Gab got all points here. From the good things - it all sound quite pleasant and would not make me leave the room if I were at your concert
But treated as a lesson we need to capture every detail that could be fixed. Most of all - every single articulation mark in tabs (mainly in gp or pdf tabs) is important. Articulation is whole the magic in our playing
Always make sure you do your best to prepare the lesson exactly the way it was written/showed in original videos.
I' not sure is this a matter of your guitar sustain problems or your fingers - please recheck this cause you loose sustain of most of the notes that shoul ring much longer. Turn of any noise gate if tehre is one plugged in. I have nothing to complain about the color of your tone (frequency response). It nicely fits the track.
When doing vibrato try to move your finger more like "around" the string - micro bends upowards and downwards so you always cross the "perfect pitch point". What you do now is you slightly bend and then vibrate the note which is already above the right pitch.