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post Dec 3 2007, 11:33 PM
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I'm always unhappy with my lyrics, because I'm a bit perfectionist and always think mine are not worth nothing...So, I hope you enjoy reading as much as I enjoyed expressing my taughts the best I could

Forever in Chains
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This marks the first entry of my closed journal
The enchanted history that chases my steps
Surrounded by brick walls, a circle filled with regrets
Past images carved everywhere till the non-ending sky
I gaze upon a distant image, a dreamer
Such treachery to see what other have achieved
Still thirsty…still empty…
Still a believer

The strength of the prisoner has perished
Dusk is almost away to give room for other sides
Unwilling to sustain, this miserable solution
The rains that hide are the growing tides

His own words are forever chains
Haunted ghosts of the past that remains
He struggles on to break free of the cold
Time keeps passing, he keeps getting old

Unbearable the fire that freezes his hands
Burning once while making him paralyze
Wonders of differences between the sea and sands
Picturing his own perfection as the worst of men
All the oceans combined merged into his wave of thoughts
Endless imagination of impeccable Kings
Fighter and survivor he rushes to the shore of Gods
Trapped as he is in the world of sorrows

All the same ideas, yet you grown in wisdom
I’m falling into madness of being like your beauty
Fur filling my true desire, leaving my tears without a purpose

A paradox, of a prisoner in chains, that past that still remains
The unwanted life, full of lie
Rest assure, I won’t fight

Anymore


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Legato: Ben's Land Of Legato
Alternate Picking: Alternate Picking Workout #5
Chords: Chord Melody Technique

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The Uncreator
post Dec 4 2007, 11:57 PM
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Wow, these are good. Very vivid and detailed.

You did a great job with these.
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post Dec 5 2007, 12:04 AM
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I neglected to look at this one the other night! I very much regret that, this is much more solid than the other piece was! Very marked improvement in ideas and structure!

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Picturing his own perfection as the worst of men


I especially liked this line, I think we are all guilty in some way of seeing the best in ourselves yet never fullfilling it.

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His own words are forever chains


Good metaphor, our words are what people base us upon, our communication can be both a gift and a curse, words can tie people down.

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Fur filling my true desire, leaving my tears without a purpose


Quick correction, fur filling - I think you mean fulfilling, but thats just a small typo, nothing much to worry about.

Great man! cool.gif


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