Hey Brian! I can definitely see improvement, although I know you can do better
let's point out some important aspects:
1) the guitar volume should be higher
2) your timing is still faulty in some spots - can you tap your foot to the ground when playing? It should activate a thing called the internal clock
it will seem a bit complicated at first, but believe me, it will work wonders on your timing senses
Should we try one more take? Perhaps even slower?