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post Mar 24 2014, 03:45 PM
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Ok, I tried something new for the middle part of my Gary Moore Tribute. It´s still not exactly the way I want it. Although the opening lick is going to stay!

https://soundcloud.com/jeroen-van-der-put/gmc-gary-moore-tribute-take3

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Darius Wave
post Mar 24 2014, 03:56 PM
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Very warm tone and nice touch my friend smile.gif


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post Mar 25 2014, 09:50 AM
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QUOTE (Jeroen @ Mar 24 2014, 12:45 PM) *
Thanks Gab, I'll work on it to make it stronger.


I think that if you follow Gabi's suggestions, you can improve your take even more! This one is already a lot better, so step by step, if you eliminate the repetitiveness you will obtain phrases which are more interesting. I've noticed a structural pattern, consisting in taking the same phrase and playing it further up the scale somehow with breaks in between - this is a very good idea, add a little more variation and you have it!

QUOTE (Jeroen @ Mar 24 2014, 02:45 PM) *
Ok, I tried something new for the middle part of my Gary Moore Tribute. It´s still not exactly the way I want it. Although the opening lick is going to stay!

https://soundcloud.com/jeroen-van-der-put/gmc-gary-moore-tribute-take3


Hmmm, the intention is good, but the fast phrase is a bit blurry. I would stick to the previous version and try Gabi's suggestions on it wink.gif I think it's more musical than this one smile.gif

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post Mar 25 2014, 02:09 PM
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QUOTE (Sensible Jones @ Mar 24 2014, 10:03 AM) *
Thanks Gab, I'm working on trying to get a bit more definition/articulation into those runs. If I can't get it to my liking I may redo it with a more melodic approach!!
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QUOTE (Cosmin Lupu @ Mar 25 2014, 05:50 AM) *
Hmmm, the intention is good, but the fast phrase is a bit blurry. I would stick to the previous version and try Gabi's suggestions on it wink.gif I think it's more musical than this one smile.gif



I'm with Cosmin regarding the new take Jeroen.


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post Mar 25 2014, 03:02 PM
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QUOTE (Cosmin Lupu @ Mar 25 2014, 09:50 AM) *
I think that if you follow Gabi's suggestions, you can improve your take even more! This one is already a lot better, so step by step, if you eliminate the repetitiveness you will obtain phrases which are more interesting. I've noticed a structural pattern, consisting in taking the same phrase and playing it further up the scale somehow with breaks in between - this is a very good idea, add a little more variation and you have it!

Hmmm, the intention is good, but the fast phrase is a bit blurry. I would stick to the previous version and try Gabi's suggestions on it wink.gif I think it's more musical than this one smile.gif


QUOTE (Gabriel Leopardi @ Mar 25 2014, 02:09 PM) *
Excellent! smile.gif

I'm with Cosmin regarding the new take Jeroen.


Thanks guys, I'll work on it and come back with an improved version next week.


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post Mar 25 2014, 09:36 PM
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Some constructive criticism? smile.gif


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post Mar 25 2014, 10:07 PM
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Take 3!!
https://soundcloud.com/neilwaller/gary-moore-happy-take-3
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post Mar 25 2014, 10:13 PM
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QUOTE (Caelumamittendum @ Mar 25 2014, 09:36 PM) *
Some constructive criticism? smile.gif

Very good take!! maybe some blank spaces needed IMO but it's only a matter of taste....


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post Mar 26 2014, 09:57 AM
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QUOTE (Caelumamittendum @ Mar 25 2014, 08:36 PM) *


Some constructive criticism? smile.gif


I'd change nothing! Those chromatic slurs are very, very nice! smile.gif Looks like the attic is pumping in some good inspiration, right? biggrin.gif

QUOTE (Sensible Jones @ Mar 25 2014, 09:07 PM) *


Ha! Good balance and touch in a rock/blues approach smile.gif I think this one can stay, man!

