sound repetitive. Changing the beginning of the phrase to some other place in the bar, or structure of the phrase will fix that.
phrasing: Good melodic passages, there were some missplased notes but it is OK. I think there is more practicing to be done on arpeggios and various scale lines which will improve your versatility.
technique: nicely played, but with little use of dynamics, everythign sounds a bit flat. Another important thing is bending and vibrato – it needs to be more even and precise.
sound: Sound is decent, but there is some clipping here and there. Distortion can be better and there can be some reverb or delay added too.

Jitty

rhythm: It’s good thing that you used several different note durations, but timing was poor in this take. You have to get into the groove and practice more with the metronome. Try tapping your foot while you play, and lock yourself to important beat elements: kick and snare.
phrasing: Your phrasing was decent in this take, and I should suggest that if you want to upgrade your improvising you should work more on arpeggios and knowing where the strong notes are.
technique: There are several important things that you should focus on when practicing: bending, vibrato, sync between hands, and muting.
sound: Too much and buzzy distortion that sounds like there is no cab simulation. Adding some cab simulator on top would fix the problem.

thefireball

rhythm: good use of longer notes, but poor use of faster note passages. Also, timing is not right, and you need to work on that too.
phrasing: More work on arpeggios will help you figure our where the strong notes are and try to use them during the take while following the chords. Also you lack fluidness in your playing, need to work on connecting the phrases better with slides or other techniques.
technique: more work on bends, vibrato, and alternate picking precision will help you to achieve better tone control.
sound: Tone can be better. It has some kind of noise throughout the take, and distortion is too harsh. Using a cab simulator over everything can help smooth out things.

MigeZ

rhythm: Very nice rhythmic figures, but a bit unbalanced and “glued together”. Need to connect them better, specially the first and second part transition. However, I think you manage to find a good balance naturally, which is a good thing.
phrasing: Phrasing was quite good in your take, there were some thematic approaches in the first part, and it would be cool to repeat that theme later on too. The second part is very good, and has some great melodic lines.
technique: Technique is quite good muting. I would however say that you need better precision on those faster parts. Tone control is a bit on a weak side too, not all notes sound even and nice.
sound: Sound is great, very smooth and cool sounding with big space added. The second part is a bit too louder than the first one, but this can be fixed if you used volume knob instead of volume fader in post production.


Mudbone

rhythm: good rhythmic figures in the first part, while in the second one you had some timing issues. Try focusing more on stronger parts of the beat/drum. Every note should be more in place, than out of place. Also, balancing longer and shorter notes is very important too.
phrasing: biggest problem in this take IMO. You need to spend more time on music theory, and analyzing what chords are belonging to what scale, so you can use that scale. You missed out a key here, so that should be on the priority list.
technique: More work on bends, vibrato, and left hand fretting.
sound: A bit harsh and dry sound with enough distortion but not enough smoothness. Try adding a cab simulation on top of everything and cutting down the upper range.



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post Sep 2 2010, 09:18 PM
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Thanks for commenting. I'm gonna start studying Improvising with arpeggios series. Would you recommend something else?
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post Sep 2 2010, 09:26 PM
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Thanks for the comments Ivan smile.gif and for the criticism because that is what I need to know where to do better. Yeah I'm a bit sloppy on the fast runs but it's getting more accurate everyday. Yeah the tone control isn't my biggest pro biggrin.gif But anyways thanks for making this collab I really enjoyed it. Any ideas for a tone control lesson or something similar which to work on? smile.gif
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post Sep 5 2010, 08:54 PM
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Hey Ivan, thank you for putting this together, great job! smile.gif

thank you for your comments, I enjoyed this collab alot

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post Sep 5 2010, 09:16 PM
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Thanks Ivan! I need to work on all of what you said, indeed. I also shouldn't wait til the last minute. wink.gif


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Ivan Milenkovic
post Sep 14 2010, 03:00 PM
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QUOTE (K1R @ Sep 2 2010, 10:18 PM) *
Thanks for commenting. I'm gonna start studying Improvising with arpeggios series. Would you recommend something else?
By the way you have done a great job of mixing. smile.gif

Thanks a lot my friend. Yes, I can recommend this series (soon there will be the second lesson of these series). Also, I can recommend any arpeggio related lesson, as long as you understand the concept of arpeggios, what they are, and how to integrate arpeggios that you learn in to your every day playing. But, let me know if you want me to help you with this further.

QUOTE (MigeZ @ Sep 2 2010, 10:26 PM) *
Thanks for the comments Ivan smile.gif and for the criticism because that is what I need to know where to do better. Yeah I'm a bit sloppy on the fast runs but it's getting more accurate everyday. Yeah the tone control isn't my biggest pro biggrin.gif But anyways thanks for making this collab I really enjoyed it. Any ideas for a tone control lesson or something similar which to work on? smile.gif
Cheers laugh.gif

Thank you mate. For tone control, I cannot recommend any specific lesson other than my muting tutorial here on GMC. Just check out the lesson, understand the concept, and apply muting on every note you practice. Also, be aware that for good tone control you have to practice with good tone control on slow tempos. For example, while you are on very slow tempos with metronome, just make sure that every note has same duration, there are no pauses between them, and that every note sounds the same as the other one. This creates a solid foundation for a smooth flow of even notes later on, which helps both tone and speed development.

QUOTE (Chris Evans @ Sep 5 2010, 09:54 PM) *
Hey Ivan, thank you for putting this together, great job! smile.gif

thank you for your comments, I enjoyed this collab alot

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Thank you for joining in my friend, very glad to have you on this collab! smile.gif

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Thanks Ivan! I need to work on all of what you said, indeed. I also shouldn't wait til the last minute. wink.gif

You're welcome mate! If you need any help, let me know, I will try to help as much as I can. smile.gif


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Thanks Ivan for the comments. I indeed need to start playing faster riffs.. thats what I lack big time. smile.gif will work on that.


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QUOTE (Ivan Milenkovic @ Sep 2 2010, 03:44 PM) *
Mudbone

rhythm: good rhythmic figures in the first part, while in the second one you had some timing issues. Try focusing more on stronger parts of the beat/drum. Every note should be more in place, than out of place. Also, balancing longer and shorter notes is very important too.
phrasing: biggest problem in this take IMO. You need to spend more time on music theory, and analyzing what chords are belonging to what scale, so you can use that scale. You missed out a key here, so that should be on the priority list.
technique: More work on bends, vibrato, and left hand fretting.
sound: A bit harsh and dry sound with enough distortion but not enough smoothness. Try adding a cab simulation on top of everything and cutting down the upper range.


Thanks for your input Ivan, I'll get to work on all your recommendations. As far as my tone in this take, I only managed to get in my first take before acid started messing up, and therefore I had no chance to make any adjustments. But nonetheless, everything you pointed out will be addressed in my next attempt smile.gif


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