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Jim S. View Member Profile	Dec 8 2013, 08:29 AM
Dec 8 2013, 08:29 AM	Learning Rock Star Posts: 718 Joined: 7-April 13	I finally got to sit down and play and it only seemed fair to write something new. Sometimes I have to write and I need to complete it in a night. I know it's probably hasty but it's nice to have something to show for your work. Anyways if you have any feedback on this id appreciate it. Thanks https://soundcloud.com/jim-seekford-music/the-burn-of-the-sun You are at GuitarMasterClass.net Don't miss today's free lick. Plus all our lessons are packed with free content! Don't miss today's free blues, jazz & country licks. Plus all our lessons are packed with free content!

Ben Higgins View Member Profile	Dec 8 2013, 10:37 AM
Dec 8 2013, 10:37 AM	Instructor Posts: 13.792 Joined: 11-March 10 From: England	I love the guitar tones on this.. really tasty. The whole section between 1:25 and 1:40 is a bit weird to me.. but after it's passed I get back into the vibe of it again. If you could fine some tighter way of transferring from one section to the other I think the track would sound better You are at GuitarMasterClass.net Don't miss today's free lick. Plus all our lessons are packed with free content! Don't miss today's free blues, jazz & country licks. Plus all our lessons are packed with free content! -------------------- My Lessons My Youtube Channel My Band

Jim S. View Member Profile	Dec 8 2013, 04:20 PM
Dec 8 2013, 04:20 PM	Learning Rock Star Posts: 718 Joined: 7-April 13	QUOTE (Ben Higgins @ Dec 8 2013, 05:37 AM) I love the guitar tones on this.. really tasty. The whole section between 1:25 and 1:40 is a bit weird to me.. but after it's passed I get back into the vibe of it again. If you could fine some tighter way of transferring from one section to the other I think the track would sound better Ben thanks! Yeah I know what you mean, I'll work on my transitions. I think writing drums measure by measure might be helpful too. You are at GuitarMasterClass.net Don't miss today's free lick. Plus all our lessons are packed with free content! Don't miss today's free blues, jazz & country licks. Plus all our lessons are packed with free content!

Gabriel Leopardi View Member Profile	Dec 9 2013, 12:16 AM
Dec 9 2013, 12:16 AM	Instructor Posts: 36.043 Joined: 3-March 07 From: Argentina	hi mate, very nice idea. The only thing that I would expect and I think it's lacking is a melody that works as a chorus, something more memorable. The overall tune creates a very cool atmosphere but I think it would be great if it explodes near the end. You are at GuitarMasterClass.net Don't miss today's free lick. Plus all our lessons are packed with free content! Don't miss today's free blues, jazz & country licks. Plus all our lessons are packed with free content! -------------------- My lessons Do you need a Guitar Plan? Join Gab's Army Check my band:Cirse Check my soundcloud:Soundcloud Please subscribe to my:Youtube Channel

Jim S. View Member Profile	Dec 9 2013, 01:32 AM
Dec 9 2013, 01:32 AM	Learning Rock Star Posts: 718 Joined: 7-April 13	QUOTE (Gabriel Leopardi @ Dec 8 2013, 07:16 PM) hi mate, very nice idea. The only thing that I would expect and I think it's lacking is a melody that works as a chorus, something more memorable. The overall tune creates a very cool atmosphere but I think it would be great if it explodes near the end. You are spot on, when I hear it I feel a sinking feeling toward the end. Patience always slips away when I write. I should spend more time with my projects. A melody would be nice maybe recurring too. I had a hard time playing lead over the chunky rhythm. Thanks for the feedback You are at GuitarMasterClass.net Don't miss today's free lick. Plus all our lessons are packed with free content! Don't miss today's free blues, jazz & country licks. Plus all our lessons are packed with free content!

Darius Wave View Member Profile	Dec 9 2013, 02:56 PM
Dec 9 2013, 02:56 PM	Instructor Posts: 5.871 Joined: 29-November 12 From: Poland	It's a very cool idea but something is missing for me. Maybe it's the "game of reverbs" that would compensate that there is not too many tracks - sort of trio mode at some moments. This could be also some not-interfering / disturbing pad in the background mixing. Also had a feeling of timming isses. Did You draw the drums or played them manually with the keyboard? You are at GuitarMasterClass.net Don't miss today's free lick. Plus all our lessons are packed with free content! Don't miss today's free blues, jazz & country licks. Plus all our lessons are packed with free content! -------------------- Check out my lessons and my instructor profile www.facebook.com/DariusWave www.youtube.pl/vavrzyn www.niebonie.pl www.jammingcherry.pl www.facebook.com/druzyna.wawrzyna

Jim S. View Member Profile	Dec 9 2013, 03:44 PM
Dec 9 2013, 03:44 PM	Learning Rock Star Posts: 718 Joined: 7-April 13	QUOTE (Darius Wave @ Dec 9 2013, 09:56 AM) It's a very cool idea but something is missing for me. Maybe it's the "game of reverbs" that would compensate that there is not too many tracks - sort of trio mode at some moments. This could be also some not-interfering / disturbing pad in the background mixing. Also had a feeling of timming isses. Did You draw the drums or played them manually with the keyboard? Hey Darius I wrote them in piano roll in ez drummer then copied and pasted. I get the same feelings, too much going on at times. I played bass guitar on this which was hard to mix. Next time I play ill work on this Thanks man! You are at GuitarMasterClass.net Don't miss today's free lick. Plus all our lessons are packed with free content! Don't miss today's free blues, jazz & country licks. Plus all our lessons are packed with free content!