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post Mar 26 2014, 11:13 AM
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QUOTE (Procyon @ Mar 18 2014, 07:12 PM) *
Hey guys, this is what I am working on... hm - not sure about the ending. What do you think?

https://soundcloud.com/pro-cyon/gmcmoorecollab-by-procyon



Tasty stuff man! Ending is ok - good cooperation with backing and will nicely lead into another solo smile.gif Well done smile.gif Only things that took my attention are a few under-pitched bends at the ending part. Nice to have Your again within the collaboration dudes biggrin.gif

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Some constructive criticism? smile.gif



Good one. You have a good taste my friend. Of course like huargo said - for some peeps it might more pleasan't to have some breath/breaks inside but as an exmaple of root blues combined with some modern stuff it's a complete take and I would go for it.


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post Mar 26 2014, 12:03 PM
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QUOTE (Caelumamittendum @ Mar 25 2014, 09:36 PM) *


Some constructive criticism? smile.gif


Might be the way it was recorded, but it might be interesting to experiment a bit with the dynamics.
For example, picking softly at the beginning and building up the intensity by picking really hard somewhere in the middle, towards the end of the solo to build climax. Overall, it is a very cool take.


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QUOTE (gregc1 @ Mar 20 2014, 06:16 PM) *
Hell yeah man. That tone is KILLER.

I'm very partial to that signature Strat sound. cool.gif



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Moorish or not, piece of great job biggrin.gif


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post Mar 26 2014, 04:18 PM
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QUOTE (Cosmin Lupu @ Mar 26 2014, 08:57 AM) *
Ha! Good balance and touch in a rock/blues approach smile.gif I think this one can stay, man!

That's what I was thinking too!! biggrin.gif
Right, now to get my slow one sorted!!
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QUOTE (Sensible Jones @ Mar 26 2014, 03:18 PM) *
That's what I was thinking too!! biggrin.gif
Right, now to get my slow one sorted!!
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Sure thing man! I see you are more and more methodical on your takes smile.gif Or you're just enjoying this one more than the others so far? biggrin.gif


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post Mar 27 2014, 04:03 PM
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Hello guys, Here is my take hope you guys enjoy this as much as i did!!!!
https://www.dropbox.com/sh/oxnt31ko35xkhch/C_m15FVG-P

https://soundcloud.com/rickynine/garymoorecolab-mp3


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QUOTE (Cosmin Lupu @ Mar 27 2014, 09:49 AM) *
Sure thing man! I see you are more and more methodical on your takes smile.gif Or you're just enjoying this one more than the others so far? biggrin.gif

I wouldn't say I'm enjoying this one any more than the others but I've had a little more time to work on it than usual so, as you say, I've been able to be a bit more methodical. Also, on the others I didn't share my sketch takes to start with so I've enjoyed the feedback that that has brought.
And now I present the Sensible Slow One:-
https://soundcloud.com/neilwaller/gary-moore-sad-final-take
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post Mar 28 2014, 01:29 PM
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Wel well. Neil is highly inspired those days biggrin.gif

QUOTE (Ricky9 @ Mar 27 2014, 04:03 PM) *
Hello guys, Here is my take hope you guys enjoy this as much as i did!!!!
https://www.dropbox.com/sh/oxnt31ko35xkhch/C_m15FVG-P

https://soundcloud.com/rickynine/garymoorecolab-mp3



Now that was nice Ricky! smile.gif I like You sense of melody. Only tip I could give here is Your take lacks a bit of colors. You ae able to create very touching melodies but You could sepnd some more time on polishing them. There are a lot of tools available

1. different vibrato speed and depth
2. Bend and prebens have a few different aproaches - different tempo, different rhythm of bending for example
3. Slides
4. Different picking strength


All those things add colos, important details that are hidden but makes the solo sound pros. If You have andy free time maybe You could add some extra flavour to You take? The melody is very good. It's not about changing notes. It's only about addin much more details to it smile.gif'


In blues it's not the numebr of the notes but the magic of articulation and dynamics which makes it so emotional and full of flavour smile.gif

Anyway well done smile.gif Very nice take smile.gif


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QUOTE (Caelumamittendum @ Mar 25 2014, 05:36 PM) *


Some constructive criticism? smile.gif


It's a very good take man! Your playing is very precise and the licks fit great over the backing.

