Hi man, it's time to tackle those barre chords, eh?
This is a good attempt and you seem generally quite adept at these shapes. There's only some minor points to note:
-Tuning. I'm not sure if you've got a chorus effect on your signal or if you're playing over Bear's guitar and the two of you are not 100% in tune together? Either way, something sounds off there
-That chord. You know the one
Something isn't correct there so re-check the tab for that one.
-Timing. You're pretty good in this respect. It's just a few cases of rushing ahead.
Overall, nothing offensive going on, you should be pleased!