Darius Wave View Member Profile	Dec 9 2013, 03:57 PM
Dec 9 2013, 03:57 PM	Instructor Posts: 5.871 Joined: 29-November 12 From: Poland	Just a free observations. It's not that it's very bad Jim Those were first things I felt by listening to it for the first time You are at GuitarMasterClass.net Don't miss today's free lick. Plus all our lessons are packed with free content! Don't miss today's free blues, jazz & country licks. Plus all our lessons are packed with free content! -------------------- Check out my lessons and my instructor profile www.facebook.com/DariusWave www.youtube.pl/vavrzyn www.niebonie.pl www.jammingcherry.pl www.facebook.com/druzyna.wawrzyna

gregc1 View Member Profile	Dec 9 2013, 04:08 PM
Dec 9 2013, 04:08 PM	Experienced Tone Seeker Posts: 540 Joined: 21-January 12 From: Florida, United States	I like the overall theme of the tune. I really love the very beginning with the acoustic/sitar sound playing on top of the slow, heavy riffing. You are at GuitarMasterClass.net Don't miss today's free lick. Plus all our lessons are packed with free content! Don't miss today's free blues, jazz & country licks. Plus all our lessons are packed with free content! --------------------

Jim S. View Member Profile	Dec 10 2013, 12:41 AM
Dec 10 2013, 12:41 AM	Learning Rock Star Posts: 718 Joined: 7-April 13	QUOTE (gregc1 @ Dec 9 2013, 11:08 AM) I like the overall theme of the tune. I really love the very beginning with the acoustic/sitar sound playing on top of the slow, heavy riffing. Greg Thanks yeah the beginning has some nice qualities, I'm gonna keep that feel in the intro and make a melody and tighten up the rest. See you around man You are at GuitarMasterClass.net Don't miss today's free lick. Plus all our lessons are packed with free content! Don't miss today's free blues, jazz & country licks. Plus all our lessons are packed with free content!

Vulpine View Member Profile	Dec 10 2013, 07:43 AM
Dec 10 2013, 07:43 AM	GMC:er Posts: 250 Joined: 6-May 12 From: Wilmington NC	first couple of seconds I thought Beethovan lol I like your tone and suddle phrase lines ur not playing too many unnesesary notes that someone like myself may sometimes do.. My advice sleep on this song ...see what you think it needs more or less of .. n sometimes you might come up with some more ideas you could add to this overall Piece Beethovan = ) But overall I like the Ideas you put in this track you've got a mean tone as I mentioned earlier especially the bass = ) Wicked great job mate You are at GuitarMasterClass.net Don't miss today's free lick. Plus all our lessons are packed with free content! Don't miss today's free blues, jazz & country licks. Plus all our lessons are packed with free content!

Jim S. View Member Profile	Dec 10 2013, 02:58 PM
Dec 10 2013, 02:58 PM	Learning Rock Star Posts: 718 Joined: 7-April 13	QUOTE (Vulpine @ Dec 10 2013, 02:43 AM) first couple of seconds I thought Beethovan lol I like your tone and suddle phrase lines ur not playing too many unnesesary notes that someone like myself may sometimes do.. My advice sleep on this song ...see what you think it needs more or less of .. n sometimes you might come up with some more ideas you could add to this overall Piece Beethovan = ) But overall I like the Ideas you put in this track you've got a mean tone as I mentioned earlier especially the bass = ) Wicked great job mate Hey Vulpine thanks a lot. I'm taking in a lot of advice here and going to rework it next practice session. I've had a bass guitar sitting around in my basement for years and never really touched it. Not sure why I haven't picked it up sooner, it makes writing music pretty fun. Id write a guitar track, lay bass down and then keep recording and let the bass decide where to go. Beethovan is a good name, ill have to work on the intro melody and incorporate a more baroque feel? You are at GuitarMasterClass.net Don't miss today's free lick. Plus all our lessons are packed with free content! Don't miss today's free blues, jazz & country licks. Plus all our lessons are packed with free content!

Gabriel Leopardi View Member Profile	Dec 10 2013, 05:09 PM
Dec 10 2013, 05:09 PM	Instructor Posts: 36.043 Joined: 3-March 07 From: Argentina	QUOTE (Jim Seekford @ Dec 8 2013, 09:32 PM) You are spot on, when I hear it I feel a sinking feeling toward the end. Patience always slips away when I write. I should spend more time with my projects. A melody would be nice maybe recurring too. I had a hard time playing lead over the chunky rhythm. Thanks for the feedback Cool, nice to know that my feedback helps. I hope to hear a new version of this song! You are at GuitarMasterClass.net Don't miss today's free lick. Plus all our lessons are packed with free content! Don't miss today's free blues, jazz & country licks. Plus all our lessons are packed with free content! -------------------- My lessons Do you need a Guitar Plan? Join Gab's Army Check my band:Cirse Check my soundcloud:Soundcloud Please subscribe to my:Youtube Channel

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