Some comments that come to mind and that can give ideas:

1. Your tone has too much drive and it makes difficult to get good dynamics.
2. There is a main / defined melody lacking.
3. This is a blues backing, I would add here and there some more "pentatonic style" licks with angry, longer bends.
4. The first half is more interesting than the second. I think that there is nothing new happening in the second half compared with the amazing first one.


That's all! I hope that it gives ideas. By the way, the take is good and will fit great in the collab!

QUOTE (Ricky9 @ Mar 27 2014, 12:03 PM) *
Hello guys, Here is my take hope you guys enjoy this as much as i did!!!!
https://www.dropbox.com/sh/oxnt31ko35xkhch/C_m15FVG-P

https://soundcloud.com/rickynine/garymoorecolab-mp3



Nice take! Darius gave good feedback and ideas to improve this one. There is something weird happening to me with your take.. I find your compositions and guitar melodies at Creativity workouts much deeper than this take. Did you focus too much on scales and playing instead of feeling when you created this solo?

QUOTE (Sensible Jones @ Mar 27 2014, 06:08 PM) *
I wouldn't say I'm enjoying this one any more than the others but I've had a little more time to work on it than usual so, as you say, I've been able to be a bit more methodical. Also, on the others I didn't share my sketch takes to start with so I've enjoyed the feedback that that has brought.
And now I present the Sensible Slow One:-
https://soundcloud.com/neilwaller/gary-moore-sad-final-take
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Another great take from you! There is nothing to improve on this one, it sounds very good. smile.gif


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QUOTE (Darius Wave @ Mar 28 2014, 12:29 PM) *
Wel well. Neil is highly inspired those days biggrin.gif

There must have been a full Moon recently!! biggrin.gif biggrin.gif

QUOTE (Gabriel Leopardi @ Mar 28 2014, 01:31 PM) *
Another great take from you! There is nothing to improve on this one, it sounds very good. smile.gif

Thanks Gab!!
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QUOTE (Darius Wave @ Mar 28 2014, 08:29 AM) *
Wel well. Neil is highly inspired those days biggrin.gif




Now that was nice Ricky! smile.gif I like You sense of melody. Only tip I could give here is Your take lacks a bit of colors. You ae able to create very touching melodies but You could sepnd some more time on polishing them. There are a lot of tools available

1. different vibrato speed and depth
2. Bend and prebens have a few different aproaches - different tempo, different rhythm of bending for example
3. Slides
4. Different picking strength


All those things add colos, important details that are hidden but makes the solo sound pros. If You have andy free time maybe You could add some extra flavour to You take? The melody is very good. It's not about changing notes. It's only about addin much more details to it smile.gif'


In blues it's not the numebr of the notes but the magic of articulation and dynamics which makes it so emotional and full of flavour smile.gif

Anyway well done smile.gif Very nice take smile.gif



QUOTE (Gabriel Leopardi @ Mar 28 2014, 09:31 AM) *
It's a very good take man! Your playing is very precise and the licks fit great over the backing.

Some comments that come to mind and that can give ideas:

1. Your tone has too much drive and it makes difficult to get good dynamics.
2. There is a main / defined melody lacking.
3. This is a blues backing, I would add here and there some more "pentatonic style" licks with angry, longer bends.
4. The first half is more interesting than the second. I think that there is nothing new happening in the second half compared with the amazing first one.


That's all! I hope that it gives ideas. By the way, the take is good and will fit great in the collab!




Nice take! Darius gave good feedback and ideas to improve this one. There is something weird happening to me with your take.. I find your compositions and guitar melodies at Creativity workouts much deeper than this take. Did you focus too much on scales and playing instead of feeling when you created this solo?




Another great take from you! There is nothing to improve on this one, it sounds very good. smile.gif


Thanks for the input guys. I am going to try working on the things you guys pointed out.


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