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The Uncreator
post Dec 8 2007, 03:43 AM
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Well, this little story in my head has turned into a massive Sci-Fi/ Fantasy epic obsession of mine. Ive even made a story outline for the entire thing, or most of it anyway. Almost wrote a book laugh.gif anyway, got bored in Physics when we were going over homework i already knew, so i wrote an outline for the second part.


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Daughter Of The Universe

Chapter 2: Amidst Dying Stars
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(Clean)
Born of the sun
Born of the stars
A sister to the moons
Mother to all life
Daughter Of The Universe

Without hate
Without despair
She is the only one
Who can save us from our war

But her tears shed for a loss of hope
And she yearns for a tomorrow
A Tomorrow without our war

(Growls)
An unknown force
Across the galaxy
Feeds on there life
Making planets bleed

Killer of the Sun-Born
First life in the galaxy
An armada straight from hell
Burns out her sun
Leaving her to sleep

Forever more...

(Chorus, Clean Female)
Look to the sky
Look deep into the night
And I see no hope
For a better tomorrow
I’ve wept for century’s
Amidst dying stars ill sleep
Until my time arrives
The day of The Calamity

I feel so alone
I’m left with nothing
Not even hope
Regret the urge to lament
To Lament
The birth of my own kin

SOLO

(Growls)
Falling victim to this pain
I’ve felt I’ve done a sin
I lie here alone
Powerless
To help my own

I just want, to give up and die

(Chorus, Clean+Growls)
Look to the sky
Look deep into the night
And I see no hope
For a better tomorrow
I’ve wept for century’s
Amidst dying stars ill sleep
Until my time arrives
The day of The Calamity

SOLO

(Growls)
To ignite the sun
An offering of blood
Of the children and the mother



© Brett Windnagle 2007
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If anyone really wants to know, i could explain it. Or, i could post the Outline i made.

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post Jan 2 2008, 04:00 AM
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I'd like to know. This daughter of the universe idea is really cool.


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post Jan 2 2008, 04:52 AM
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Well here is a concept i came up with for the sun scrolls. Its supposed to be the notes of someone who has studied it.

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The Sun Scrolls
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July 3rd, 2321. CHF and Asurian archaeological teams are digging on a remote planet in an uncharted system. After weeks of nothing, they contemplate calling it off. Later that day, one of the mining lasers hits something it cannot penetrate. The teams investigate, the hand dig down a few feet an discover a faded gold wall. They keep digging down, for weeks, for months, and finally, they uncover all of it. A Massive pyramid constructed of an unknown metal. One of the team members discovers an entrance.

July 4th, 2321. The first team enter the pyramid. They discover a wondrous sight, gold, ivory, ebony structures and statues, who could of made such things? After hours of searching the pyramid, one of the Asurian teams discovers a giant room. Inside this room lay nothing save that of an Ivory altar. On that ivory altar sat suspended in air, was a golden box. The team hesitantly opens the box. A bright light consumes there view and when there eyes adjust, they are met with 5 scrolls. These 5 scrolls were inscribed with 5 names. Chapter of Birth, Chapter of Ascension, Chapter of Infiltration, Chapter Of War, and finally the last scroll, Chapter of Destruction.

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Chapter Of Birth

The Chapter of Birth describes the birth of the first child of the universe, mentioned only as the daughter. She is perfect, completely absent of flaw. After creating her world, she creates the galaxy’s, the planets, and the moon, giving birth to all life across the universe. She even creates the first intelligent beings, know as the Sun-Born. She watches in silence from her world, described only as a land of the brightest sun, and a forest of burning stars, for millennia as the first sentient beings evolve, her children growing right before her eyes. The only question left unanswered is, Who created her?

