Hi Nether !
I agree also with what the guys said about timing and bending. One other thing to take note of is this :
Sometimes you slide to a note and then pick it slightly afterwards, instead of moving to the note and picking simultaneously. This gives an un-synchronised sound so practised shifting positions and making sure that the pick hits the string the same time as the note lands. It's a tiny fix but you will find it transforms your playing. A lot of people do it, it's quite common but it's easy to fix
The rest of it is great, you're on the right path.