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Chapter Of Ascension

The Chapter Of Ascension describes the evolution of the Sun-Born throughout there life. They worship the being known as The Daughter, and live honestly and just. The Daughter watches over them, her touch on there lives so subtle they know not when she makes her move. For thousands of years, they live in peace.
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Chapter Of Infiltration

The Chapter of Infiltration seems to take a sudden turn for the worse. The Sun-Born seem to become more and more vicious. It gets to the point where there first war, in there entire existence, is declared. The Daughter, knowing it unwise to interfere and show herself, holds back. What could corrupt these people who have been so docile for thousands of years? The Daughter knew something was not right. She silently investigates the politics of the Sun-Born, and senses something dark in some of them, Something she did not create. Suddenly, while in deep thought in the Forest Of Burning Stars, she is covered is a paroxysm of pain. She looks to the Sun-Born and there distant planet, and a sight meets her eyes which burned its image into her mind. The planet, completely engulfed by flames, “What has happened?” is all she can think. Over the planet hovers a massive warship of unparalleled size. With a deafening roar, and a fleet of thousands of ships around the burning world, she feels pure malice and evil from these beings. Pain engulfing her, she is knocked unconscious.

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Chapter Of Desperation

Reader, from here things get worse. The Daughter is left in a fragile state of sorrow and frailty. What could have done such a thing to the Sun-Born, this was pure evil she faced, and something she had no hand in birthing. Where could beings come from that she could not see? Where in the universe could there be such a place to evolve? After searching the universe for an answer, she could find none to satisfy her. But the answer would come to her. She sits and thinks, amongst the burning stars as usual, still mourning for her first children, when the attack came. A nearby planet is shattered, split in half, another is engulfed by a massive mobile light, what seems to be a moving sun, and burned to nothingness. The same pain engulfs her as it did during the Sun-Born destruction, The Daughter fights back with all her might, using all the phenomena of space and time at her disposal: Gamma Ray Burst to Black Holes, the battle between The Daughter and The Unknown Beings Of Darkness continued for years upon years. The Daughter managed to drive them back to emptiness of the void they must occupy, but at a price. What she fought was no normal sentient being, No... this one had a creator different than the rest of the universe, But what could create something so evil. This creator visited her in the battle, blinded by darkness all she encountered was pain. She fought back and the barely visible being, massive in size she could tell, and immense in its power. She shatters the assailants armor, sending him back to the darkness of his world, but not before he burns out her sun, her source of power, the source of life for all the universe, she is left in her world of Burning Stars, weak and alone. Unable to guide the universe, they are left to walk alone.
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Chapter Of Destruction

No religious documents have ever had so gruesome and ending, and I firmly believe these to be religious documents of an ancient race. This last chapter is all that The Daughter learned about the Malevolent beings that attacked and nearly destroyed her. The following are her very own words.

“They are not of this world, not of this realm of existence. Created by something of pure evil and hate. They scavenge on the civilizations of my creation. They burn all in there path, draining resources of a planet in a matter of hours. They feed on the life of others. They have left me powerless to help my children, they have extinguished my sun. Unless my sun is restored, they will be led astray by the influence of the Malevolent Ones. If these writing reach My children, search for me amongst the Brightest Sun, now burned out, amidst a Forest of eternally Burning stars, on the last planet, I wait. Restore the sun with my blood, and I will awake from my slumber, Before they return.”

The writings end here, And on an ominous note. I feel that the Malevolent Ones are real, and that they soon shall return. We must do something before this becomes reality, But who will believe me?

--Doctor Shepard

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That's pretty cool!

I would definitely buy that book if I read that summary of it! When will you write it ???


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post Jan 3 2008, 12:17 AM
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Well its not a book really, its a massive outline for a bunch of songs im writing, the outline is already about 65-70 pages though tongue.gif
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QUOTE (The Uncreator @ Jan 2 2008, 11:17 PM) *
Well its not a book really, its a massive outline for a bunch of songs im writing, the outline is already about 65-70 pages though tongue.gif


Maybe start writing a book and post each chapter in a blog? I'd read it for sure smile.gif


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Hmmm, That would be pretty cool. maybe i might do that smile.gif
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Let me know if you're going to. smile.gif


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That's very interesting Uncreator! sounds like a really epic story! smile.gif


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I try to make it as Epic as possible smile.gif
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After all, Epic is (or should be) your middle name biggrin.gif


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The 'Epic' Uncreator biggrin.gif


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Epic actually isnt my middle name....








































I'm too Epic for it ph34r.gif
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QUOTE (The Uncreator @ Jan 3 2008, 05:55 PM) *
Epic actually isnt my middle name....
I'm too Epic for it ph34r.gif


rolleyes.gif tongue.gif

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This one has been updated as well, with lyrical changes smile.gif
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Good and epic as always! smile.gif Keep us updated on this project of yours biggrin.gif


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